The Power of the Press
By Bobmin
This might sound weird but I don't know what I look forward to more you stories 'cuz their great or your author notes best out their so funny it takes me about a min to stop laughing so I can read the story. Great work both of you.
2500 hectares, a "campus that would rival most modest sized colleges"? Try "major universities would be envious". That's over nine square miles - for comparison, the main campus of my college (one of the most populous in the USA) is about one square mile including the stadium, sports fields, and massive parking lots.
I can not spell it but is harry a H like in the book?
Nice!!! But, if I may, instead of H and H, after two years of dating still being suprised by the similaritys between their hopes and fears, they should move past it. Both of them want each other, both feel like they shouldn't push. Instead of both of them waiting for the other to make the first move, they should make it a point to get together and evaluate the speed of the relationship once every other month. It saves, time, energy and most importantly, lots and lots of angst.
Well I have to say I just discovered this little website and I'm impressed! Can't say I've learned too much about it, but I definitely recognize some authors in the network--it's good to see so
many amazing HP writers all on the same bit of net! I don't usually go for HP/HG, and the only reason I'm telling you this is to mention that I'm completely in love with how you write and I now love
this ship. Keep up the author notes, they make me smile.
LM
Note: other ways for torture - 46 hits to the neck with a blunt axe = Nearly Headless Nick
you'd think he would have died quicker :|
seems the generic fellow did though.
hm...*backs away sloooowly*
*starts humming*
100 Lemmings on the wall, 100 Lemmings on the wall...one falls down, splats on the ground, no more Lemmings on the wall...
((The Lemmings game)) =P
Harry felt that Hermione's presence was the best gift he could have received.
Didn't you mean "presents"
LOL sorry, I couldn't resist that with the disclaimer for this chapter.
Alyx and Bob are hilarious! Although that image of Generic Reader #6 will haunt me until I properly review. I have to say the number one thing I love about this story is that it's completely
opposite from what you'd expect. Having the bad guy eaten by his familiar and bound by his own horcrux is much more interesting then the cliche all-powerful Dark Lord that causes havoc until Harry
finally defeats him. Things are more to the point (like the relevations about Dumbledore and his demise) rather than drawn out like the usual stories. I don't usually read Harry/Hermione, but this is
amazing! I love all their interactions! Must. Stay. Awake. I have to finish reading this story!
~Axe
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmm llama burgers, as my wife said in a review on sunrise, its getting harder for me to pull myself...... away from this cool story to go do the mundane things in life like visit the bog. and the heartless wench wont buy me a commode
*grins broadly* Go, Bob and Alyx! You make me laugh at four-thirty in the morning, quite an accomplishment there. . . thanks for the HILARIOUS story!! :-) Regina
P.S. Does this count as a review?
Great story so far guys. Please pass on my thanks to Dorothy for her great advice with regards to the orgy scene you had planned although I think the abstinence society might be interested in a copy as a means of enforcing their goals.
Great Cahpter, rite more! ;}
Seriously, I am very much enjoying this story, and am glad to see that you are experimenting to expand your writing skeellzz. I approve of your efforts, and I like this foray into a new writing
style.
As for serious review (read "constructive criticism"), Be careful of verb tenses. there were one or two examples of wandering between did and doing, or does - even within the same sentence. I skimmed
through the chapter again, but couldn't find it - sorry. Although I have noticed it a (very) few in other chapters as well.
Again, I must ask... when will you be writing your own original stories instead of borrowing someone else's world and characters?
Thanks for sharing your ideas!
- Fyrecat
Bob/Alyx, don't worry a bit about the "relationship" part of the story. Personally, canon just had them all of a sudden realize "hey, i love you and you love me, let's get married and have kids", no build up (other than Ron and Hermione fighting). This is a welcome change and I love it, keep up the good work!
Great Cahpter, rite more!
Hi,
Second readings are always so much fun because there are more chapters to look at. I'm glad that you have discovered the joy of writing Dan and Emma. To me they have been so much more interesting
than writing Molly and crew.
Your Cindy character is fun to read about.
Thanks for sharing your stories.
Best wishes,
O-C
Im tempted just to say good story but since alyx might kill me I'll expand. I've really enjoyed the change of pace with this story, it's new and you both have grown as writers since your times at fanfiction.net. I'm being nit picky I know but...hmmm... I guess I'm wanting you guys to expand the vocabulary a little on the intimate moments. I know it probably gets difficult to write something new to describe Harry kissing Hermione and her response but the words "passionately" and others seem to crop up a little too often. Maybe add a few words to the rotation and I'll give you some donuts... only if you say please though... and write more... and write about tutu sporting, pink, furry, monkeys in a disclaimer who anchor Snape on meat hook by stuffing the sharp shiny metal bit wherever it strikes your fancy
