Sunset Over Britain

Pet Peeves, hm? I personally don´t mind if an author gives us one chapter long and the other less than half the lenght of the previous one. At least we got a new chapter. What I don´t like is when authors give their hero some new power or weapon, but he never uses it. NEVER! Not even once. Like giving him a staff perfectly attuned to him, but he will still use his wand and the staff is somehow forgotten. :/ He won´t even use it in the final battle and end up injured and exhausted. That is so unprofessional x_x

"Besides, I’d follow Susan into You-Know-Who’s lair, if necessary." -I just had this mental image: what would Voldie look like if teenagers started to break into his lair to show their feelings for each other? A snogging session on side as well while they are there, maybe? All that looooove around him - I think he´d die on spot :D The power Voldie knows not - teenage love confessions and snogging sessions. XD

Hello dears! I enjoy this story so much, that I believe that this is the third time I've read it. I also realized that I tend to notice details that I missed the first (and second) time. Like Draco saying that none of the Malfoys or Blacks were worth talking to. Well I could agree with him on the Malfoys (none that we've met so far would be worth talking to, and they all seem to still be alive as well), but I can think of at least one Black - Sirius. But then, Draco didn't know Sirius (or probably grew up hearing all sorts of bad things about him) and thus doesn't know any better. Maybe that's why Harry nodded in agreement with him ...

Anyway, keep up the fantastic writing!

Happy Snorkack Hunting (don't you just love Luna?)
~Sempra

This seemed a rather cliched chapter, after several that weren't. An "if you read this, I'm dead" letter from Sirius. Another prophecy. Done to death.

I really loved the gift Harry gave his friends. Who doesn't have a loved one they'd like to say good-bye to, after all? Nice job with that. Thanks for sharing.

By a bridge? Don't you mean buy a bridge? I've noticed your stories have this type of error in them, and fairly frequently at that. Spell check will tell you if a word is correctly spelled, but not if it is the correct word. You might want to try reading your chapters aloud before posting them, since you don't like the idea of using a beta.

Perhaps I was ruined by your press, but I'm not as impressed with this fic as others seem to be.

The premise, admittedly, is fun to contemplate: Ron as an arse, Dumbledore as a manipulative bastard who loves fame and Molly as a money-grubbing woman. The only one I never quite could believe is Molly, but that's only because I'm hard pressed to believe she possesses the acting skills required.

I hope you've gotten better about this since you wrote what I have read, (I may never find this out) but look up the uses for apostrophes. You're using them in bunches of places that they shouldn't be. The plural of Gryffindor is Gryffindors. Not Gryffindor's. This chapter: Look for "Granger’s" during Dumbledore and Harry's fight.

The Harry/Hermione scenes felt forced, but I can't put my finger on why :(.

Draco... while not quite deftly handled, was realistic to a point. I thought it was a touch too fast to go to first name basis, but that's not a huge deal.

I found myself skipping sections, like the Harry/Hermione sections, whole slews of dialogue, etc. Maybe it's awkward dialogue. Maybe it's because I thought the scenes were pointless (I'm reasonably sure I didn't miss anything). Not sure; thought you should know.

In summary, decent fic, though I find that I have lost interest, and thus leave my review after Chapter (*checks*) 9. Maybe I would be better served by a later offering of yours? *shrugs*

I hope this was useful.

only thirty pages? (shakes head) and there are authors who have 100 chapter stories with 50 page chapters. I'm dissapointed.

Simply amazing. This story feels like a string of memories woven together.

Ok, how is it that Harry dying to fulfill the prophecy would be selfish?

I'm trying to find the trail of logic for that one, and I'm coming up empty.

Thanks for writing,
Matt

:O
Harry get's angry.
Hum, definitly interessting.
It seems like you make a Super-Harry story with an normal aggressive harry. Very good :)
Thanks!

:O
Harry get's angry.
Hum, definitly interessting.
It seems like you make a Super-Harry story with an normal aggressive harry. Very good :)
Thanks!

I have never hated someone more than I hate Dumbledore right now. I know he is just a fictional character but you did too good of a job to make a character that is so easy to hate.

I anxiously await the time the asshole is tortured and killed along with his sidekicks the Weasleys and the Order of the Phoenix.

“Harry,” she started off softly, “everyone experiences that sort of desire at least once in his or her live.

I think this was supposed to LIFE. Also:

“In the flesh,” said Gideon, smiling.

“Well, not really. More like, thanks to your smart, green eyed friend,” countered Fabian.

I think you forgot to put the word "thought" or "memory" when Fabian counters Gideon.


LOVE this story, my 6 or so time reading it, I love it for the length as well as it's amazing plot. I could wish that everything I read was this well thought out and engrossing :)

I really like the fact that even though you mostly focus on the main parts of the plot, you still have time to put in the relationship 'problems' with Hermione and Harry. Oh, and that they aren't auromatically like 'Let's get married'.

The scene with Dumbledore over the guardianship was sheer delight, ablolutely brilliant. Harry has a little bit of a cruel streak allowing the Headmaster to go on so long. Though perhaps he should have saved the list to give to Amelia for her investigation.
Oh, Ginny is so cruel. So perhaps Seamus won't have so much to brag about now. And you said that the T-shirts were the only humor...oh, excuse me you said, 'intentional' humor; so Ginny's revenge wasn't meant to be funny.

"Harry...I...words" hmm..you even summed up my review.

What another great chapter, I do like your Standard Disclaimer, I find them real funny;

Ginny can be real evil, when she needs to be. I don’t want to be on her bad side.

LoL… Dumbledore thought he had Harry, and the things he wanted Harry to do was outrages. But it’s not going to happen.

Poor Harry seeing Harry and Tonks in bed.

I love the latter from Sirius to Harry.

So Hermione is a seer, and her grandmother was too, which means she was a watch too. :D And made her first true prophecy.

*claps* WONDERFUL!!!! Only sixteen more chapters to go! By the 30 page min that means I have a min of 480 pages left! WOOT! Then sleep. I love your A/ns, FF.net are insane if they think, like you pointed out, that a 30-40 page chap with less than five pages of A/Ns is 'chatty' then they can't have much of a brain. Did you get removed?

Too bad you won't be throwing Ron into jail right away, that would be cool but I'm sure what you have in store for him will be so much nicer *smiles sweetly*

So...leaving England to be taken over by a megalomanic with delusional of grander uh? I don't think I've seen a story where Voldemort takes over England...well not one that's light-based anyways.

Harry's an idiot if he thinks Hermione's going to stay out of the fight, she'll worry too much about him. Hermione's an idiot if she thinks she should join the fight, he'll worry too much about him. Quite the predicament they have there, ain't it? <know what cartoon thats form? Well neither do I but I know I got it from somewhere...LoL>

The tee-shirts rule! I really like the everyone's allowed to be stupid but Voldemort abusing it one. Great stuff. How that popped out I don't know. With it I just flow...sorry I wanted to rhyme there. I'll never do it a-puroose again.

Let's see...dp the two professor know how to shield their minds? If not I don't see why Harry's telling them all that...rather strange...

I haven't said anything about the tat but its very cool. I like how it jumped off Harry's arm. So all the Black heads-face cream anyone?-are now going to have the tat?

...and yeah I want to get to the meeting so I'll leave off here...

Still agreeing with your A/Ns and bearing in mind that this is very AU and therefore screaming that Dumbledore wouldn't be this stupid is beside the point. Wanted to mention how much I love Harry's T-shirts. They're extremely funny.