Sunrise Over Britain

Impressive story, I really enjoyed reading it and I'm looking forward to reading more of your writing.

I have just dinished reading through this monster for the 5th or 6th time. It is definately on my "to be re-read" list. Thanks to both of you for all of your hard work in producing this claasic for us.
I also frequently read and re-read all of your other stories, and they are all wonderful.
I got a big box of chocolate creame donuts nere for Bob, and if Alyx doesn't let you have them. then she wound get her life-sized Snape blow-up doll. Regards, Patrick

Overall a good story, if rather dark for my usual tastes.

Some things I didn't like:

* Soul destroying rituals and daggers.

I don't like the concept that souls exist, but can be destroyed, by itself anyway but you were also inconsistent.
You reference captured souls being freed when the dementor leader was killed - but the dagger with 'dementor effect' didn't release anything when it was destroyed.

* the 'conflicting prophecy' plot device.

This was particularly weak. Given how vague the original Trelawney prophecy was it seems odd how certain they were that Voldemort had to become as powerful as Harry before he could be defeated. It would have been a more logical way of delaying things to just go by the Granger prophecies. The vital line in Trelawney's oracle was "~ Dark Lord will mark him as his equal". It's all about what the Dark lord does to Harry, and doesn't really fit the Dark Lord having to get more powerful himself before the final battle.

Huge story that manage to keep a good rythm all the way. It takes some times reading so don't engage if you are too busy beause you won't want to eave it alone until the end.

Lots of thanks to the authors.

fucking auwsome

Bob & Alyx, thank you for writing this rather insane but wonderful pair of stories. I am rather new to the world of HP fic, having only read the books for the first time last summer, but am quite enjoying it. I spent the last two weeks reading Sunset and Sunrise, forgetting to go to sleep until the early hours of the morning on an almost nightly basis. I'd complain about that, and blame you for it, but it seems as though people have tried that before, and failed. Not only did I love the story itself, but your notes and disclaimers almost seemed to have a mind of their own.
The only character who truly disturbed me was Snape and his use of Cho. War is war, and I've studied war, read other war stories, and watched way too many violent movies, but his perversion caused me to flinch. Not much does that to me these days, thanks to regular stream of cop shows and two violent film courses as an undergraduate.
So, thank you again for giving me something to do with what is obviously too much time on my hands. My boyfriend has been away for the last week, and in that time finished these two stories, although I did start them a couple of days before he left.

Why didn't you fix Harry's leg? How dare you leave a main character blemished at the end of a fic! Don't you know that super-Harry = invincible?

I hope my sarcasm was recognizable.

Rachel

hey, this is really good! at first i thought it was going to be long and annoying (plus im so not a h/hr fan) and then i turned round and thought 'wow!' i was also almost more interested in the notes - i agree with practically all of your pet peeves except the chapter length thing. i reckon, if done deliberately, different chapter lengths can affect the mood in the same way we use different sentence lengths.
if you wanted another SoB you could always use 'solstice', but i'm not sure what you'd write. and i thought the first potter daughter was going to be called alison for that girl who died. but, really, i loved it. =)
(i'm not sure that review made sense)
(on the other hand, i think it made more sense than bob)
ruth =)

I see lots of petty people here, especially at the end, carping about the few typos and slip ups that crept into your work. I notice NONE of them give you a path to any of their stories where they show you how to write 6,500 words, much less 650,000+ words of story, and make 0 errors.

The fact is that JKR AND all her highly paid editors at ALL of her multiple publishers let about as many mistakes per thousand words enter the canon books as you guys do, working on your own, and for free.

Some of them try to demand perfection .... "Well, ya' know, folks, when you start PAYING for the product THEN you can gripe about the quality".

The fact is that Bob and Alex, and all the other authors on FFA.net, maintain a VERY high level of quality, compared to even commercially published fiction, much less most Fan Fiction. And if you are so unhappy, what are you doing reading it in the first place?

If you have so little of importance to occupy your time that you need to invest it in nit picking their stories, then rest assured, WE know how pathetic YOUR life really is.

Ravenclaw

Yet again you have left me astounded, what an epic tale of the "Potter clan"
I wish you many donuts
Jeff

First off let me say thanks for giving me such a well crafted, well thought out and complete story to read. I’ve spent the last 5 nights staying up till 3am because I couldn’t stop with this story. I’m going to try and give you a few decent comments for all the enjoyment you’ve given me.
I really enjoyed your whole story arc from beginning to end. It was well planned and executed very nicely.
Super Harry: I like that you gave him so much power but he still needed help from others because he wasn’t powerful enough. I wasn’t thrilled with his reading and retention ability at first, because it seemed you were going to follow the path of everyone else and just give him one thing after the other. But, after a while this really grew on me, because he needed a way to increase his knowledge as quickly as his power to face Voldemort. I was a fan of him not having an animagus form and I was also a fan of Him not having a leg that worked at 100%. It kept him human.
Dumbledore: Of all the characters, Ron, Molly, and Dumbledore, that you turned into Harry’s enemies, this one was the easiest to believe. I felt he was made to be just a bit too stupid through most of Sunset, but in Sunrise, you did a better job of showing us that he was going or had already gone mad. And not mad like the Weasley twins, but really not in charge of his faculties anymore mad.
Ron and Molly: The change in them from the end of book five to Sunset was just too much of a jump. Molly had never shown anything against Harry at that point, and even though Ron had his moments previously, he’d seemed to mellow quite a bit by the end of book five. And your Ron was too unable to control himself from letting his hatred of Harry show in Sunset as compared to what we saw before that. It’s almost like he went mad himself from the time of the Department of Mysteries fiasco to the start of Sunset.
The final battle: It seemed almost too easy. But then Harry had been planning for two years how he was going to take back the school and the country where as Voldemort had not really even considered that he might need some kind of plan or training for his men to hold the country once he’d taken it. I know there were tons hundreds of deaths and casualties for the Light in the battle, but it felt too clean to me.
Voldemort: He was too incapable, too uncunning, too not smart enough, too unknowledgeable enough to have reached the point he did. His knowledge of magic was supposed to be unparalleled but for Dumbledore, and quite honestly, he just seemed like he didn’t know anything about anything to me. I agree with you that JKR’s book 6 and 7 were a wash. I didn’t like the horcruxes. Actually, I didn’t like the idea that defeating Voldemort was reduced to a scavenger hunt that left him vulnerable to being killed by anyone, not just Harry. And once Harry had sacrificed himself in book 7, Voldemort really could have been taken by anyone who got in a good enough shot. But, the horcruxes at least gave us a way of Voldemort surviving his encounter with the death curse when Harry was a baby. You didn’t give us any other way for him to have survived that even in just a spirit/shade form for him to be able to come back in the first place.
Harry and Voldemort’s last fight: You gave us two dudes with the ability to level half of Azkaban Island with a single spell and the battle dissolved into a fist fight and legillemency inside of a paragraph or two and was over nearly before it started. And for all intents and purposes, Harry was left uninjured in anyway by it. I don’t know what I wanted, but this fell short of what I thought we’d get.
The relationships between Harry/Hermione, Neville/Ginny, Draco/Luna and Terry/Susan: I Think I’ve read nearly every decent Harry/Ginny story out there in fanfic world. I was desperate to find any decent story at all that was in the HP world and I turned to Harry/Hermione. Sunset and Sunrise are the first stories I’ve read in this area, and I already feel I’m doomed to find nothing else that will even come close to what you two turned out.
There were essentially 3 girls you could have picked for Harry at the end of Order of the Phoenix; Hermione, Ginny, and Luna. Given what you intended to do with the rest of the Weasleys, it was impossible for you to pick Ginny for him. Luna, you really probably could have switched her and Hermione around if you wanted too. Wouldn’t that have endeared you to the cannon Nazis! First, no Harry/Ginny or Ron/Hermione and to top it off, you’d have had Draco/Hermione!
Really though, at the end of book five, Harry’s relationships with Ginny and Luna are just not enough for him to have been asking for one of them; it would have been Hermione if any at all. You did well. And, for purposes of Sunset and Sunrise, I was able to believe in all the relationships. I just never made the leap to being invested in Harry/Hermione and Neville/Ginny. I’m really not sure that you two did either. There were just a few too many tense moments between Harry and Ginny. And Harry’s thoughts at the end while healing her leg about how he could have fallen for her if the dice had come up just a bit differently, and Ginny laying one on him not long after that kind of scream to me that while you’re both willing to accept them with someone else, you just don’t feel the emotional attachment to any relationship for Harry and Ginny besides Harry/Ginny to invest in it.
It’s funny because I’m nearing the end of writing my 4th novel length story that puts Harry/Ginny together. I’ve posted three of them, and intend to post the 4th when it is done. But I’ve had thoughts of writing a Harry/Hermione story and Neville is my alternate pairing for Ginny. I wonder if I’ll be able to actually write it if I can’t invest myself in the relationship.
Thanks again for hours of entertainment it really was a great ride through this and it was a gift from the Gods that it was complete by the time I started.
If you’re interested, my stories are posted on mugglenet under the penname of huskers.

Lots of inconsistencies throughout the story, but overall a very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Inconsistencies examples: Manor is under Fidelius, then manor not under Fidelius; Chamber accepts non-parseltongue, Chamber accepts only parseltongue; Daughter will be named Alison, Daughter named Water Lily. That last one really gets me because I also thought it would have been a nice tribute to the girl who saved Harry's life.

Once again, thanks for sharing the story. I was a little daunted by how long the Sun series was, so I put off reading it. Glad I finally took the plunge. Now I'm eagerly waiting for the next installment of Mutant Storm :)

Not being a H/Hr fan i found myself rather pleased with this stoy and sunset, but you've set a high bar, and now i don't think ill ever be able to read a H/Hr without trying to compare.

Thank you for all your hard works, i've read many of your other works and i love them. keep writing, keep typing even :)

All good things must in. These have to be the best stories I've ever read. You are both talented and takes something to bring me to tears and you did in this chapters an others. Congrats in you published works!!! Now the rest of the world know about you!!

The day I found your website is a bright day in my world. I have enjoyed reading your work and look forward to wherever your writings will lead us to next. Bless you and thank you for all of the time and energy and heart that went into writing these two stories.

Thank you, words can not describe this tale, i've read everything you posted except for the the crossover fic and it is all professional quality.

Once again,
Thank you, 4 days without sleep and so worth it.

I absolutely love this story. I think I have read it completely through 5-6 times. It is great!!! By the Way, I copied both Sunset and sunrise and they are 799 and 1,505 words respectively.

I feel like I should review as I've read most of your stories and never reviewed. Yes I know unusually cruel of me but that isn't the point. You seem to have a penchant for taking legs as ways of disabling your characters. I feel their pain I strained my IT Band a while back and it's about a 10% disability and it does hamper me but nothing like Harry's but Superman has Kryptonite Harry has a bum leg from a spider. The story flowed beautifully and really introduced characters I could connect with and see more personally than JKR ever did I feel the last two books were rushed and terribly written so I substitute fanfiction for those atrocity's that JKR calls novels. I really did enjoy reading and will continute with The Wizard's Fall story I believe it's called. I do enjoy your writing and I'm sure I'll enjoy your other works. Honestly though come up with some better snarky remarks some of Harry's shirts were horrid. I really do believe you did a good job in writing a super power Harry without falling into every cliche DESPITE the reviewers trying to make you and I'm glad as it would've cheapened the story. I bid you good morrow sir and hope to continue to read your excellent writings for as long as you will write.

I didn't actually print it, but i converted this together with Sunset, and all total they come to 2,990 pages. Now to start reading . . .

I just finished the sunset series and I'm amazed by the level of detail that you managed to put in. The war and fight scenes were very planned out. Unfortunately, there are quite a few grammatical errors which can be cleaned out. But on the whole an excellent read.

I've been reading this over and over since it first started here, and I can honestly not remember any other HP fanfic I've read more than this one.

You are the elite and I bow to thee.

Keep Up the Good Work and know that Antoniusan hails thee as his superiors.
(Hint: just a bit misty-eyed in the brain at the end of such an awesome story, hence the weird speech)