Sunrise Over Britain
By Bobmin
Better and better. wow! Who knew Hermione could screw things up so badly?
i thought it was "little whinging," not "whining" [or however it's spelled], and i realize that this comment corresponds with a previous chapter, but i was under the impression that ted tonks was
a muggle, not a wizard...
nice story guys.
Nevermind...hehe I thought this had already happened when I asked didn't Dudley already die and yea... I guess I skipped ahead and all of that! Woops my bad, now I'm sure your thinkin I'm an even
bigger ditz, no contest, I am~hehe.
Thanks for the delicious chappies you've given us!
Stephanie
“SIR! His Sneakiness, Commander Draco Black"
Sweet Jesus on a pogo stick. That is the single funniest line I've ever read in any Fic. Very well done. I just wish I'd found this when it was new.
Before i read this chapter i just have to say "Oh My God poor Amy, What did she ever do to you?" your disclaimers are cruel and wicked and evil and twisted and i love them :-D
I've seen the notion of muggles making potions before. Seems rather strange to me. I suppose it could be, if it's just the ingredients that are magical. But I suspect that the wizard/witch imparts
something to the process, as well. Are all the mismade potions in class simply the result of not following the instructions? And why don't we find muggles selling magical potions (oh, that's
why Ephedra had to be pulled off the market, it was a potion that only worked properly on magical people)?
'bounding' should be bonding
Why does Arthur stare in confusion about comic books? His son reads 'The Adventures of Marvin the Mad Muggle,' a Wizarding comic book, after all.
I love Dan's hostile lawn chairs, perhaps his BBQ Grill will be fire-breathing.
'turn it over to Michael O'Dalley' -- isn't that kind-of-an-awkward way to refer to someone who sitting right there?
Ok, so Gunny is an example of "Be careful what you wish for . . ."
'Dan said calmly before she vanished' -- Dan had a sex change? or do you mean Danni?
Well, hysterical Hermione. The real error in judgment (yes, even beyond Hermione's overreacting), though, was not removing Miles from command -- his unwillingness to listen to Caleb's caution was the
real flub. I guess something had to go wrong after the success of Azkaban, and this worked pretty well (even if it is one of the weaker points of the story -- everyone (Harry, Hermione, Miles, Harry
again) going off half-cocked (especially after the repeated points to plan things out)). What I can't help wonder about is how long the Death Eaters and Dudley just sat at Privet Drive waiting for
Harry -- Lucius' letter is presumably the one lost for a couple days in the mail room. That's the part that really doesn't work for me -- 'Okay, you miserable snakes, you will sit there until the day
after next Christmas waiting for Potter to show up. CRUCIO.'
It WAS a very, fun (though a bit anxious) read; so please don't take my comments in the wrong way (or the right way for that matter).
I love your house elf name Dilly! Nobody can come up with good ones, it seems. This is the first one I saw that I thought fit.
Just some things to ponder
While reading reviews
If everything tastes like chicken, what does chicken taste like?
Why is abbreviation so long?
Why is phonetics not6 spelled the way it sounds?
Why do Kamikaze pilots wear helmets?
If a cow laughs, does milk come out of its nose?
Why do 24-hour gas stations have locks?
Why do gas station bathrooms have locks on the doors;are they afraid someone will clean them?
Very good story. I definitely know that I'm not this good a writer.
I was rereading this story again and was looking over the AN and disclaimer of this chapter. The description of Dumbles' outfit reminded me of this picture. It made me laugh when I first saw it, and had to go grubbing around in my PC to find where I got the
pic from.
This story, as always, is awesome and I can't wait until you update. Wonderful work on a humorous description of the man we love to hate.
-Ravenfur
I don't think Remus was right in completely blaming Hermione. It was extremely unlikely that Harry would've gone, but what was she supposed to think when he blocked the link completely. She had no idea what he was doing, where he was at. She was afraid. Frankly, Miles is more to blame than her. He's supposed to be a leader, a tactician...and his orders are ultimately what caused the disaster. And furthermore, Caleb knew Miles was making a mistake....he could've refused....called for a brotherhood member to counteract any irresponsible orders Miles gave.
I find this story fascinating. For a moment I thought the mistake you mentioned Voldemort had made was because the blood he used for the scepter originated from Harry.
My only question at the moment is about Peeves: has he found more poltegeists to help him or was he split into several geists by the killing curse?
I'm loving this story so far. As a Norwegian, I especially liked the reference to Quisling... a rather nasty piece of work. Although it was worry *this* time, I hope Hermione will end-up pacing
due to pregnancy eventually (as her parents suspected in this part). Keep up the great work.
Tiny nitpicking moment before I start cheering for all the action chapters: Little Whining should be Little Whinging. Now for the cheering: You had Dudley shoot Harry! (Yay! Proper injuries lead to lots of good heart wringing stuff.) Then you killed Dudley! (Yay! Do I really have to explain?) And then they yelled at Hermione! (Yay! Ditto.)
Thank you for finally bashing Hermione a little.
Okay... I agree that Hermione was stupid to bring the letter to Miles' attention, but Miles should have waited until Harry told him what to do, and Caleb should have refused the order since he knew it would be a trap. Rule #1 of springing traps... Don't. Other than that little rant, good chapter.
^.^
Awesome chapter! can't wait for the next one!
hi, ive been reading this fan fic ever since the first one was posted on fanfiction.net, in other words, im obsessed, but im just wondering why dudley, who was training to kill harry for so long,
didnt shoot a head shot? that way, if the worst had happened, like him getting shot by 4 killing curses, harry would end up dead.
-dave :D
Good job on this last chapter!!! One thing I noticed though is that Little Whining is spelt Little Whinging. Keep Writing.
~stellameissa
Very action-packed. I love the way the two of you write the action scenes. They really are excellent. Your version of Luna is a gem. I like the canon Luna anyways,but the Sunrise Luna is a hoot.
As much as I am a fan of your battle/action scenes, one of the best moments to date in Sunrise has to be Hermione's commeupance at the end of the chapter. Remus' comments were angry and to the point. Everyone makes mistakes, but for such a smart character - the running to the rescue of Dudley was tactically idiotic...and yet, somehow very much in context with your Hermione. Wizards would place very little value on doing "the christian thing". Look at all the killing in the name of God (any variety of him/her will do). Go Remus for spelling the problem of Christianity and Wizarding world. They can live in combination but they are not natural bedfellows if you want to call witches/wizards evil and satanic without considering the persons actions first. It also sort of shows the elder Grangers' concept of being magical as different from how the other magical people see it - I just get the feeling that Dan and Emma look at the magic as a new sort of technology. They can do new, cool things, but it does not change what they believe on the inside.
I will stop now. This had the potential of turning into an even more longwinded review/beginnings of religion vs wizard