Sunset Over Britain

This gets definitely better as it goes.

That really doesn't make much sense. If Harry put up all those wards around his bed as you say he did the spider should not have been able to get to him while under a dark curse.

This was a good chapter. No real holes. I'm wondering what's the point of their staying at Hogwarts, though.

Is Dumbledore on stupid pills? Does he really think he's going to gain Harry's trust the way he's going? Sheesh. (Not complaining about your writing, just commenting on the character).

Loved No Thanks. Love this story. I'll keep reading.

So the SNORING Ron got over his fear of spiders to put try and take Harry out. At least that is what I got out of the last part of that chapter.

I was just re-reading Sunset (er, again!) and thought I would comment on Dumbledore's utter idiocy in this chapter. After Harry is taken to the hospital wing, he says that the attack will convince him that staying in the castle is safest. Oh yes, stay in Hogwarts, where you have only 6 friends, maybe 4 staff members you can trust, your girlfriend is assaulted, and you get attacked by venomous spiders. That's absolutely the safest place in the Wizarding World! Oh, and way to get Harry on your side, Headmaster - don't expel Ron, but take points away from Harry for defending his molested girlfriend...OK, mini rant over.

The sheer intelligence of this small community of authors amazes me.
I believe that the authors here should be published authors who make millions off their work.
By the way, are any of you published authors? If so, PLEASE send names and titles.

I hate to point it out to such talented authors, but very poor scansion on your limerick. How about this?

There once was a Wizard from Surrey,
Whose wand was exceptionally Furry,
Ginny wanted to pet it,
But Harry said, "Forget it!
I'd rather stick it into Padma's Curry!"

Still not perfect, but closer to traditional limerick meter....

I dont get the comment Dumbledore made about Harry being safer in the castle when he was attacked in the castle. Is Dumbledore just stupid as it makes no sense. lol. Cool story though.

Ahh man, I haven't even finished the chapter, but you have me laughing to hard to not review early. My name's Aaron Winston, and the whole Auror Winston just made my day. Although I have quite a bit of hair, and I'm not fat at all. But still funny nonetheless.

Great story, looking forward to the rest and the sequel!

:O
I cannot imagine I could possibly hate dumbledore MORE than this.
Hum. Very nice :)
Thanks

Kill Dumbledore. Please. If you can please torture the bastard before you do. Thank you.

Kill that fucking rapist Ron too. Ground his BOYhood to mush before you do.

In fact, just destroy Griffindor Tower (Without Harry, Hermione, Ginny and Neville in it of course). Griffindor is the new Slytherin.

haha ron is a pervert :)) and i guess that its not ron who instructed a spider to bite harry, cause that would be too simple, or not? :] anyways, this story rox! :)

You cruel bastards!

After "Harry's Life, The Musical", how much more can Harry do for an encore?

After a few years and a few kids, he's going to be so screwed... (by divorce attorneys, not Hermione)

The part on bravery and fear was simply superb (and not necessary the only part that was).
'because I’m insisting we take extra precautions so we don’t tip our hand early. I realize you’d like faster results' -- sounds like you're talking to the readers here.
very nice trace on the money; wouldn't work in the Muggle world where transfers take place in ledger books (digital nowadays, of course); but fits the wizarding world where Harry's vault has stacks of coins.
Dumbledore's reminiscings are just too evil: too bad for them but they served their (or rather my -- does anyone really still want to make Dumbledore light when he thinks doing anything [including stealing and allowing people to be murdered (just because he doesn't kill them himself doesn't make him innocent)] to get his way is okay?) purpose. Considering those actions, why did Fawkes only leave Dumbledore recently?
Harry's song is really great. I agree with Hermione's assessment of Harry's gift.
I think that you may be right (despite the sarcasm) about H/G being temporary. Many thought H/Cho was inevitable after Book 4; but look what happened in Book 5. We'll just have to wait and see what JKR does in Book 7.

Kill Snape... Kill Snape.. Boy that was subtle wasnt it. Liking the story, Hating Dumbledork, Snape, and of course, Ron The Weasel.

Just a comment....on Harry being defused so quickly following Ron's sexual assault of Hermione. Harry hearing Hermione curse and that startling him seems a bit of a stretch at best, especially at this point.

Thanks for writing,
Matt

"Afterwards we'll shake and cry together." Maybe I am a Lion after all. I'm usually brave, but then start getting the shakes afterwards even crying sometimes. Though the tears are usually because I'm truly angry.

Favorite quote: "The greatest wisdom is seeing through appearances." Luna is awesome.

I wish Alice Longbottom could come along and smack Dumbledore and then get creative for being so dismissive of her son. Or even Neville's Gran.

Yay! Go Harry/Hedwig, she's the best lady for him anyway. Okay, got that out of the way, but really looking forward to the next part, and how things will go with the Ministry and Dumbledore, as this may be the straw that has broken the camel's back, for which I'm glad to see.