shadowmist posted a comment on Wednesday 4th January 2006 5:14am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

You know, i question Charlie's logic in choosing to go to britain before going to Harry. Didn't Ginny send a letter to Charlie? Thus, wouldn't Charlie go to a place where he knew people were? Even if he thought they wouldn't help him find his mother, he would most likely think that having a safe place to start looking for his mother to be more logical than jumping into a location known to be taken over by death eaters. Would i be incorrect if i guess that the reason you didn't have charlie do such was because you wanted him with Dumbledore? If so, i think that perhaps Dumbledore should've written a letter of sorts to get Charlie over there? It would make more sense...

Anyways, I love this story a lot although the opening disclaimer things tend to feature unknown people (and i'm too lazy to google search) and the sexual things are a bit oddly placed. Anyways way, this story rocks and i hope you update soon and stuff.

freakyfinger posted a comment on Wednesday 4th January 2006 1:18am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

To what extent can Remus control his were-animagus? Is it just that he can change form at will, or that when he does transform, he won't need a wolfsbane potion to have rational thoughts?

noylj posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2006 3:20pm for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Great story, but the circle scene was not very descriptive. Why waste nudity if you aren't going to describe anything?
Please keep the chapters rolling. So far, you are the best writers in terms of good story and reliable updates.

Lady FoxFire posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2006 11:03am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

"Any resemblance between Snape and Metatron in the previous chapter was purely coincidental" - good cover. I'm sure we'll see it for Snape and Hans Gruber in the next chapter.

As for the evil that is Dumbledore... when you think of him do you picture the actor Richard Harris or the latest actor to play Dumbledore Michael Gambon? It would be interstign to see what those two fine actors would do to your version of Dumbledore.

As for deal with Snape and the confusion between him and the actor Alan Rickman, may I make a few suggestion.

"I'll cut your heart out with a spoon" - Sheriff of Nottingham (If you can insult Kevin Costner too all the better. Worst Robin Hood ever. Alan Rickman stole the movie)

Galaxy Quest - thats it. I'm not saying anymore.

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2006 9:22am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

It's going to be interesting to see Charlie's reaction when he gets the real story. I like the way the ritual went and how things developed from there, this is getting to be an even more engrossing story than you're previous efforts.

azntgr01 posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2006 9:01am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

^^

jessiepp posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2006 8:37am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

hey what is up good story keep it up. and by the way how can i keep in contact with you over msn or skype or something i think you are very cool.

Darrell2 posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2006 3:46am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Bravo! Encore! Author! I laughed, cried, smiled, and frowned in anger in this chapter: everything that I like in one was there, Even old Dudders! I know that you are going to use him as bait of some kind, but still let Tommy Boy kill the fat tub of stupidity. Please update soon.

Schokki posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2006 2:25am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Great!^^

Go on!

RebaWilliams posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2006 1:30am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Another great chapter... and I was mentioned in the AN (woohoo)!

I will not debate your take on Harry/Draco - as it is your right to believe as you do; but I will tell you my view on it. Canon tells us that Harry is straight and he is in love with Ginny. But the fun in reading and writing slash is finding an author who can, while still using canon, support Harry being gay and convincingly showing the progression of his love for Draco (or any other male character of the author's choice); many authors fail to do this, but when one does - it makes for great reading (IMO).

But, back to your story.... I am anxiously awaiting your next chapter, I am totally enthralled with this story. I have many questions; but I am sure that those will be answered as you continue writing, so I will wait.

~Reba

kittykatluver posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 11:39pm for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

I liked it all except the sexual stuff. That was disgusting, and didn't really mesh well.

LoggingInSucksAss posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 10:10pm for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Whoa! Whole lotta plot building in this chapter. Whole lotta typos, too. :)

You certainly didn't disappoint with the ceremony, considering the extremely long build up to this point.

I'm scared to think of the Twins working with Draco....

nurray posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 2:20pm for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Welcome to 2006, may it be a good year for all of us.

Draco as "Q", very good. Though really the Fred and George as "Q" is scary. I can just imagine Dan showing the twins the James Bond movies or Helga and Inga telling them about it. Ford Anglia's (sp?) will never be safe again!

I was wondering if Dumbedore would get his confrontation with Harry when Harry and Co went to the Druid site. But it looks like it wont be to long now.

Dumbledore must know that he has to contend with more than just Harry in terms of re-gaining control over Harry at this point. It will be interesting to see in how he intends to achieve this. I would have thought that by now Dumbeldore would be concentrating on following the action in terms of stealing the limelight (which actually Harry doesn't want anyway) after it is all over. That would be amusing. Harry and Dumbledore come to an arrangement. Harry wins the war with Voldemort and Dumbledore claims the credit, allowing Harry to disappear into somewhat obscurity. Both would be happy.

Shawn Pickett posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 10:37am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Nice chapter, Albus is working his hooks subtly into Charley, and that is so obviously going to be an agonizing problem later. To boot, it's almost guaranteed that whatever he does at Dumbledore's behest will come at the worst possible time (I don't suppose there is any chance that you'll go for the comic relief angle and have whatever Albus attempts to do fail miserably and reveal him for the meddlesome old fool he is?) I liked the way you had everyone get so nervous about the ritual and how they dealt with their issues. The Weasley twins are doing Q branch? Voldemort is so screwed. Overall, a very enjoyable chapter, thank you. Also, Alyx, can't Bob write Harry spanking Hermione she was very naughty and lit the grail beacon, and Harry could use a little peril. (Sorry, I was just watching my Holy Grail DVD.)

MattD posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 5:01am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Good stuff =). I continue to love this story and your writing.

carlinonthebrain posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 3:36am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

another gem, thanks very much. especially liked the sequence with the ritual, and I eagerly await Dumbles getting his ass handed to him

Jake posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 3:36am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Wow, that chapter was more than worth the wait. I was expecting it to end before the ritual had finished and I'm glad it didn't, I dont think I could take it. I loved all the interaction with the rest of the outcasts, it's one of the things I feel like the story has been lacking lately, they're not around enough. I can't wait to see all the cool stuff they're going to learn from the Brotherhood. Keep up the great work, it's stories like yours that make me want to finish mine, it's not going to happen but the inspiration still comes so keep it up and update soon!

-Jake

Quizer posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 3:22am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Another great chapter! Thanks for updating!
I like how things are starting to look up again, what with the Brotherhood and the Twins inventing new equipment. Though I wonder to what extent Charlie will allow himself to be (mis-)guided by Dumbledore.

so long
Quizer

Mickey posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 3:07am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

Very nice, I liked the ceremony and I can't wait to see Dumbeldore and Charlie finally reach Haven and Padfoot Manor.

I did notice a mistake, during Amalia Bones' discussion with the Irish minister she says in response to a question as to when the Fideleus charm will be lifted:
"No later than the end of the month. It will take us at least that long to get our constables trained properly,"

So which is it? Will the charm be lifted before the end of the month? Or will the initial perperations to lift it not be complete until at least the end of the month?

Meghan posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 12:49am for Chapter 4 - Labor Pains

as lovely as it was long! :D great chapter and I loved the rite ...