TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Monday 1st May 2006 10:58pm for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Very good chapter, hope they can save Charlie.

gunny

Viridian posted a comment on Tuesday 28th March 2006 7:58am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Harry Neville and Draco bantering, especially with Minerva, was a little unreal, but nicely done!

I know this is a super!harry story, but I'd just as soon not see massive power-inflation and new skills n' superpowers popping out in every chapter. Even with the detailed backstory, they still stress the suspension of disbelief a little more each time.

If you're going to set a story in Dalton, Georgia, it would have been funnier to have the dealer working out of a carpeting warehouse or showroom. (Dalton is the carpet manufacturing capital of the US. Don't ask me why, I just live near by.)

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Thursday 2nd March 2006 9:08am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Ugg. I don't want another Weasley to get on the wrong side - the non-Harry side.

Interesting conversations with Eocho.

Great work!

silverx posted a comment on Tuesday 31st January 2006 10:07am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

hey, great story btw. i'm a big fan. one little grammatical mistake tho, when eocho speaks in general he says "thy", before a word that starts with a vowel "thy own", it should be "thine":
"thine own" etc...

n4zhg posted a comment on Wednesday 25th January 2006 8:46pm for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Suggestion for Updateless List

http://www.sugarquill.net/read.php?storyid=1642&chapno=1

Roy1 posted a comment on Wednesday 25th January 2006 2:28pm for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

I would be quite offended if you had Draco or the twins driving a BMW as any Bond afficianado(sp) knows, James Bond was ALWAYS in an Aston Martin with the one bastardized exception in which they had him in a beemer. I have just discovered this universe and am reallly looking forward to future updates.

Ombra posted a comment on Thursday 19th January 2006 2:49am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Another excellent chapter, keep up the good work

Kyle Bissett posted a comment on Tuesday 17th January 2006 11:14pm for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Will the twin's operation be called F branch, G branch, or W branch?

Is Charlie going to do more than just spy? At the moment he seems to be skewing all perceived facts to align them with what AD told him. Hopefully a healer will find out about his problem before he has to lose the leg (persistent lead poisoning can be nasty).

A reccomendation for the updateless list.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2140593/1/

Magic and Martial Arts: Year 1

AU Crossover (Ranma 1/2, Harry Potter) fic. Vernon decides he doesn't want to raise a freak, so he turns Harry over to a cousin who might be able to beat the weirdness out of him... Genma Saotome. Filed under H/Hr, but since this story hasn't cleared first year yet they are just very good friends at the moment. Last updated 9/2005.

Fishburne posted a comment on Monday 16th January 2006 9:17am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Well, what a wonderful tale, full of angst, angry Harry, and adorable fluffy Dumbledoor/Snape!

Interesting is the lowest of the compliments I can pay, Gigglefest among the most prevalent and Wicked use of all of Alan Rickman's essential characters (except one...still waiting on the Prince John bit).

You may thank Kinsfire for my trespass, as I go some distance back with the poor lad.

Love the work, looking forward to the next installment, and now I have to go placate my wife (for ignoring ones spouse for HP fanfic can be hazardous to ones nether regions).

shadowmist posted a comment on Monday 16th January 2006 7:30am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Eh, I dunno whether you misunderstood my question, whether i even wrote the question instead of thinking it, or whatever, but in my case i wasn't wondering why charlie was looking for his mother, i was wondering why charlie didn't go to his family first before going into dangerous territory. I mean, it's the logical thing to do. What if his mother already was found and was in haven? What if the people in Haven had information on his mother's whereabouts? Eh, just my 2 cents worth. Update this great story soon please!

Jasmine posted a comment on Monday 16th January 2006 3:48am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Ha! I finally caught up, now I have to wait like everyone else... I am really enjoying this story. I can't wait to see what happens with Charlie

Philipe posted a comment on Sunday 15th January 2006 10:58pm for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

I'm at work, so my review will be quite short, but two points:

1. Love the Updateless list.. heheh..
2. The Charlie has me worried, 'cause i don't see harry trusting him enough and maybe even calling his bluff, but his complete trust in Millicent has me in doubt..

Overall a great chapter.. the lenght doesn't bother me as long as you keep posting it.. (Just answering here also)

See ya
P.

azntgr01 posted a comment on Sunday 15th January 2006 1:56pm for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

^^

demon posted a comment on Saturday 14th January 2006 3:29pm for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

loved the first story and this was good at first too but it became so confusing that i don't even know when i became confused in the first place anymore so i have to stop reading now sorry

LoggingInSucksAss posted a comment on Saturday 14th January 2006 1:52pm for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

"Draco isn't Q, Draco is M. The twins make up Q branch, as we see here in this chapter."

Technically, aren't the TWIN twins the Q branch? Then they'd be the Quad branch!

I'm so clever. ~deadpan~

Ginny's reaction to Charlie is interesting. It'll be interesting to see how's Dumbledore's interference creates ANOTHER break in the Weasley family, even Charlie is so far just a dupe with no bad intentions.

stgilman10 posted a comment on Saturday 14th January 2006 1:37pm for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Good chapter. Loved the HHGG reference in the disclaimer. If Sunrise goes on too long, you guys are going to run out of Rickman movies to use. I kinda want more actiony stuff to happen, but I know that that will come when it does, and that it will. By the way, the twins are Q branch, yes, but Draco is not M. Miles is M (lol), Caleb is like 007 and Draco is like that Robinson guy in the later Brosnan Bond movies.

MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Saturday 14th January 2006 11:02am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Wow, what a facted filled chapter. I think it is funny that everyone got busted for having sex. I dont think that I would have taken it as well as ginnys dad. (being that I have a 15yr old daughter, I think some bodly harm would have happened.)

Charlie is going to be a wild card at Haven now, what is he going to do and will he see the light before he gets into trouble with everyone. Ginny already suspects him, and I think that see is going to be the one to call him on it, not Harry.

Reviewer Note:
A comment on your Updateless list, I dont know how many time I start reading a story and then get to the last chapter and its not the end and it has not been updated for a while. So now I screen all stories before I start reading it; 1. I look at last chaper to see if its completed. 2 I look at when the author started the story and how many chapters the author has written since the begining. (ex. 10 chapters in 6 months). 3. How long are the chapters. 4. Finally I look to see how many different stories the author is currently writing. Well these are some of checks that I do to prevent getting caught up in a story that is updateless. My updateless contribution Moonlit Nights http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2009992/1/ a Harry/Hermione vampire fic has not been updated since Auguest of 2005.

MPF

josh52629 posted a comment on Saturday 14th January 2006 11:00am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

i think the first one should have been Power of Time by Rosswrock, but hey, any non updated story is a good one.

Another good chapter, i've read and liked all of your stories.

Ken Warner posted a comment on Saturday 14th January 2006 7:06am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Dear Bob and Alyx,
Once again a wonderful chapter, really like that the couples need to be formally committed to each other, if only that that fits better into my personal world view. Great build ups with Arthur and Melinda as well as with Charlie the unwitting spy and the rest of the world. While I am one of those calling for Dumbledore's messy and painful comeuppance - I can wait on the needs of your story line. drat :(
Thanks

Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Saturday 14th January 2006 5:05am for Chapter 5 - Relationship building

Cgreat chapter. I had to frankly expect a marriage sooner than the end of the war. To me it is a plot point once he proposes and to save it till after the distant end to the war removes the bulk of the plot surrounding it. You did very well justifying the change in schedule. I see that it could be a long time before Charlie changes to the Haven side. I think that it would be realized that he is working for another side within a couple of weeks, to the emotional detriment of Arthur especially. You are doing well in avoiding the stereotypical superpower Harry. This is the death of the superpower fiction. If one can solve all of their problems with a wave of their wand, why haven't they? We have all read the fics where Harry is knowledgeable and powerful enought to end it tomorrow, but doesn't for some wiley reason, all for more than a two thousand word story, after all, he received all of his power in the first three hundred word chapter when he turned sixteen and somehow his magic knew that he was suddenly not only sixteen but that it was exactly midnight. It was supremely more convincing in your version of events.

Thank you for writing.

Mike.

P.S. I am currently beating on my muse with a cat-o-ninetails in an attempt to get some coherent story out of it for the next chapter of my own story in an effort to never get close to the UPDATELESS LIST myself. If I think that she enjoys the beating too much, I will have to find another meathod of encouraging my muse.