Jim_xinu posted a comment on Sunday 18th March 2007 3:10am for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Good chapter, and a good final battle. Many thanks for sharing it with us.

kainboa posted a comment on Sunday 18th March 2007 2:53am for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

great chapter as always, really loved how they totally defeated mouldywarts, and the battle between harry and mouldywarts, brilliant!!

keep up the genius work :)

C. Harris posted a comment on Sunday 18th March 2007 1:00am for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Wow!

Dustin Johannes posted a comment on Sunday 18th March 2007 12:59am for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Ding dong, the witch is dead, the witch is dead, the witch is dead. Ding dong the wicked witscriiiitch...
*Hey, think I can edit that witch out with wizard?*{Why not? Go ahead.}
*All right!!!*
scriiiitch...wicked wizard's dead!!!

Awesome chapter guys. I don't think I can leave a review long enough to cover everything I have running through my head right now.

I hearby congratulate the following:
-Susan, Terry, and Siomha. What a way to come into the world.
-Narcissa, Danni, and Melinda, for saving Susan.
-Draco, for killing his father using a means that many wizards just don't get. (I understand it perfectly, as I am currently sitting in Iraq on deployment with the 25th Inf.)
-You guys, for intimately describing the details of the final battle. You had my mind kicking up a storm just imagining myself there in the heat of battle.
-Fuzzy, for saving Neville's life.
-Narcissa (again) and Emily Watkins, for working together to put Draco back together.
-Harry, for saving the world.

But, as along with the good, comes the bad...you guys have left a cliffy in there, with what's going on with Ginny. I do hope she survives. And with Eocho (how do you say that, anyways?)...he said he offered himself up as a sacrifice...what happened to him? Anways, keep up the good work on the final few chapters.

Also, my dad has the same kind of problem with his health as Bob does, so I understand all of what's happening on that end. My dad has had it for over ten years, and he's gotten so good at reading the signs, he's been able to keep his levels under control without really needing to check his blood often. I can't really says get better, as he'll have it the rest of his life...but I can say keep up the good work at keeping your levels where they need to be. I'll be watching for your next chapter in the coming weeks. So, until then...

Dustin aka Dudeous1492

turnlach posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 11:11pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Wonderful chapter. Very interested to see the aftermath as I expect that lots of Muggle troops have landed to begin fighting the DE controlled troops.

Britain is going to take a hell of a long time to recover from this.

fanofdrows posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 11:10pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Very nice battle scene! The best - and most realistic - I've ever read! Please enjoy attached cookies drinks! ;)

Now, being Swedish, I really feel I must comment on the horrid mess you made of my native language. While anyone who knows Swedish will understand what you mean the grammar wasn't so good. Back to school for you! :D

The sentence structure was good, though.

Now that I feel more calm I can admit that Swedish is considered quite difficult to learn (from what I've heard) so to get a simple phrase right when you don't study/know (?) the language is very hard.

The correct wording should be:

"Vänd den här dimman till rök."

which translates to:

"Turn this mist to smoke.".

In this case "Turn" ('Vänd') has meaning only in the physical sence, as in: turn around, turn right.

The correct word to use would be "Förvandla" which means "Turn" in the sence of switching materials or similar.

If you write "Vända" the -a at the end makes the word take on the meaning "will turn", as in it's going to happen in the future.

And "dimma" is the base form of the word meaning of course "mist". But in this case "dimman" is the proper word as the -n makes the word mean "the mist" rather than the floating meaning of mist.

I hope my impromptu lesson didn't bore you to death because I like this fic and am eagerly anticipating the end.

Feel free to lecture my on my use of the English language.

Shawn Pickett posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 10:26pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

An outstanding chapter across the board. I was a little shocked though, I thought you were setting it up for the only Brotherhood casualty to be Susan who was safe at home. It would have been a bit of bitter irony. The whole chapter was just wow, I really can't think of much more to say, thank you.

shadowtrey posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 10:12pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Awesome. Sheer, total awesomeness. So Voldie is dead-dead, or just dead? I mean, he pulled off the "just dead" role before, some... what, seventeen years prior? *pokes whatever remains* Hah! He's gone!

Wait... did Harry absorb the Dork Wanker's magic? That's something I'm a little fuzzy on. And if he did, does that include anything else? Like... personality, or anything?

Gaah...

Loved it. I'm glad that Susan and the baby came through alright- thought one question... Does her name have any meaning behind it?

Eocho was great, too. And if that was the Lady of the Lake, then... Ho-lee crap. That was...wow. Come to think of it, what kind of things will come from his sacrifice later on? Hmm, good question.

Great battle scene, and awesome use of perspectives; both the little guys, and the leaders. Though since you introduced us to Amos, I hope you plan on telling how he survived. Oh, and the young soldier who saved Harry too. I wanna know how they came through this.

Again, pure awesomeness. Can't wait for more.

Joseph Berngartt posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 9:53pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

A great end to a fantastic story. Alyx and Bob, you are by far my favorite authors in the fanfic realm. I can't wait for the next chapter, and hope that at some point you'll write some other stories.

Cu posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 9:45pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Nag M'blow? So that's how goblins make people/buildings explode? By sheer annoyance? lol

morriganscrow posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 9:38pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

0_o

*is speechless*

*is still speechless*

*contemplates offering to have Bob and Alyx's Intarwebz babies*

THAT WAS FRELLING BRILLIANT!!!

DrT posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 9:37pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Wouldn't Remus have a few stories of baby Harry to share?

The battle sequence was very well-done (could have used a bit more on the animals Luna summoned, but one can't have everything). Glad one of her followers gave Lucius an appropriate send-off.

And, of course, now comes reconstruction. The hard part. I wonder if the wizengamot has learned its lesson?

"T"

dic posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 7:42pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

wow... that really was a wonderfully long chapter... i was wondering, to be honest, what had happened to these blood jihad and asian triad guys... wasn't voldie allied with them? or am i confusing that with another story now? dunno^^

in case i didn't say it the last time i reviewed, this story is the most amazing work of fanfiction i have ever come across. and it's not only the length, which is always a great factor for me, but the content. really like it. can't wait for the next chapter!!

Aberforth's Avatar posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 7:40pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Amazing. Just amazing.

This chapter delivered beyond all expectations. The battle scenes were taut, and the death of Voldemort absolutely original. You have outdone yourselves. Thank you!

Kalen Darkmoon posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 6:33pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Awesome chapter! Very tense and well done battle. I was chewing my fingernails through it.

You two have produced one of the finest HP fics out there and I daresay your version of events is far better than JKR could even hope to produce. Canon HP is hideously riddled with plot holes and makes little sense in how she has handled Harry's abused childhood. Canon Harry has been shown to not be any sort of hero but a puppet/pawn of adult given how Harry blindly (almost puppy-like) follows Dumbledore. Its absolutely disgusting that in HBP it is revealed that Dumbledore knew entirely about the "cruelty and neglect" the Dursleys inflicted upon Harry but yet had done nothing to stop or discourage it. In fact he ordered yet again that Harry return the next summer until he was 17. This has made me despise canon Dumbledore even more-so than Voldemort. Dumbledore is represented as and supposed to be the embodiment of good and hope but yet he condones 16 years of child abuse and thus is proven to be little better than Voldemort in how he uses people under his influence. His treating Harry as nothing but a prophesied weapon shows Dumbledore to be as much of a monster as the Dark Lord.

Since canon now makes me want to vomit in disgust I am very grateful for fellow fans who have stood up and written far better continuances of the Potter Universe. Thank you for all of your efforts in sharing your wonderful imagination.

ginnyrocks posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 6:30pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

awesome, awesome, awesome!

I really hope Ginny is all right.

Now Hermionie can put on HER t shirt
"so you killed Voldemort... what have you done for me lately?"

mythicaljayde posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 6:30pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Okay.... Great timing, for one. I just finished a complete reread a few days ago, and now this! Yay!!!
Now, since I'm horrible at reviewing, I'll keep this short:

I am amazed. This chapter is all - and more, than what I've been waiting for. It is hands-down the BEST defeat of ole VoldieButt that I've ever read.
I would list every specific thing that I loved, but my review would end up rivaling the chapter itself in length. :D
This fic was my first H/Hr that I read, and it is now one of my absolute favorite fics EVER. And I really don't say that lightly, because I've read THOUSANDS of fics in many different fandoms. This is by far one of the tops. :D

That said.... Thank you for writing it - it has given me (and many others) countless hours of enjoyment.

Can't wait to see how things end up in the remaining chapters,
Jayde.

PS: I hope Bob continues to get better.

Particle_Accelerator posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 6:27pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Bravo!

What a great chapter. The pacing, the tension, the action... it was all perfect! I love the way you killed Voldie. Very unique! Sorry to see that this epic is finally coming to a close, but all good things...

Very well done.

Zaz posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 6:13pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

Help with translation: "Vända den här dimma till rök"
All the words are in their neutral form, so the sentence doesn't make much sense.. The equivalent in english would be "'To turn' 'this here' 'some fog' to smoke."
A correct translation would be "Vänd denna dimma till rök" ... but applying the verb vänd to the subject of fog isn't really possible, 'vänd' doesn't mean 'turn' in the sense of 'turn into' in Swedish.

Let me recommend something along the lines of:
"Låt mina ord skingra denna tjocka dimma och frammana flyktig rök där tidigare endast ogenomträngligt dis funnits."

(Translates to 'Let my words scatter the thick fog and bring forth ephemeral smoke where there has been only impenetrable mist')



...oh, and <3 @ the chapter.

lelila posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 6:02pm for Chapter 30 - Sunrise Over Britain

wow, wow!! the final battle, the big fight!! everything was planned out to a tee, preperations were made and they're sent out to war, but of course, not everything goes perfectly cause there's always a surprise hidden but u prepare for what u can and do what u can. honestly, this is way too close to home for me. i can't believe the amount of details u guys go into during the fights. if i've never said it before, shame on me cause i should have. it blows my mind with all the strategy and whatnot and the inventions that were created were used quite well. the caltrops were an especially nice touch.

i can't believe they forgot about the medallions sending the brotherhood back to the manor if they're hurt, but i guess it shows the dedication they have towards everyone as a whole unit working together and how it's not just the the brotherhood. it's the whole of england fighting for their home and that sort of unity stuff. i was sort of hoping that the brotherhood as a whole would be together and take out voldemort, just to see how they might fight together but i'm well aware that it's always been harry and tom in the end. and harry kicked his ass and u didn't cop out with just a few killing curses thrown once or twice. woohoo!! *does happy dance in chair* i knew putting my faith in u guys for a decent last battle between good and bad wasn't in vain. i've been disappointed so many times. i only hope jk's version will bring me as much satisfaction.

u have this odd thing about leg injuries from harry, terry and ginny. oh, and i imagine that since harry used that spell to be able to use his leg, there's a possibility that his leg might be worse, eh? and i should have known that susan would pop the kid out just when the battle's starting. it's the process of life and death and all that. and way cute of remus and tonks saying they're going to have a kid now.

oh, gosh, i can hardly believe it's basically over. i mean, i know there's the 2 follow ups since there's going to be a whole lot of clean up to do but the major fight between the light and dark in the au harry potter world is over. i'm just blown away. bloody brillant. flipping spectacular. *frantically claps hands and nodds head as am now lost for more words to describe how much i've loved everything* i think i might end up sobbing over my keyboard when i read that final chapter.