Alorkin posted a comment on Wednesday 10th October 2007 5:16am for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

That was, as usual, absolutely brilliant! 'The Butterfly Effect', indeed! How many people would have thunk Harry would voluntarily give up his magic. Nobody in the wizarding world, I'd imagine. Too many of them rely on their magic to do anything and everything. Pathetic!

Poor Dummbledore killed in a car crash. (A car crash? A car crash kill the most powerful wizard in the world? It's an outrage! Its...its a scandal!" Oh by the way, it was a tiny little obit on page nine. So long, and tanks for all the abuse!

Sevvy needs a cellmate. Maybe a 300 pound gorilla named 'Bubba'!

Voldy is food. Peter is foood. Fudge is dementor food. Ahh, life is good!

I shall anxiously await the next installment of 'Power of the Press'. Alorkin

sblackfan posted a comment on Wednesday 10th October 2007 1:46am for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Fantastic story!! I love how Nagini killed old Voldie. Or will he be coming back again?

Logan_MacLeod posted a comment on Wednesday 10th October 2007 12:10am for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

That was way cool!!1 I hope this wasn't a one shot thing as it was very good

anettemargarete posted a comment on Tuesday 9th October 2007 11:03pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

oooh, great beginning. and so differrent from your other stories.
may the force of writing be ever with you!

anette

snowy123 posted a comment on Tuesday 9th October 2007 4:40pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Great chapter. Only thing I didnt like aboutr it is the ship, i got bored of H/HR after reading the sunset series.

Cyn Porter posted a comment on Tuesday 9th October 2007 1:44pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

fantastic chapter, are you going to fill in so of the back story from when Harry left to Hermione's arrival?

Jason9 posted a comment on Tuesday 9th October 2007 1:18pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Different for the two of you, but me gusta mucho...sorry, I was at work all night and the cooks are wearing off on me. Apart from resolving all aparant conflict in the story in the first chapter, I think you've got a great piece going here. Keep it up guys, always love to read anything you have to write.

Cathy Ann Walker posted a comment on Tuesday 9th October 2007 1:06pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

AWESOME CHAPTER

Tazol posted a comment on Tuesday 9th October 2007 8:42am for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

A very nice little tale, as usual; and while I've seen other fics where Harry refuses to participate in the Tournament; you've added your own unique twist to it; bravo. I'm looking forward to future chapters.

Probably my favorite parts to this story were the last, the next to the last, and the first; in that order.

I've always been much more interested in character interaction then reading extensive descriptions about how Harry trained, detailed descriptions of what he bought, or long drawn out combat sequences.

kcgx23 posted a comment on Tuesday 9th October 2007 4:11am for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Fabulous start, I love what happened to Dumbldore and Voldemort, How will he come back next time? Through Nagini? I Can't wait for more.

Fenris Ulf posted a comment on Tuesday 9th October 2007 3:08am for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Dumbledore saved from choking on a candy only to step in front of a bus is probably one of the most memorable moments in fan fiction. Dumbles really doesn't seem to be the type of person to look both ways before crossing the street thinking that traffic should wait for him.

Rob

Sonicdale posted a comment on Tuesday 9th October 2007 12:30am for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

A few points:
Liked the more "modern" reporting here. What passes for fanfic DP writing is even worse than cablenetwork news copy. Kudos for that.
Liked DDs demise. Harsh, but so was he.
Didn't like the assumptions of what was going on, but liked that it happened "off screen." I hope we'll see some explanation of that, but I've read enough fanfics that dragged through the boring details of a 14 year old's summer of study and magical discovery. Blah. It's been done, so I'm curious how you'll give us details. Here's to hoping it won't be too cliched.
Liked the interaction at the end.
Wondered when you'd leave the Carribean and come to the South Pacific. It's far, far away from the UK. :)
Liked the name changes, but not being Harry does make his character seem off a bit.
In all, a good start. Has a lot of potential. Good work and good luck.

Banner posted a comment on Monday 8th October 2007 11:19pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

That was short but *intense!* Great job - I love this entire concept. I've always wondered why no one ever presented Harry with options; realistically, he should have been (at the very least) headhunted by schools from all over the world. A Lot of powerful individuals and groups would have been thrilled to have his name on their rolls...

Frank LeTanc posted a comment on Monday 8th October 2007 10:28pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

well, I have to say that I'm really excited about this story. However, I could say that about anything y'all write.

Question. When Harry's magic and the Goblet of Fire went to war, did that also take care of the Horcrux inside of Harry? assuming of course that you are following that little bit of the Dreadful Hardcover.

Keep em coming!!!

Mrs.TiffanyPotter posted a comment on Monday 8th October 2007 9:23pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

I like the idea for this story. the premis is interesting but It seems like you were in such a hurry to get Harry and Hermione together that you rushed the setup. You have a great base for a story but I think it needs to be fleshed out more

Perhaps you could show us how Sirius and Remus discover Dumbledore's manipulations. And I don't understand how Amelia Bones got involved. Did she read about it in the paper and decided to arrest him? Or did someone take evidence to her?

Most Authors can't write this ship with out makeing Hermione in to a overbearring controlling harpy. I normally avoid this parring because of it. I'm happy to say that you have thus far avoided that pitfall. your stories are some of the few Harry/Hermione stories that I will read.

I'm eagerly awaiting your Harry/Xmen story. I love your early Harry/Ginny work and can't wait to read more.

QOShea posted a comment on Monday 8th October 2007 9:03pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Great story. Not sure how it could be continued, but I am looking forward to reading it!

joeBob posted a comment on Monday 8th October 2007 8:34pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

To be continued?

This is a fun little story and just about stands on its own.
Of course, more chapters would be welcome but what's to tell?

The Marauders smash a bunch of Horcruxes but probably can't track Vapormort.

After a few centuries, Voldy will be forgotten but Vapormort would eventually be detected and destroyed by muggles with tricorders and phasers. :)

Patches posted a comment on Monday 8th October 2007 4:51pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

This is a great story. I realize that the "horcruxes" are still out there even if one of them just destroyed the original portion of Voldemort's soul. That is how Voldy will reemerge I am sure. Thank goodness Harry didn't destroy his real wand. I am also very glad that he still has his magic. What a nice surprise for Hermione to suddenly find herself face to face with Harry! That was exceptional. I really liked Mrs. Granger's comment at the end! I look forward to more of this story. I really like the way you both write! I won't ask who writes what because I'm not sure what either of you would do to the other. I think you work best as a team. Thanks again for a great story in the making. pms

Wolfric posted a comment on Monday 8th October 2007 3:06pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Fine story. I am interested to see where you are going with it. I have enjoyed all of your recent work. Parallels is still one of my favorite stories. Thank you so much for writing all these great stories. W.

Machiavelli Jr posted a comment on Monday 8th October 2007 1:47pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

I'm sorry, I don't think I've ever left a review this harsh before and this is a LONG way from the worst story I've read but what the heck is this supposed to be?
Harry's character has done an unexplained 180 over the summer, with very little explanation. OK. I suppose you could put that down to Remus' lucky discovery that Dumbledore has what surely qualifies as the dumbest plot in history going. He weakened the wards on Moody's house 'in the hope that someone would replace him'. Yeah, right. What sort of plan is that? So he didn't even know if there was anyone available, he just felt like it? And by the way, he's up to vague but cliched schemes involving Gringotts, which of course will br rapidly and comprehensively demolished as soon as they are pointed out to cunning yet honourable financiers by a fourteen-year-old boy, a despised (and broke) creature and a convict.
Oh, by the way, Harry has learned Occlumency from Sirius, who doesn't know it.
On the positive side, Sirius and Remus' anecdote was quite funny and I liked the killing of Voldemort - that was actually pretty good and innovative. Other than that, this reads like a distillation of irritating cliches. Sorry to be so harsh, but unless things really turn around next chapter this is a terrible disappointment.