Rovias05 posted a comment on Friday 22nd December 2006 4:33am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Alright. Issues with the story.

Issue One:
Now, Harry has more power than God at this point. I recognize this. God could heal people. Ergo, Harry has a gimp leg why?

Issue Two:
Harry has more power than God. He is whipped by Hermione because?... Oh, and she just begins to grate on my nerves with the whole "Harry [i]ordered me to do what![/i]" thing. After the mass fluffiness of the entire damn story.

Issue Three:
Harry is more powerful than God. Ergo, he suffers debilitating injuries in battle and has an angst-fest afterward. Error 0x0002 - Does Not Compute.

Issue Four:
It took some 18-20 Chapters to kill off Dumbledore. Not counting the prequel. Now, I don't know about you, but Harry warning the stupid bugger so many times and not acting makes him seem rather impotent.

Issue Five:
Haven's military strength. They've had how long now to build up? And they still suffer mass losses every time they go into battle? Wow, they must really suck!

After all those, though, the story is alright. I like the political stuff, but Harry needs to finally do something with the overflowing amount of power he has. Like fix his leg and go kill some Death Eaters in a brilliant bloody massacre without whiling about it afterwards or suffering crippling injuries. Or maybe the stupid Frenchies that are charging him for Dumble-dick's murder.

Alright, that's enough ranting from me. Later.

Bobmin356 replied:

Issue one:
We get it, you don't like the story. That is what your back button is for. Please use it and go find yourself something you actually enjoy reading instead of forcing yourself to read a story you don't like.

Issue two:
We really get it, you don't like the story. See our comments in issue one.

Issue three:
We've begun to think you don't like the story. Then why are you reading it?

Issue four:
It's come to our attention that you don't like our story. Might I recommend you find something else to read? Perhaps a newspaper or a good book.

Issue five:
Please see issues one through four. Rinse and repeat as needed.

End of reply.

knightsbridge posted a comment on Sunday 17th December 2006 9:15am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Well put. We sit here getting fat, dumb, and happy reading what you feed us (which, by the way is a great meal in every chapter) and never say thank you.
So you can take this as 23 chapters of Thank You for being fantastic writers.

Eagle-Eyes posted a comment on Sunday 3rd December 2006 9:28am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

McGonnagal?????? You're killing the Headmistress this time??????

But, I love what you did to that Wizengamot member who seemed to think he was royal and smelled like roses no matter what he did!!!!!

Thorfinna posted a comment on Friday 1st December 2006 5:18am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Here's an addition for your bloopers, from this very chapter. :-)

The below quote is from the Ghost Council section of this chapter, when the 5 Death Eater ghosts are told to choose alliance.

"I died by Voldemort's own hand, killed because he was inpatient."

So Voldie's killing from the hospital these days?

Love the story, love your writing, can't wait to read more...

T

chris13 posted a comment on Sunday 26th November 2006 8:46am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

I cant belive it. i have come to the end of your pre-prepared chapters. I love your story and your writeing style, you guys offically rock!

laughterwithknives posted a comment on Saturday 25th November 2006 2:03pm for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

I very recently found this story and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it! I would have to say that this is one of the most well-conceived and well-written stories that I have seen. It is wonderfully detailed and free of the plot holes that seem to plague many other stories, and for that I thank you very much. I can't wait for the next update!

P.S. I find it odd that you corrected the word "jugged" in one of the bloopers ("The first plain is the plain of spirits, that's where you go after you die to be jugged."), but not the incorrect use of the word plain (vs. plane), unless of course the author meant to talk about plain-spirited people as opposed to complex-spirited ones.

JIM HOOD posted a comment on Saturday 25th November 2006 10:38am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

HELLO YA'LL,
I have been rereading everything you two have written waing on an update. lol ya'll are the greatest and this story is awesome. However that is not all i wanted to say . I've gathered from the reviews that you are having pc problems and want to wish you good luck on the repairs/replacement. thanks by the way for putting your stories on the web for all of us readers to peruse. Happy holidays and look for to seeing more of your work.as a side note i do so hope this is onlya pc problem for you and not a health problem . best of wishes to you and yours.
Jim

Lady Melina Hites posted a comment on Wednesday 22nd November 2006 2:35am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

sorry i yelled at you i like the chapter thou.

melina

Lady Melina Hites posted a comment on Wednesday 22nd November 2006 2:34am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

BOB ALYX HURRY UP AND WRITE ANOTHER CHAPTER
I HAVE NOTHING TO READ!!!!!!!!!! FANFICTION IS MY LIFE!!!!!!!! SO PLEASE PLEASE HURRY.
melina

mathiasgranger posted a comment on Monday 20th November 2006 3:09pm for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Well, after an extensive paper for one of my classes, I treated myself to a trip from the beginning of this series to your current ending point as a means of stress reduction. Consider this my enormous review to cover the entire series up to this point.

I've heard on the grapevine that you've had some computer problems so I really don't expect another update for a little while. So take your time and enjoy the holidays, as much as anyone can when spending more time with certain family members anways!

I wanted to mention and question a few things aside from the occassional typo you've had, despite the efforts of your wonderful editor. As with any written work betaed or not, it is simply not possible to get everything. I know, I am my own proofreader and when I do a read through to catch errors I could go forever or rewrite every passage to improve upon it. So, despite the humor that can be found in the typos you've posted at the end of the chapters, I found them to be in poor taste simply because it's an unneccessary jab at something inevitable in writing. By all means continue to do so, I just wanted to inject my thoughts on the matter. But for the record I won't tell you to "bagger off".

In terms of characters I've enjoyed Harry's progression as you've made perceived weakenesses in the first chapter of Sunset into strengths here in Sunrise. Hermione's character has baffled me from time to time, but as a human being I can attest to the fact that no one is consistent in their actions and beliefs every day of their lives.

Moving on to some of the secondary major characters, I only have one big gripe, Ginny. She is just too impulsive, irrational, and infuriating for me to focus on her character. Yes I know it is her powers speaking. But really she has been overbearing from the beginning of this story all of the way to the present. Now I completely understand the need for ones characters to be flawed and imperfect to add to the deoth and texture of a story. But Ginny simply rubs me the wrong way something awful. It wasn't something I picked up in my first readthrough, but I've developed a definite distaste now.

On to the positives once again. I love what you've done with Luna and Draco. A very unlikely pairing, but in many ways the most endearing couple you've crafted in the series.

As for other business....

Unless I've missed something, it has been quite some time since we've checked in with Moody. I wonder how his resistance aid is going?

Happy Thanksgiving,
Matt

Bobmin356 replied:

Matt,
 A couple of comments in reply.

1) The computer issues have been resolved, chapter 24 is in the hands of my editor and hopefully will be out this weekend.

2) The Bloopers. I only pick bloopers from files where it's apparent the author isn't getting the files beta'd. Usually this means there are tons of mistakes, not just the occasional one. And if you look, you'll find we started the series with bloopers from one of our own stories. Almost all of these bloopers came from files that were loaded with errors and would not have happened if they were (a) properly proof read and (b) had a spell checker used on them.

3) Ginny, yeah, she is a pushy little wench eh? Think of her as Molly light, without the evil intent. She get's a little more airtime this chapter, but not really in a pushy way.

4) Hermione and Harry are still feeling their way through the relationship. Every so often both will backslide, although we've toned that down in recent chapters. Emotionally Hermione and Harry both needed to mature somewhat, each for differing reasons.

5) I find Luna and Draco very tough to write because I dislike canon Draco so intensely. In sunrise they make an unusual pairing, Luna's ditzy attitude is usually enough to keep Draco's ego from running away from him.

-Bob

Dr.Shadow posted a comment on Sunday 19th November 2006 4:32pm for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Really Awesome story so far

kendiara posted a comment on Sunday 19th November 2006 9:31am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

I found the two stories recently and just wanted to say how wonderfully written they are. I usually have a rabid dislike of any of the combinations of Evil!Ron, Evil!Dumbledore and Harry/Hermione. To have all three of them together used to be a guarentee of a story I would hate, however you two are to be commended for making it entertaining and most importantly make sense. It's not like swimming with the squid to prove your not a Death Eater :)

The only thing I can wonder about (and about the only thing that hasn't made sense) is about Charlie. (If there is an explanation for this somewhere, could someone throw me a Point Me spell...thanks). I know that this was a while back and could just be a "plot requirement to make everything else make sense". As a child of divorced parents and a divorced parent with a child, one of the first things that happens is that you tell your children. You tell them that it's happening and if they are old enough, you tell them the why it's happening.

Charlie came to England and it seemed that he didn't know anything other than there was a divorce and what little was in Ginny's letter. It just didn't flow right, but again looking at it from my life experience maybe it's just a me thing. I would think that Arthur would have had to have told him what was going on and why they were getting divorced. It's been about a year(?) since it all came out and no one has written to Charlie in that time? I understand that the evacuation and time in Haven it would have been difficult to send owls, but what about before? I'm not sure how disowning someone works in the wizarding world, but I would have thought that Molly would have written him as well at some point, if nothing else to try and get him on her side. If that had happened, it probably would have made his confusion a bit more understandable.

But all in all great great story and I look forward to the rest of it.

Aquilara posted a comment on Sunday 19th November 2006 2:26am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Hello!

I absolutly adore you story and its prequel. However this is a really nasty end. I hope you will continue soon.

x

Aquilara

Deborahsu posted a comment on Wednesday 15th November 2006 5:03am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Ok. Here's a review. You feed me a chapter, I burp a review. Ok? Can we see what happens next, now? Please?

I loved Harry & the king & their trashing of the wizengamot! LOL!

Dale Dietzman posted a comment on Wednesday 15th November 2006 4:08am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

They read our work and never sto de Lion?ay anything

That, my fine feathered Author is a lie, if not a damned lie! You get far more reviews than most folks get.

BTW, when are you going to feed Amhar to de Lion, he???

MasterKtulu posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 7:44am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Okay! Okay… Relax… Just relax Bob… There’s no need to start ending chapters in cliffhangers just because you want something… I get it… I’m cool man… You want all the people who don’t usualy write reviews (Like me) to start communicating with you more, fulfilling that deep longing inside of you. But are you sure that’s what you really want? Or better yet, need? Yeah? You’re sure? Well all right, don’t say you weren’t warned… Here I go… One review coming up…

I mean it… I’m gonna do it… This your last chance Bob… Once it’s done, that it… There won’t be any going back… Alright then, without further ado, here is my review for Sunrise Over Britain, Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters : Great chapter, update soon.

I wish I hadn’t had to do that Bob… But you left me with no other choice… Now maybe you’ll think of the consequences before doing another Cliffy…

scwhitehouse posted a comment on Tuesday 14th November 2006 4:17am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Both this story and its predecessor are some of the best fanfic I've read. Keep up the good work!

Helen posted a comment on Monday 13th November 2006 8:45am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

I got lost some time ago and just tonight got caught up. I really love your stories and can not wait for an update. I undestand killing Dumbledore, but McGonagall????? WHY OH WHY did it have to be her??? That is only going to piss Harry off, but then you are the writers, so you know it will. Can't wait for an update!!!!!! Hope it is soon... Can't stand the suspense!! Sorry about the typo's but I have been sick and brain is foggy!!
Helen, or as my friend BJ calls me, Dexi!

Star_Ranger4 posted a comment on Sunday 12th November 2006 11:23am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Ah, but Bob... Silence is a good thing. It means we are chewing mightly upon your latest course and are content.

Its when we get whiny you should start worrying.

shelley posted a comment on Sunday 12th November 2006 10:23am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

I love your story and the authors' notes are hysterical. Poor Alyx! Will she ever win an argument?
I was so glad to see Ahmar get taken down a peg or two.

Here's a suggestion for your blooper notes,
"Harry spoke again in parseltongue and a set of spiral stairs pooped out of the sides of the wall".
Sounds stinky!
Harry Potter and the Fulfilled Prophecies. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3183619/9/