Sunset Over Britain
By Bobmin
"The man got only a few more steps before being overwhelmed by the dog sized spiders." Dog sized? You mean Hagrid sized, don´t you? An acromantula is cca 2 meters high, extremely inteligent and very, very poisonous. ;) Sorry for being a canon-freak here, but really, one part of the story where you wouldn´t need to exaggerate at all and it would be freaking scary and you don´t use the oportunity T_T
I thought the Muggle-related accuracy was pretty good, actually. Not at all like some ridiculous stories I've read.
Good battle of Hogwarts scene.
You spelled AK correctly, but a couple of chapters back you misspelled the Imperius Curse consistently - or your spellchecker did.
You are keeping me awake at night now. I've only had seven total hours of sleep since I started this story. You are evil and must die! HAHAHAHAHAHA. All kidding aside, yes I have missed a lot of sleep this week but hell this story is soooo worth it. I even had had it minimized at work so I can sneak and read a line or too there. If I am fired it's all your FAULT!!!
You've had me on the edge of my seat this chapter. WOW! I love it when Harry taunts Voldemort. The Dark Tosser is finding out that a dose of his own medicine--or potion--is pretty yukky.
Okay, so Ickle Ronnikins is gone. Good thing. He was barking anyway; Snape is no great loss, but his arrest just put Dumbledork's plans in the potty.
I loved the hula-hoop thing. Very imaginative. Magical mass transit at its best.
So our Gryffindor spy was Dean Thomas. Somehow, that doesn't surprise me. He was pretty PO'd that Nev managed to snag Ginny out from under him--more or less, no sexual innuendo intended.
I've found a couple of spelling and grammatical errors, but they're so inconsequential that I don't feel the need to fuss about them. According to your A/Ns, others have already done that. Why should
I?
Anyway, I must read on before I fall off the edge of my seat. GOOD JOB!
Aww. this chapter was both action filled and cute simultaneously. you guys are awesome!:P
You killed Stonehenge! I know I've said this before, but please think before you have your 'heiritage theives' ignore it!
I'm not sure if you still get your reviews since you finished this story so long ago... but have to say again... I LOVE IT!!!
on another note... Love the Standard Disclaimers ROFLMAO
Ron as a spider mutant would be an interesting affair, especially since he is afraid of spiders, somehow the visions keep rolling through my head. I congrauate you on that
I'm lost of words. Your Story is more than Fantastic. Please continue it as soon as possible.
Why did you destroy Stonehenge? We haven't worked out what they built it for, or how they built it for that matter! I haven't even seen it yet! (tears running down my face) Please, please
ressurrect Stonehenge! The only reason it wasn't a wonder of the ancient world is because that list was compiled in Greece, and the Greeks had never seen it!
Okay. Rant over. But seriously, you had better have a pretty good reason for destroying Stonehenge!
You spelled something wrong?
Um, did not notice ;-)
Good part, but about 18 killing curses in one day should make Harry god N°1 for all time :)
*smiles* You know you could have included that in your pet peeve. Or was it mentioned earlier on and I don't remember?
What should be your pet peeve? That reviewers and all readers alike DO take 'Fanfictions' too close to heart. Well I must say try to turn the other cheek and accept it as a compliment that they do
take your storyline so seriously as some do canon. That's all I can come up with for now. Ja ne. PS: In one other fanfiction I've read...it has to do with a Time Traveling Harry going back to his
past in his 11 or 14 year old body and a Professor was talking about the Avada Kedavra that teens so young would not have the Magical Power necessary to have any effect but to 'tickle'. Would that
help?
Where was the chapter where the students attitude toward Harry changed? Those he's rescued might think he's a hero, but where did the student start expressing such thoughts, let alone accepting
him as not dark?
'Computer confirms analysis' -- Wasn't it the computer that gave the alert? Perhaps it should be 'Computer analysis confirmed'?
'Professor Pussycat' -- great line for Dobby!
'the final two minutes of the football match' -- does soccer (football anywhere but the US) have a two-minute warning?
You can use me in one of your stories, please. If you want to read some of my stories, I am at the dreaded fanfiction dot net, under the author name donalddeutsch.
You saved the library! Wonderful!
Favorite line: "After tonight, that young man will be a legend, whether he wants it or not."
Who would have thought that Dean would be a spy for Voldemort, he is a Muggleborn, and we all knew how much Voldemort hates them.
Com e on, the only one who can kill Harry is Voldemort himself… no-one else. But ‘killing’ Harry is one way to really piss him off big time. And with the help of
‘Padfoot’, Harry tired down MoM.
So everyone at Hogwarts are going to Haven.
Yeah, Harry is going to be a legend, whether he wants it or not.
I hope Harry will be ok
Outstanding.
gunny
The Ministry destruction and the face off at the Hogwarts wards were brilliant.
Nice use of the Grim named Padfoot.
Marvelous house-elf tactics.
Just grand all around.
