erin_colien posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 1:20am

nice update looking forward to the next.

carlinonthebrain posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 1:04am

great chapter. i have to wonder about the reactions of Ginny and everyone else once they discover that Charlie is spying for Dumbles, even if he has been semi-brainwashed. Worst, what will Harry do? other than that, no problems or other things, just another great chapter

Paulo Weber posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2006 12:06am

Hey, nice part, and the Q branch is amazing. And the updateless list is ... interesting *opens up the last unifinished part of Black's War*
About Charlie and Dumbledore, let's hope the Weasley sees the light, his family has suffered too much already.

AK posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 11:23pm

Hum what you mean you got kicked off fanfic.net... You still got two stories there... Anyway. Myabe it is because I am waiting a week or so between each of your chapters but I get the feeling that the story is progressing way to slowly, it's like you got too many threads to cover at once wich is why the story seems to barely progress in time (or maybe ive been smokin not sure about that). Oh and if you put story on the Updateless List Put this one (I'm annoyed at the author cause its a really nice story and has not been updated for ever) : Backwards compatible by Ruskbyte (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1594791/1/) Maybe if everyone annoys him he will update? :)
Right so to finish this pointless review, good story guys! keep workin on it I for one really look up to your next post :)

Sim posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 11:20pm

Hello. I'm usually a lurker with good fics, but recent discussions on Tim's group is making me re-evaluate that.

So ahh, first a nitpick - In the New Ally section, last line (He smiled at her. "It looks like I own you two favors now.") own should be owe.

Secondly, a personal discourse (aka living my own dream through your fic) - I like SuperHarry fics, and I really love that you have given him a gammy leg. (Very Ian Flemming - even if he's not a villain.) However, not happy that Eocho has given him a way around it. I was really looking forward to him having to work around it in the final show-down.
Oh! - and don't kill Dumbledore! I love the Dumbledore bits.
(andIwanttoseemoreMcGonnagalasacat)

A comment irrelevant to the story - I miss the Pet hates. I share most of your pet hates too, but one you haven't mentioned is US English-speaking wirters who freely substitute the word bloke/blokes for the (more American) slang guy/guys... Yes, you don't do this, well not in a way that has made me cringe, but I thought that I'd share.

And a bit of a squee! - Thankyou for being so original! The sunset/sunrise series is so refreshing and different!! Your story introduced me to ffa.net, and for that I'm eternally grateful. Characterisation is done brilliantly - not just focused on the canons with obligatory interaction with plot-driven character X who fills purpose and then returns into the background. This chapter (and review) has me up till 02:30 because I had to read it before going to bed. Thankyou for sharing it with us.

Shawn Pickett posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 11:08pm

Nice chapter, I was amused/impressed with Ginny taking such a forcefull role with her father across the board. Let's hope the others take her suspicions about Charley seriously. The bit with the twins doing the q-branch bit was funny, I look forward to seeing what mayhem they can unleash. Great job, thank you.

kittykatluver posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 11:05pm

Nice "Updateless" list. I'll go read it. Anyway, nice chapter! I really like the 'talk' between Arthur and Melinda...I like that name...

TheBlackPearl posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 10:59pm

Fantastic read as always. I do hope Ginny can figure out why Charlie is bothering her before any real damage is done.

Curious about who was doing the buying in the U.S. Maybe Lucius?

Loved seeing Marvin in the disclaimer. Priceless.

Pam

Makileus posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 10:50pm

I am glad that Harry's leg wasn't magically all the sudden fixed. Gives crediance to the story. Don't know what to say that has not already been said. Curious if you are continue to do fanfics after this one, and if you have an idea for your next fic.

Quizer posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 10:23pm

Great chapter, thanks for updating!
You're getting too good at this suspense stuff, what with Dumbledore's antics, the uncertainty of all the spells and stuff he's planted into Charlie's mind, and the Hufflepuff Conspiracy. Please don't torture us for too long! ;)

Quizer

Arkeus posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 10:19pm

question: caleb, did you take this name as an homage to feist, or did you try to invent a name and.....?
Hope the thing go well for charlie , though he is stupid to think that matured=controlled.

Stone Cold posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 10:19pm

Love this story.

Every update continues to weave a powerful story. A great story that is so much fun to read.

Boy howdy, Charlie Weasley isn't one of the brighter of the Weasley clan.

harry85 posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 10:13pm

I liked this chapter, and I reckon it's just obvious you can't kill Dumbledore soon. I just hope they kick Charlie from Haven soon, that would already be enough.

However, I don't think that will happen too. Guess DD will know lots on Haven before his spy is discovered...

red jacobson1 posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 9:08pm

Hey Bob and Alyx; excellent chapter; and (since I hate just saying the same thing over and over *GRIN*) I'd like to compliment you on your use of Terry in this chapter; honestly; I think that's the most character development I've ever seen him receive in all the fics I've read.

Also, is the Prancing Pony still run by old Barliman Butterburr?

Can't wait to see what else you two have in store for us.

red

Olafr posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 8:35pm

Souped up brooms? Maybe souped up spoons... can you imagine that? *snicker*

As always, very well done. One minor nit, one *pours* water but *pores* over books &c.

- Olafr.

Kristina posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 8:14pm

another great chapter from a couple of fine writers. well first off...
Damn shame that Dumbledore isn't gonna die! I'm sorry, but in this I hated his guts!
I'm sorry, that was a big outburst.
It was good, can't wait to see what happens next!

P.S. So um, Charlie is been corrupted by Dumbledore, huh?

biblios posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 7:05pm

I am finally getting a chance to review but am finding it hard to review when most of the authors here are so good, so I will do a what I like instead ;-)
I love the slow development of the characters, and cant wait for more of the grangers... I hope charlie dosent do anything too unfixable before he learns how he is being duped... he seemed the closest to his mum in careing for all, and all being in its place, careing as in dragons! and calmess, and while bill would see his folks as people due to being the oldest the rest wouldnt automatically and charlie has been away sooo long, esp his thoughts on ginny would be behind reality even in a normal situation, this aint normal, hope draco picks it up and the twins help... love the twin/twins and I like the funnies at the top but must you hurt poor sevvie? and the next one could be a cello player thats already dead?
snigger love getting the ref, but bad bob, alan rickman is lush, now behave (smacks wrist)
cant wait for more, so write faster....humm please
lol biblios

AcceleratedGlass posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 6:33pm

good chapter, update soon

David Chamberlain posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 5:58pm

Thanks alot...

On the one hand its nice to get recommendations on the other hand recommending stuff like this is enough to cause asshats like Ambiance15 (ambiance15@hotmail.com) to try and get _The Father_ banned too.

Heh...Ambiance15's page: [http://www.fanfiction.net/u/788972/ ]
Notice how she doesn't actually *write* anything? Well how long do you think it'll be before she starts trying to shut down another author? Just in case I nabbed the chapters and rar'd them up and uploaded them to rapidshare.de:
[ http://rapidshare.de/files/10955575/The_Father_01-21_black-phoenix-warrior.rar.html ]

NOTE: You must click free, then wait 30 seconds for the 'prove I'm not a script' image to show-- then type in the three letter\number combo and you can download the file.

--David Chamberlain aka the bornagainpenguin

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Thursday 12th January 2006 5:45pm

Very, very interesting. I rather enjoyed the hesitant way things are developing between Arthur and Melinda; which is as it should be since both are still mourning, somewhat, past relationships that are permanently ended. The revival of the Brotherhood bringing new powers to light is to be expected, that kind of power doesn't normally manifest itself often enough to be commonplace. It's going to be real intersting to see what kind of tracking spell, or device, is attached to those cauldrons; *chuckle* be amusing to use a couplg muggle RFID tags.