Sunset Over Britain
By Bobmin
Have you ever thought that a person could slowly fly by levitating an object they hold, or are sitting on? Harry could fly by levitating his staff, and take weight off his leg.
however, since the story is written, that doesn't much matter now. plus, the leg is a major plot element.
I love your wonderful grammar and word choice. Excellent work.
This is going very well . . . but you knew that, didn't you? I like your portrayal of Draco. Poor boy deserves a break.
I've seen several mentions of grammar and spelling amongst your reviews and comments, and, I have to say, I do appreciate your efforts on that front. Nothing is more annoying than reading
something--or trying to read something--filled with more errors than my garden is with weeds. With spell and grammar checks built into every computer, there really is no excuse.
Excessively long update periods.
Why pray tell does seem to take some authors MONTHS to write a 3K word chapter? I don’t get that at all.
I can beat you there. Fan fiction that was released after 4th book. Was going strong just like yours. VERY good plot. a H/Hr (All I read)
Middle of the 3rd arc the lad went 3 years with out update in middle of a VERY suspenseful moment and then updated a 1.5k chapter telling where she had hoped the story would go and that she was
abandoning it.
Why did Harry not get all his thangs befor he left Hogwarts?
You've written an exceptionally good novel, that being the only word to describe it and despite your amusing disclaimers, having read the last three books i think you are excellent authors, who deserve recommendation and publication. Well done!
Again, great chapter, but I am a little confused on something I just realized, how can Hermione be a Seeress, a trait her Grandmother had, if she is a muggleborn. Also when Remus says Harry has spent 43 or 45 million galleons, did that take most of his money, or is he still one of the richest wizards in the world and the money he has spemt barely scratches the surface of his wealth?
Lol I love you books, you two really take JKR's stuff and give it a fantastic new life. But sorry you are about to be blamed again I should be packing now not reading!
But really great work I look forward to reading the sequel.
Utopia
Regarding your pet peeves.... It is one of my own but I also get horrible writer's block or don't like how I'm writing something, or I get distracted by something else. I hate losing ideas so I sorta just go with what I think of at the moment. I have a very short attention span but I love writing. Mind you my chapters are longer than 3K, short chapters annoy the heck outta me
this is one of the best story i have ever read.i stayed up till 4 in the morning cause i didn't want to stop.great work.
Oh, i read them stories on fanfiction.net :]
i loved them, i could fond this story on fanfiction.net, why is that?
Lily's contraceptive charm was just too funny. And I love the Bowel-Loosening spell. You're doing a good job with comic relief.
That should have been a permanent sticking charm that only Harry can release. It would serve The Evil Professors to be stuck as the students return from holiday (might give a few Gryffindors, among
others, pause).
hey i've read (and loved) both Dumbledore’s Army and Spiritus Crystalus but i never realised that you two wrote them (how dumb do i feel? lol) i have too say i'm loving this story just as much as i loved those :-) btw just thought i'd let you know that even though some people complain about long A/N i actually love reading your's because while it is true that some peoples A/N are pointless and annoying your's are actualy really entertaining (as are your disclaimers) and they add more personal feel to the story.
I had no idea you guys wrote Dumbledore’s Army and Spiritus Crystalus! Those are are of my all time favorite fanfics!!
At last, an ISS with actual punishment. Excellent descriptions. I could completely picture the Great Hall.
What another great chapter;
I do like the start of this chapter when Peeves shout out “Oh, go bugger Dean Thomas, Weasel!” quiet funny if I say so myself. :D
I like how Harry reacted when he found the contraceptive charm on Hermione’s bed, and found out it was done by his mum. :D
Dumbledore is a fool to change Ron’s mood like that, in making him more in Defense could be a bad thing for the future.
:( The Gryffindor house as become a lot of wankers, to bet up one of their own.
Poor George, Fred and Bill, finding out that their family are no good, is not good. At least they don’t bream Harry and is willing to help him.
LoL… Harry really can be a Slytherin at times, no wonder the hat wanted him in that house.
What the hell is Harry planning?
I love the enchanted snowflake, nicely done.
Draco and Luna, who would have thought if that paring, I won’t have. Never under estimate Luna, as she’s more then she looks. :D
*sigh* Harry did warn Dumbledore, now he is seeing what Harry can do.
I feel you there. I'm reading...er not reading a story where the Author wrote out 15 chapters before posting. Which I thought was a really good idea but b/c of that he didn't think he need to
write any more for a while. She he updated every mon, wed, and fri until he ran out of chapters. It then took him 3 months to get the next chapter out. The first 15 were between 10-20 pages long but
the next one was only 4 pages. Which I could understand...I mean he hadn't wrote it in a while and blah...so I waited for the next update, which took another 2 or 3 months and BAM! a 2 page chapter.
I mean seriously? that's just bad form.
I love it love it love it! next (I know the stories already complete really I do) Harry should make Snape run through the halls ass ass naked! hehehehe....
ANYWAYS I've been reading your stoy for 13 hours, give or take. I will not sleep until I finish it...or pass out from lacks.
Its really a great story I your biting humor, in the disclaimer, the actual story, and the A/N make it a very interesting read. I really like that someone(read both of you lovely people) could take a
story and make it so much more just from a thought.
...I like everything that happened at Yale. Neville showing he was more than man enough for Ginny and Luna showing she was more than woman enough to stand by Draco in all the times he will need
her.
Dumbledore and Snape got exactly what they deserve...I think perhaps you should give them a serious case of the flu and make them dance around in grass skirts singing "I love you" in the Ministry
Office entrance...and I just gave myself the perfect prank...*grins evily*
Harry kicked major bum...Ron fell into a pit of firey flames, when will the boy every learn?
CHRISTMAS!!!! Wonder day of the year really. All the snow (that never falls were I live) and all the coldness of weather..and I'm forgetting something...major..oh yeah presents!!!!!! LoL
So Harry's going to make his own little countrY, uh? Well I hope so anyone. Like make it under all kinda of unplottable charms and what-not and then send people there, just don't tell them where
there is. sounds like a reasonably perfect plan to me....
on to the rest of the story!
The other bother for me in this story so far is Harry's leg. But I-I'll live...I think. I still think you should castrate ron XD
Outstanding, really gotta love Luna.
gunny
Well, there was a hurricane where I lived recently and I've been meaning to read this story for years, so I downloaded it all before the storm. I read it on my ipod, computer, and then when the batteries finally died I got out a magnifying glass and a candle, opened up my hard drive and started transcribing the story onto paper. I finished a chapter before the power came back on.
So, yes, aside from a few spelling errors and grammar oddities this story flat out rocks my socks. I'm wearing sandals so that is quite the accomplishment.
I blame you two for the following: broken hard-drive :P, high electricity bill, lack of sleep, failed tests.
That is all!