Regress posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 10:04am

Please tell me big D is going to die soon. Both of them (Dudley and Dumbledore). And poor Charlie! All twisted and enthralled without even knowing it. Dingledong's got his claws into him but good.

Can't wait to see what happens with that part of the story, and how the Haven Army is going to start taking the fight to the DEs. I think there should be a House Elf combat squad, I mean can you imagine if they gave them all like, little swords or pistols or something? They can pop around naturally, heck it's what they DO most of the time. I mean 20 of them could come up against 20 DEs, and just pop behind them, stab them, pop away to confuse them, wait a moment or two, pop back in, stab, pop out. They'd be DEADLY! And unless there is a anti-popping ward out there, (They can pop in Hogwarts which had the strongest anti-apparating wards around from what I know and it didn't slow them down any), they could pull off all kinds of assassinations right in the heart of DE territory. I would love to see Lucius Malfoy waking up to Dobby standing over him with a hand-gun aimed right between his eyes. But that's just me, I love house elves. They rock, and are TOTALLY under-rated in most fictions, although you've done a MUCH better job than most in giving them a role that allows them to better utilize their talents.

Even if you don't bust out the Death-By-Dobby, I love this story and can't wait to see where it goes from here. Keep up the good work!

Meghan posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 7:41am

Oh I agree don't kill poor old Dumblydoor off... just slice into him publicly viciously and into so many frantic "how-do-I-save-myself?" pieces not even all of the power Harry commands could put Dumbledore together again...

Lady FoxFire posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 7:40am

So doesn't Dumbledore have any spells on Charlie and thats why he's following him without question?

noylj posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 7:17am

You two are the only writers who can have an Updateless List and not be hypocrites. Have you tried HP and the Power of Time for a wait? How about The Next Dance? HP and the Runespoor Shield? Backwards Compatible? Flying without a Broom? This Means War? These may not all be stellar stories, but I enjoyed them but haven't seen an update in so long...
Again thank you for two things: great stories and regular updates.

Crys posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 7:13am

Harry's threatening Tonks's income seemed just a bit . . . off. Oh, it was the quickest path to get what he wanted, but it seemed just a bit OoC, even in jest.

The talk with Millicent shows the continuing tensions in the general population. Well done.

Arthur/Melinda interaction is good (especially his confused explanations). The twins^2 are always entertaining (giant crabs? ;) Neville telling off Draco was great. Luna's thoughts are always a trip.

Charlie. Well, I'm glad at least Ginny is suspicious, though she can't verbalise why. Interesting to see where that leads.

Incidentally, if AD had an "Order" hideout in Ireland, wouldn't McG et al know about it?

As always, looking forward to more.

Jake posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 6:51am

Great chapter, I love the way the story is progressing and can't wait to see what happens next with the american informant. The James Bond stuff is great and I think that Draco using Luna as a letter drop opens up some kinky possibilities like we've already seen. Keep up the great work and update soon!


-Jake

Lurk posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 6:41am

Wonderful chapter, guys! Gah, I feel soooo insanely bad for Charlie! But ya know, it would be funny if he managed to get Dumbledore in, and then everyone in the Haven just completely blew him off (Dumbledore, that is, not Charlie.) Oh, what a blow to the ego!

Poor Ginny. What with Charlie now, she must be frightened that she's loosing another part of her family. But hey, she does have Neville to cheer her up! I loved Arthur's reaction, by the way. Even though I was ticked that he would say something like that to Harry. I guess that goes to show that he still hasn't completely forgotten the lies he'd been fed.

Aaaand we see the Twins deadly (maybe) pranks! Glad you finally got them in there, and glad Draco wised up enough to see their potential! Battles are going to become much more interesting now.

Personally, I'm in two minds about Harry's leg. One mind is saying, "BOOYAH! We've got a powerful Harry, BUT he's got his own fight-limiting-problem which is NOT going to go away (though it might get better.)" The other mind is saying, "Wait...I like SuperPower!Harry...and his body should be fit, his whole body!" Then, of course, I repeatedly strike the second mind, disgusted that it would wish to "Common-ize" your incredible story.

Keep up the great work! Love the UPDATELSS LIST!

Chewy posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 6:26am

Will Harry find out about Charley and what Ginny feels about something been wrong. I really liked were Harry was laying down the law the land to Mr Wesley i like the way you are writeing Luna she is not as space as some auters write her. will dumbledor cause more trouble for. Harry and what will Harry do when he finds out Charley is spyin for Dumbledor i hope before Harry takes care of Vordmont he will get even with Dumbledor.

Amanda1 posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 5:56am

Very nicely done as usual.
The Prancing Pony wouldn't be from Lord of the Rings, would it? And did Q come from the "Bond" movie series? It just rang a bell while I was reading.
I also have read "The Father" and I, too, wish that it was updated. :-(
What has happened to Hedwig by the way? Haven't seen her in awhile.

Kari posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 5:28am

yay! more!... yum...

Fiona O'Neill posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 5:20am

I enjoyed this chapter. I found the reaction of Arthur cute I'm sure no father wants to find out that his fifteen/sixteen year old daughter is having sex with her boyfriend.

One thing that struck me was how I had completely forgotten they were still in their sixth year, with so much happening I had the feeling that Harry's birthday had been and gone.

I find Arthur's reaction to Melinda endearing and find myself wondering how Charlie will react to his father forming a new relationship with another woman when thye don't know what happened to Molly.

I'm also curious about Ginny's new gift is she an empath or perhaps something else.

Did the bonding that Draco and Luna underwent make it easier for him to accept her emotional releases - perhaps not the best way to term that?

Anyway thanks for writing, looking forward to the next update

exar posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 4:58am

Great chapter you two. I would love to see you have an encounter with AD and HP soon, although I can understand your need for the alternate plot villian thing.

Maybe i forget with so many stories I read...but what happened to Fawkes and we he make an appearance again?

I don't really understand the whole Charlie is too stupid to see AD is a idiot but I can't wait to see how it turns out.

Also...prob the best story out there that has not been updated in ages is HP and the Mind Mage by James Milamber...my gosh that is a fantastic story I wish would get finished.

Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 4:51am

Loved the scene with the twins being chased by giant crabs. Never really explained the shaking building, though.

The power the dark lord knows not - the power to lead. Good.

The image of Luna jumping on the bed was funny.

Marrage law fiction, anyone? Funny miscommunication scene with Arthur afterwards.

Dumbledore's scum. I hope his plans all fall flat, and his captured by lizard lips. Or is that snake face? Whatever.

Good chapter. Thanks for writing. Keep up the good work.

Tom A.

beauty01021 posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 4:40am

yeah great chapter can't wait for more so pelase update again soon.

Riven posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 3:49am

absolutley wonderful chapter.
i hope they figure out about spy charlie before he tells dumbledork anything too secret.

loved the weasley twins, and the whole sex talk was awsome. thank you for this wonderful chapter.

patrik svensson posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 3:43am

Great story,
keep up the good work.

Opinions are like assholes.
Everyone has one - but some just smell worse than others.

Sean Li posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 2:49am

Chapter "A New Ally..." last line, should be owe intead of own.

Nitpicks!

You like your Bond and LotR references, what with Q and the Prancing Pony, eh?

Joe Ritter posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 2:36am

Great Chapter. I loved the talk with Arthur and Melinda miscommunication over "they have to get married." Also, how did you know that we dread the Author's Notes. Do you dread them too?

Oh well, please ignore us whiners and keep writing your vision.

Ben Russell-Gough posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 2:30am

First, sorry for not reviewing chapters 2 and 3. I was kind of busy those days and got out of the habit *cringes*

Well, things certainly seem to be hotting up. The old-style teaching methods of Eocho seem to be developing our heroes' powers faster than before. I find myself wondering how this pair bonding ritual may affect matters too.

Dumbledore seems likely to be the villain of the sort of 'middle portion' of this story. He is Voldemort's enemy but that doesn't make him Harry's friend or any kind of asset in the struggle to come. Let's face it, Dumbledore can't really imagine any kind of world where he isn't king.

I find myself wondering how long Charlie will be able to function as a spy. If he were to meet Harry directly, I think that the boy's powers would scythe through the defences that Dumbledore created like they were wet paper. Of course, that would depend on Harry knowing that it was necessary. That is where Ginny will come in.

I remain interested in seeing what Molly is doing right now. I am still of the opinion that she is Voldemort's Vice Secretary for Family Resettlement and Child Re-Education. Basically the big, bad kiddie brainwasher-in-chief.

Your usual fine work, although the chapters are getting a bit too long, to the point where they intimidate the reader.

BenRG's Rating: 7/10

shlager_5321 posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 1:34am

great chapter!!
i cant seem to shake the thought that the new comunning talent that you siad the Harry will learn will lead to the brotherhood to find about charlie and bumbel-bee...
again great chapter and i cant wait for the next but i do have a question-
what is happening to Mad-Eye?? i dont think it is possible that he died or that he was captured by moldy-worts so where is he??
update soon