Sunrise Over Britain
By Bobmin
I enjoy your stories, but your sarcasm about other authors is a it hypocritical. I don't know if anyone has pointed out to you the difference between "your" and "you're". "You're" is a contraction for "you are", but this still does not give "your" the same meaning. And, this mistake happens quite frequently - not just an occasional error.
I am truely dissapointed... no kitchen sink in this chapter.... shame shame shame...
I don't know what I like more, the actual story, or the disclaimer and notes for each chapter....
omg he is such a loser, please tell me he dies of extreme diahrea from one of the twins pranks...god
Will Draco learn to do elf magic??????
My favorite line: "Just how many pieces do you want to be buried in?”
Luna rocks indeed! Good Heavens you had me cracking up! What a blast!
This was good but are all the girls pregnant or is it just Susan's cravings effecting them?
i just had a thaght, and i know that Harry's leg needs to be for ever bad for your plot but how coms Hermine hasnt sugested an MRI on his leg as it is entierly possible muggle surgery could fix it, after all we can rip out our own crappy bone knees and incert pritty plastic ones
My only complaint so far is that you let DD die too easily. This is the same mistake that JK made in book 6. Next, you and she will let Moldie have a quick and painless death. When you count the
number of people who have died (and, as of canon book 6, are still dying), the only difference between Moldie and DD is one takes an active part and one just lets it happen. I certainly hope that
your Lion-man is allowed a slow and painful death.
You also left out several good sex scenes from this chapter, not to mention Hermy's joy at getting sardines.
Excellent as always. You might want to correct this:
The two exchanged a glance, then met Luna's blue eyes. “We surrender!” the exclaimed in unison
to
The two exchanged a glance, then met Luna's blue eyes. “We surrender!” they exclaimed in unison
Also, though it might have been said before: MORE AMHAR!
Hesuse
Hey!!!!!!The stories are great!!!!
Have you thought about petitioning the crown for the complete removal of the Wizengamot and the institution of a Peoples Congress and judiciary?
For that mater, as the ministry in exile is on Harry's property, can't he dictate what can and won't fly?
OUTSTANDING STORY SO FAR!!!! This story rules and I can't wait to see what happens next. You two are great writers. I have a question that has been nagging me since I started reading Sunset are You(Bob and Alyx) married? ok I know its personal but I had to ask, you don't have to answer that question if you don't want to. The chapter was as entertaining as the Disclaimer and the Author's Notes at the end of the story. Update when you can please:):):):)
you say that magic cannot fix harry's existing leg why doesn't he just replace it with a new one like a magical metal one or what i would do cut the leg of replace the bone and regenerate the muscle tendons and ligaments and hey presto a new leg
I've just stumbled upon your story after reading many of the stories from the rest of the fanficauthors.net site here, and read Sunset over the weekend and caught up on Sunrise today -- I had more
difficulty putting my laptop down to walk away from your tale than I had putting down the last several of Ms. Rowling's tomes.
Well done. Very compelling.
A Review of the Author's Notes al la Bloopers:
And now... BLOOPERS!!!
You are my heir little loin, whatever way it has come to pass.
Sheesh... what can we say about this?
Well you COULD say that a little LOIN is how most HEIRS come about.
"Oh so the world revolves around the great James Potter!" Harry retorted ignoring the calls from his friends to shit down and be quiet.
Just out of curiosity, but is it possible to shit up? And is that optional?
I believe shitting UP occurs on the Space Shuttle and in the Space Station, which is why the gravity-less toilet requires that the shit hit the fan!
Hermione had to admit that Harry looked adorable that morning as his glasses weren’t quite on straight and his hair was stinking up even more than normal.
Harry, wash that hair. If it stinks enough for people to notice it... ewwww
Birdie, birdie in the sky......
One of the fowl specters swept up to Harry.
Here is a dementor attack that was written by the Great Gonzo.
The ghost of turkeys past.....
After Hermione nodded in the affirmative, Harry started by kissing her passionately, he then trailed kisses down her chin, her neck, passed her color-bone, until he reached the valley between
Hermione’s breasts.
Obviously this writer is a med student drop out.
And I'm sure he wanted to use his color-bone on her.... until she turned pretty colors, too.
Another great chapter. Balir's rescue was well writ. I wondered what would happen to a muggle during portkey travel, as it affects Harry so much. In most of my fics, I have them getting violently
ill. (I also don't like portkeys.)
Side note: Why does portkey travel affect Harry so badly, when Ron who is a pureblood, and Hermione who is muggleborn, are not adversly affected. It cannot be a problem with his internal balance, or
he wouldn't be so good on a broom. (Just wondering.
Colonel McHardy has a hard job ahead. i've done that kind of extended partol. Captain Hanover is in for some major trouble. (Always expect trouble and if it don't come, breathe a sigh of
relief.)
Luna's performance was absolutely the topper! I almost feel sorry for Cour De leon...
almost. She answers every question completely honestly. Hell, it wasn't HER fault he couldn't possibly understand.
As always, I eagerly await the next installment of 'Sunrise'. I shall stay tuned. Same Bat-time, same Bat-channel. Alorkin
Eh, Amhar is really annoying. He needs to be neutered, and given a good dose of drugs. He'd probably be more useful staring at bright colors in the sky than with control of his limited mental facilities... Anyways, keep up the good work and update soon please!
Once again you guys have an amazing chapter. I love reading this story.
I found a funny blooper from another story.
“He is suffering from extreme emancipation, a few miss healed and still healing bones, and a mild fever from infections.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2818773/1/
Chapter 22 beginning, paragraph 4:
While it was all excellent news for Mr. Blair, it left him with several undeniable facts. The first was that the fact of his country rested in the hands of a group of...
Just noticed that...
Wonderful story!