Sunrise Over Britain
By Bobmin
I reread this and find myself laughing occasionally at how brilliant AND stupid Amelia Bones is. "We're invoking the COuncil of Avalon - why don't you trust that nothing will happen?" "We need to
talk about what you can and can't do." She basically wants him in politics the same way that Fudge did - rubber-stamp her proposals and be quiet the rest of the time.
I was both happy and sad when this was done - moreso than I was with the source material ending.
Hey Bob and Alyx, been catching up on your story, and i want to congratulate you on your great story. I especially like the great military detail. Some of it seems a little sketchy, such as the
A-10 Warthog (its not a Navy plane, so where was it launched? Ireland? Norway? It doesn't matter much, but it sticks out a little). other than that, you either did a lot of research or have some
military backround -- major props in either case.
While your knowlegde of the military is very good, your knowledge (or should I say, the healer's knowledge) of modern medicine and medical practice seems very very scanty in comparison, especially in
the field of anesthesia. For example, why didnt Neville's bed have wheels? I suppose it's not something someone without hospital experience might think about, but patient's beds need to be able to
move. Also, it seems silly that Harry had to resort to some old forgotten Celtic spell just to make Ginny's leg numb. It seems to me like a collection of the best healers in the world would be able
to do something-- I know any anesthiologist in the US could have. I did like that Susan got that potion for her labor though. So many fanfics are so dumb when it comes to childbirth. On further
reflection, in most fanfics, authors stick with the accepted idea that wizards are ignorant and suspicious of Muggle medical technique.
Really, this all is a very minor point when it comes to your entire work, which I have enjoyed immensely. I just wanted to point out that the medical sections are incongruous with the military
section when it comes to accuracy and detail. If you ever decide to go back and edit (which would be a monumental task, I admit), that is one area that probably merits some attention.
Please feel free to ignore me, if it so suits you. It won't bother me. After all, you are the excellent writer, and I am the grateful reader.
I figure I'm leaving this comment late enough in this story not to get an author backlash. I'm an avid Harry/Ginny fan and you have done them proud in some of your stories. Yes, I will download this to a CD, as I have your other works. Be it known that if I hear the words "My heart", or "My beloved" again in the next decade, I may scream. Your pairings were ones we would never think of (Drayco and LUNA??) but you made them work, just as you made the story work...lol, even for a Harry/Ginny shipper (who the hell thought UP that term?)
Amazing. Simply amazing.
PLEASE, dont use German if you have no idea what you are writing. "Die Lesestift" is as silly as "the readpen" would be to you.
Awesome chapters.
AWESOME CHAPTER! I hope this isn't where your going to leave us.
Hands Bob a cocktail of health drink. Doesn't taste too bad, and gives a bunch of cocktails for Bob to take later. Harry and Neville should get around to wrestling in real life. I'm surprised that Harry didn't get a new leg. How long would the new leg last, if the castor of said leg dies? Just how many people would be getting new and permanent limbs by this spell?
Great chapter!
What is going to be done to FRANCE? I know the Council of Avalon disenfrachised the French Ministry, but now that the other countries are involved in cleaning up Britain, what are they going they do about France?
Smart Harry, thinking of making Ginny a new leg like that! Good to see an idea of Voldemort's to do wrong actually being used to make things better.
Also, I loved the way you showed Neville's grandmother. Her disgusted disregard for Arthur's concern about the state secret "entity" made me laugh.
I enjoyed the chapter muchly!
Great story! I really have enjoyed it a lot! I just have one question though. With all the trouble Harry has with staying on his leg for long periods of time; Hasn't anyone ever heard of a
WHEELCHAIR!?!?!?
It's good enough for Professor Xavier so I don't see where Harry would have a problem with it.
For that matter, they could even enchant a normal chair to float at Harry's direction, like a broom. Heck, they could do the same with a few pairs of pants! How convenient would that be? That would
give a new meaning to "Flying by the seat of your pants."
Am I the only one who sees obvious solutions to common problems?
Thanks again for the wonderful story!
- Fyrecat
Dear another ride and the end of the adventure.
Hope that you would write a chapter or two then.
How quickly would the muggle army move to conquest the rest of the country?. Would Harry also be acclaimed by this muggles counterpart?
Poor Harry would be able to go inconito in London anymore?.
Glad that Voldy is gone for real now
This has been a great story. I can't wait for whatever you write next. My only quibble with it is that it's so well written I want my kid and foster kids to read it just to see some very well
written fan fic, but I can't let them. Oh well, next year the eldest can start Sunset. And the years after that, the others.
Thanks again for the well crafted, interesting, and well written story.
good chapter update soon
It's... I mean... Could... That's...
Let me start again.
WOW!!!
(I'd use more exclamations but three should be sufficient to get my point across!!!!)
Fantastic. This story has made it to the top of my reading list. I would hope you spend more time on the story for a couple more chapters anyway. I'm on my knees grovelin' here, man! Have them route
out holdouts, those in hiding, and sympathizers such as Orla Quirke's rotten uncle.
Obviously you cannot simply tie up all loose ends as this story would then be twice as long as it is now. But I can hope can't I?
That being said, what's next on the horizon? Or better yet, how long until it is posted?
Seriously, this has been one hell of a ride. Absolutely fantastic. If only book 7 could be as good or as engaging. Time will tell.
Steve
finally managed to get caught up on the chapters I havent had time to read.
It is sad to see that this great story is coming to an end, but all good things must at some point end I guess.
Anyway you both have done a very good job, and every chapter has been well worth reading.
Great stuff, as always. I've enjoyed also many of the recommendations you've included in authors notes, so hope it's OK if I enclose one here that H/Hr shippers will enjoy. Vox Corporis by MissAnnThropic is quite a nice read.


thank you for mentioning the 4th Infantry Div. (The Ironhorse Division). I was born on their post some 45 years ago, and their mention brings up pleasant memories of Colorado and home.