Paul Ellison posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 7:19am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

NOOOOOOO!

Great Cliffie, can't wait to see how you resolve this. Will they work out how to save her or not?

Also great way to castrate Amhar's pretentious role in the Ministry. Only request is you go further in that vein of talk! (winces!)

uberwald posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 7:05am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

nice. sad to see Minerva go though

Taegeous posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 6:57am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Blackmailed by a cliffy into leaving a review?!? Never! This was an excellent chapter, but you can't make me admit it. I shall remain lurking in the dark.

It is pitch black. You are likely to be eaten by a grue.

ReaderX99 posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 6:47am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

rofl

nice bloopers there :)

thank you for writing and if it matters at all i for one appreciate reading your work :)

Steve

Kyle Bissett posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 6:45am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

A BLOOPER! In this very chapter!

'a chalkboard was loaded with arithmetic equations.'

Arithmetic equations are grade school muggle math problems (The secret to correcting the problems with your wand lies in the fact that 6*9=42!!!). Equations used in spell work are arithmantic equations, from the term arithmancy.

Another BLOOPER! Sunset over Britain, Chapter 4:
'A moment later she was pouring over a specially prepared file she had created for exactly this purpose.'

She had prepared a file for pouring stuff on? Why? So that she could have the cleaning staff sponge down her desk more often (I think you meant poring)?

If you're going to point out other people's bloopers, you should admit to your own.

One of the people the house elves have been giving arbitrary titles to now has a real military rank - and it doesn't match up. How will the poor things cope?

As I understand it, Avada Kedavra expels the life force (you can't call it a soul when it works on non-sapients) from a body. I think that at worst it would turn Peeves from a poltergeist to a true ghost, since he doesn't have a body per se.

Are the muggles of the world going to think that 'Avada Kedavra' is the battle cry of the group that took over England? That's the simplest PR explanation of the cry they heard on the telethon. Somehow I think the public will be more upset about the accidental death of the actor than the near assasination of the PM (From last chapter, I know, but still valid, as you haven't written about the aftermath of that).

I see that the French are continuing their century old tradition of screwing up important decisions in times of war (Unbroken since Napoleon III).

Alex00 posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 6:33am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Great chapter.

Ike posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 6:20am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

"The first plain is the plain of spirits, that's where you go after you die to be jugged."

So, what, they go out to be judged out in ohio, or something? Judged out on different plains? Is one a wheat field while the other corn?

Hesuse posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 6:15am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

You cliffy-monster!! Great, if a bit dark, it would be nice to see a little bit more Tonks.

Hesuse

coronal posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 6:14am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Oooh. A cliffie! Mean!

Well, I'm probably one of those pod people, though I DO participate in your yahoo group from time to time.

I love your stories in general, and this chappy was absolutely BRILLIANT! Having Charles dissolve the Wizengamot?! Genius!!

goddessa39 posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 6:06am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

....! I do say things sometimes-just not all the time-I try to respond three out of five times... Continue though-and Minerva is hurt? *sniffle* but I like her... but maybe she'll become a ghost and help out that way.

Oldwolf posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 5:56am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Ah, now that was a prank worthy of the Marauders. Harry doesn't get mean often, but when he does, he can certainly be creative.

As for de Leon, he's in for one rather nasty surprise and he should be extremely grateful Harry already had something up his sleeve as I believe the insults to Hermione, both calculated and deliberate, as well as her parents would have been more than sufficent for Mr. Potter to call the poor boy out, followed shortly by the cleaning crew with mops. To date, he's had a limited form of protection from Harry and the consequences of his actions, because of his status not only on the Wizongamot, but also on the special investigative council. I hope he watches his tongue more closely in the future in regards to Harry or else he's going to get himself killed, or at least seriously injured, in the very near future.

As for the cliffy, that's mean. Haven School doesn't have the deep and intrinsic wards that Hogwarts did to keep the Headmistress abreast of the situation, but I'm hoping that Minerva is indeed simply feeling the effects from someone else, though I doubt if I'm that lucky. After this though, there's not going to be anything to stop Harry and the constabulatory from turning that school inside out and upside down to find the culprit. There's also the question of Vertasium. Will the blade be able to keep the user from revealing herself under the potions effect? Also, wheather he likes it or not, Harry's almost going to have to use Ginny to help find that thing, and I honestly expect that she's going to insist on helping regardless.

Jed posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 5:54am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Ooh! Ooh! Can I be immortalized in fan fiction by dying a gruesome grisly death? *grins*

And yes, I am one of the readers who reads your work and doesn't say anything, and I am now coming after both of you for the cliffy with the nerf gun of infinite gerbils.

writerpayne posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 5:50am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

I love this story and i bow to greatness!!! What do you think about Strapping Voldemort to a rocket and sending him to the moon?

Anyway, hope you update soon!!!

Payne

Melferd posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 5:36am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

I abase myself before the frying pan of doom. I'm unworthy scum who has enjoyed your fiction without review. I volunteer to replace Amy in ....
wait a minute, I'm sorry, not crazy.
You both rock!!! I've spent many enjoyable hours reading instead of my
responsibilities as a parent. Thank you for these stories, they stay true to the character voice in a different world.
I'll just go get that hair shirt out of moth balls now...
Tia, Mel

SamanthaMeggin posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 5:32am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

If you are going to kill McGonegall you're friggin nuts!!!!! Why kill her! That's just going to make the story even more angsty and you have so many things happening you'll ovre load the entire story!!! I hope you DON'T kill her! And what of Peeves?! Is he truly dead-DEAD? Perhaps harry can save McGonegall? I HOPE so!
I like this chapter, don't get me wrong, but to kill off MgGonegall....that just seems WRONG!!!
POST MORE ASAP!
Love ya,
Sam

Sean Dillon posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 5:25am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

My divination skills foresaw the King getting involved and doing something about Amhar. But damn! Did you have to attack Minerva?

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 5:12am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

You have fed me and so I respond!

So Voldie has done what he needed to do in order to become equal with Harry... and poor Peeves... is he gone, or only wounded?

I hope that you have a way to save Minerva... we have lost so many good and needed characters. I understand that we lose people in a war, but to lose one such as she to a mindless murder, well... I cry out and beseech thee to find some way for her to survive.

Continue to love what you are doing and hope to read more soon!

Blaithin posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 4:59am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

A silent reader, yes, I admit, albeit an appreciative one. I eagerly await each new installment, and am also silent, not begging for haste on your parts. Thank you for not leaving your readers, silent or otherwise, hanging for too long, and continuing your wonderful story.

That said, I did find a little blooper. Sorry, this is a pet peeve.

"She pulled away from him a few minutes later and shook her head. "If you keep that up much longer, we'll both be in bed, doing things your children shouldn't know about. And their due home soon," she murmured."

they're

Thank you.

texasranger_10 posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 4:31am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

how dare you leave me a cliffy. wait thats not right. i love cliffies. very good work on this story. i read evry new chappy as soon as it is out. i may not respond to all of them but know that i do love the story. and leave all the cliffies you want.

James13 posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 4:30am for Chapter 23 - Muddying the Waters

Oooh...Good chapter!

But another cliffy...bring on the figs and mice, I think we have a new volunteer!

Seriously, one of my favorite HP stories, if only cause it's soo regularly updated and the theme is more adult and very well managed.

Only suggest you cut off harry's leg and give him a silver peg leg that acts as a wand focus, so when he's disarmed (ha!) he's not totally helpless. *ducks for cover*