Sunset Over Britain

Speaking of typos, you've got a "whole" where you meant "hole" - but you did spell all the curse words right. I concur with the earlier comment on the prophesies. I think that's overdone.

Sex scenes were OK, and the death of Fudge was well done.

Your description of the Horsehead Nebula was off. It's a star nursery, but only of, at most, a few dozen stars. The nebula isn't all that big. The nearby Great Orion Nebula is much larger.

A small spelling error. Harry took in the scene in a single glance, the huge whole in his shoulder, the blood, and Luna somehow keeping Draco anchored in this world.

Whole should have been spelled hole.

I love your HP stories. Keep the chapters coming. I can't wait to see what you do with Mutant Storm.

Sorry; if I'd bothered to check the reviews beforehand I would've seen that my comment was redundant. I blame my insomnia; two days with virtually no sleep and the little grey cells begin to get punchy....

I'm almost certain someone else has pointed this out, but in case they haven't: not all alternative spellings are euphemisms, especially in the case of 'shite' or 'shyte' in place of 'shit'. 'Shite' is a perfectly valid alternative pronunciation for the British Isles. just as 'schist' or 'schyst' would be for Germany (why do you think 'shyster' is a pejorative for lawyer? It literally means 'shitter'). I don't know how many times I've heard a British actor pronounce 'shit' with a hard 'i', but it's been frequently enough to make it impossible to keep track....

Stop this madness! Please! I need sleep. Sleep, I tell you. I need sleep.

as far as if the government was modeled after the muggle world, that Sirius would not have been held without trial, i completely disagree. due to his notoriety he could have simply been considered a POW. and locked away for the rest of his life, since not all death eaters were captured, and were still somewhat active, as evidenced by the attack at the world cup, they could consider an ongoing war for however long they wanted too, and held him without trial.

Listen to Different World by Iron maiden.

When I was reading "Lessons in the Room of Requirement" Section. Its like the musical form of that section.

It was crazy that it was planning just as I happened to be reading that chapter.

While I agree in principle with your peeve, your primary example was poorly chosen. From a web search:

1 definition found for shite

From WordNet (r) 2.0 :

shite
n : obscene terms for feces [syn: crap, dirt, shit, poop,
turd]

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Look about right?

Just a comment to your Pet Peeves - shite is actually an Irish expression, just like the word fek. Both are rather obvious in what they mean, but their use came into being from the British misunderstanding the words through accents.
I use both terms when cursing, as do many Irish people.
(Watch the show Father Ted is you want a good example of such words in use).

I have really been enjoying this series. My 21 year old son got me started, now I can't stop!

If you ever feel the need for a proof reader to catch things a spell checker can't get, such as too vs to, let me know.

Nancy

Woah :O
Thanks!
I would really like to say that something does not behave myself, but, um, there's nothing.

i love your story and the direction it continues to take!!!

in your "pet peeves" section: "shite" is a british version of shit, just like "arse" is to ass

"There’s only one title you need worry about Draco, and that’s ‘boyfriend’,” she said smiling sweetly at him. “Another day I’ll instruct you in other possible titles like fiancé, husband, father, that sort of thing.”

The rest of the Outcasts watched in amusement as Draco got lost in Luna’s gaze." I love sweet commanding Luna and confused whipped Draco

Okay, I admit it. You got me. I was so focused on Arthur that I forgot about Percy. Maybe you didn't intend the surprise, but it worked anyway.
'graduated an immediately took' -- graduated and
You make an assumption in using the ministry's treatment of Sirius as an example as to that being typical government practice. Or is it rather an example of some sort of wizarding marital law? Even the U.S. Constitution has the suspension clause wherein Habeas Corpus (the legal proceeding to determine whether an imprisonment is legal) can be suspended in cases of rebellion or invasion. So Sirius' imprisonment need not indicate that the magical government is not patterned after the muggle. Just think of the internment of the Japanese during WWII. I'm not familiar enough with British law/history; but I'm sure similarities could be found. More disturbing is Sirius' being left after martial law would have been removed. Would someone summarily imprisoned after martial law be automatically released or tried after normal law had been reinstated? Perhaps they should be, but we've seen how corrupt and inefficient Wizarding government is (and Crouch was in charge of law enforcement matters then). But again just because things weren't handled according to law does not allow one to assume there is no law (Some might think of Bush here; sorry again for US examples). Okay, enough of a rant. I'm not saying you're wrong; just cautioning about unwarranted assumptions.
The prophecies; I seem to remember a Pet Peeve about relying too much on plot devices; certainly as well as you write (no sarcasm, that is sincere), you would be able to arrange things without people 'scratching their fuzzy little (should be ickle) heads'. Well off to the next chapter.

Although I rarely review chapter to chapter, I wanted to say that I Love your story. And as much as I appreciate reading a well written story....I REALLY appreciate your "Pet Peeves".

I am SOOO happy to find actual authors, who have the SAME "Pet Peeves" I do!!!

Well Done!

"Mutual entertainment"...so that's what they call it nowdays. This chapter was action packed. Great job.

Another great chapter;

So Percy killed Fudge, (about time someone did) because he was controlled by a Death Eater. And then he was kill in his cell.

Poor Harry seeing Ginny and Neville naked.

Percy a Death Eater, I don’t think so.

Poor Harry not aloud to go to Percy’s service, because of Ron and Molly. How could Molly say that Harry murdered his godfather?

So Harry is a Viscount and Earldom.

:D Snape is in it now, for his bias towards his own House… and now he is suspended from teaching.

I wonder who attack Draco.

spells for personl enjoment? heh heh
sounds more like a dildo spell to me

I'm up to "Of Death and Dismissal", and I'm enjoying the story overall, but I do have a couple of notes.

One, you or your betas need to review the use of apostrophes (that's one of my pet peeves).

Two, you are playing rather fast and loose with with the AK spell. Harry conjures a physical shield to stop it, but wouldn't that already be a known counter to the curse? If it was Harry's power level that did it, that needs to be clearer. The reactions of the pensieve viewers were very mild, to say the least.

Now, you have Weatherbee casting AK under the Imperious. Don't you have to harbor passionate hatred to get the Imperious to work? Percy doesn't hate Fudge at all, so how could he successfully cast a hate-powered spell? By your own writing, someone under the Imperious is barely aware of their own actions, so it is very difficult to believe that the spell itself changed Percy's feelings around to that extent.

Any other offensive spell would have been adequate to the situation, been entirely believable, AND reinforced your earlier points about spells being light or dark based on their use and intent. You've violated one of your own pet peeves by pulling something out of nowhere because you wanted it to be in your story.

Getting interesting.

gunny