Sunset Over Britain
By Bobmin
I hope I can keep up this reviewing thing (I've reviewed the first chapter as well).
Anyway, I'll be reading you later!
-xxx- Malou
At this point, Harry could destroy the entire British Magical world with a wave of his hand so exactly why is he hiding? I mean he can freaking absorb books through near osmosis, has a photographic memory, can sense and directly manipulate magic. Who could possibly be a threat to him? Why even bother with allies at all when they will only slow him down? Just go kill Voldemort, Dumbledore and everyone else before they even know what's going on. That's the main problem with Super!Harry stories, they have no where to go once he becomes super.
Your writing skills are incredible you had me in tears during Harry's breakdown in the pool with Hermione I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this fic and any others that are to be
written
Please continue this magnificent skill of yours
With his power Harry could have transfigured that hand-me-down suit into practically anything.
That was not very bright of Ginny to reveal her allegiances by breaking up with Dean like that.
Two chapters (1 1/2 actually) and H/Hr are declaring their love for each other. That's quick.
Fun Gringotts scene. Would Hermione really look forward to seeing a dragon after GoF?
No angst, but lots of shock, awe, and anger in this chapter. Shocked!Griphook, followed by Shocked!Grangers (at Gringott's; not over Harry's wealth, but over Griphook knowing them). However, Dan
Granger pulls a move right out of Salazar's Playbook (after Harry wandlessly disarmed Sir Greasy Git, then transfigured his clothing). At Pico's, Amelia gets horked-off all over again (over seeing
that scar that Umbitch had inflicted on Harry); I wonder what Fudge will make of that?
We've seen the outfit Snape was wearing before, though; anyone care to guess where?
First of all, I love non-canon work! It broadens the mind. As for the Wesley's and Dumblydore going dark, nope....never thought it. I honestly believe this betrayal by the Wesley parents and Ron will be the hardest one to get over since Harry has always thought of them as family. Bill, Fred, George and Ginny.....ummmmm, love that combination to help Harry from "outside" his protected home for now. Ginny's letter was wonderful! Ron is such a prick!!! Just want to give HIM to the Harry's uncle for a "lesson in freakiness." That boy needs some common scense beaten into him! Snape in an evening gown???? WONDERFUL NOW I have that stuck in my head for the rest of the work day. Great!!! But love it. Going on the the next chapter!!!! HUGS
Keebler elf with an attitude? I LIKE THAT ONE!!! Very engaging story, with funny introductions. You guys are goooooood...........
It appears that you and I share many of the same pet peeves--authors who threaten readers who don't review every chapter or canon whiners going on about canon in the AU story, abandonments, and
months and months between updates. It just seems to me that if an author doesn't have time to post at least every 10 days, forget it.
That said...BRAVO. I'm really enjoying this, so I'll stop blabbering and read on, shall I?
Bob and Alyx:
Good story guys, i like those fics in wich canon is overthrow to the sidelines, actually I confess my self dissapointed over the last two books, were quite boring and weren't in the direction i
though they would be going.
I like H/Hr pairing, pretty much, it just made sense. I'm enjoying so far so i'll tell you i'm off to read more and look forward to this story...
Great Job
Cheers
Potter&Granger
The email address in the author's notes has permanent fatal errors.
Why did Tonks need to swear not to say where HP is if the place is under Fideleus & she's not the secret keeper?
my friend, the muse is female simply because my ancestors liked a hot bod. and yes, they were somewhat sexist.
Most interesting. I'm quite anxious to see where you take this.
as far as whether things are too cannon or not, i could care less, and more often than not the "AU" stories are more interesting. one thing i did notice that contradicts your AN though is that you say dumbledore is not evil, yet in the story you have him mentioning "eliminating" harry if he became too much of a threat after harry killed voldemort. I dont know about you, but id call that dark, unless you simply meant that he would not be joining Voldemort, which in itself is kind of obvious, I have never seen a story where Voldemort and Dumbledore are both evil and working together, and frankly think that it would be near impossible to creatre such a story.
Why goto Diagon Alley if people are looking for you, why not go somewhere else?
I hope Harry & Hermione need to learn loads.
Harry & Hermione need to test their food & drink, to make sure it is ok.
Harry should get a complet list of all that he has, including all wills.
Harry should stop access to all of his accounts except him.
Harry should make the people who stole from pay.
Ok this is the third fic I'm reading from you guys (just finished spiritus crystalus and loved it) so why not review once :)
I'm more of a Harry/Ginny shipper myself but that's mostly cause I really like the way Ginny is described in most of these fics (let's just say I have thing for hot sarcastisc redheads :p)
What I hate about most of the H/Hr stories is the Ginny-bashing when your story proves (till now at least) one can write a perfect good H/Hr story without turning Ginny into a slut or (worse) linking
her with Draco. Problem is that I don't really believe in Ron/Hermione and 99% of the H/G fics link them *sigh*
Anyway enough with my babbles, I think I'm going to enjoy this fic as I enjoyed your other work.
Greetings
Sammy
Me agian
First I would Like to aplolagise because my last review was leaning a little too close to a flaming. Also my spelling is not the best.
In ch1. Dumpy is shown to be very arrogent.
Arregent to the point of stupidity. You did better in that in this chapter.
Harry is very very powerfull.
Scary powerfull.
Harry seemed to get over his funk over the
Dep. of Mist. too quickly.
I have always felt that the whole idea of the Gringot's Cart to be well thought out, but
rediculase(sp?. Sure it would make since but I just do not feel there is enough interaction between muggles and wizards for it to be broought up.
Though, you did do it better than most.
Personally I am a little sick of all the Gringot's extras people come up with.
Cards
Endless bags(not too bad but still)
Bags connected to valts but magiced so can't be used by an enemy(come on! if your gonna make something like that it can't be exacly perfect.)
Bags that you just thing the amount you need and that many coins are put in the bag.
on the other hand one I have heard makes much more since. Old families having a tab in larger shops that is payed mounthly.
(That is the type of thing that would evolve
in harry's wourld. If you don't see why I';m more than willing to tell)
This thing is way tooooo long.
I might not do another o these unless I find something expressly wrong.
Story is going strong. And I am enjoying it alot.
Again, I might repeat myself, but now I add something:
Great story, definitly a great plott (does this word exsist? sorry, german writer behind ;-) )
You fixed that Harry / Hermione part perfectly, I'm burning for more ;-)
Would like to say keep up the good work, but as you have done this already, I promise I will write what I think after each chapter :)
