dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 10:57pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Nicely done.

wana10 posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 10:53pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

would have worked perfectly as a one shot, but me being the greedy, romance loving bastard that i am can't wait to see more! the description on how harry kept his magic seemed a little forced but when surrounded by the rest of the story such a small speedbump is easily overlooked. can't wait for the next chapter.

-wana10

Jujuberry posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 10:39pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Yay, a new story! Great first chapter, I really can't wait to see where you guys go with this. The explanation for the Goblet exploding was wonderful, and really original. Plus, Harry getting new power? Can't wait!


I love the scheming, Dumbledore getting his, Hermione's reaction to Harry, and well basically all of it!

Thanks for an awesome new story!

Memo posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 10:25pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

I like, but as someone said before it looks a lot like a summary.

The one thing that makes me uncomfortable is how you managed Hermione and Harry's reunion. It feels very out of character, especially compared to your other fics where you make it a little more believable.

writerpayne posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 10:15pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Yay!!!

A great start to a great fic. Can't wait for the next chapter though i'm wondering what gonna happen next.

Thanks for another great Story!!

Laura

ps: Bob, I always wondered what you would get if you had a half Llama and Half Emu for Alyx??

Crys posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 9:47pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Ooh, sneaky. In more than one way.

Love the interpretation of the prophecy.

By convincing everyone else that he'd been turned into a squib/muggle, they were convinced that LV was powerless. Which gutted the deez. And got Nagini to attack LV.

I noticed that the Goblet exploding killed Crouch Jr (or maybe he suicided when he realized the consequences). Nothing was ever made of it, but glad you included it.

Oh, and a forced binding on a phoenix? AD proves his stupidity by attempting such.

AD overlaying his wishes onto the Good Samaritan. Good inclusion.

Huh. No HBP, so no horcruxes. Which means Nagini could have killed Voldy. But he WASN'T magically powerless at the time.

But Nagini DID have a horcrux in her. *sigh* You're confusing me. So there is a horcrux, so Voldy will "survive", even if Nagini tried to kill him (we'll ignore exactly how nutritious [or indigestion inducing] the homoculus body is). Now whether a horcrux killing the owner has any ripple effects remains to be seen.

Instead of a "tweak this and see what happens", this is going to become a "grab and twist this event so out of shape you wonder if it's still the same timeline". Gonna be fun to watch.

Gardengirl posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 9:45pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Squee! This was FUN! Thanks for opening a new kilo bar of mental Cadbury for me.

PATRICIA ELSEY posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 9:40pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Interesting start to a new series. Love that Dumbledore got offed by something as prosacic as a bus.

Ravenclawchaser68 posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 9:26pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Well, that was lovely. It'll be interesting to see where it goes from here-whether Harry's other friends will find out what's going on, or the rest of the world eventually. It sounds like Voldemort still isn't really dead-or maybe Nagini will take his place, since she's got a bit of Tom's soul? I'm curious how that's going to work.

Anyway, it's very entertaining so far, and I look forward to reading more. Thanks for writing!
Jay

Tabraiz Rasul posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 9:08pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

good story. you guys are always so mean too dumbledore. killed by a bus at least give him a spectacular death. good job though . update soon.

KenF posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 9:07pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Hmmm. An interesting idea, but killing off Dumbledore in the first chapter does rather limit how much you can bash him, doesn't it?

knightsbridge posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 9:04pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

After reading DH, if I disliked Hermione before, it turned to genuine loathing. Most of the book was "The Hermione Granger Story," and I seriously wished someone would beat her over the head with that bloody beaded bag.
You however, are a HP/HG shipper, and I like your writing more than I detest Hermione (so much for Potter men and their redheads).
I was hoping...evil git that I am...that DD would suffer a bit more, for more things than I can count without taking off my socks.
Darian

Chiyo posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 8:59pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

I sense much win in this story...

*clicks the button flashing "Would you like to know more?"*

YES PLEASE!

(translation: great start... definitely want to read more... and I lol'd at the bus running over dumbledore...nice)

koppe posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 8:53pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

Great start! Way to go, Nagini... :-D
I really liked that "equal strength" theory (even though it didn't actually happen here)... hope you'll use it in other stories too -- wheter Harry (or Voldemort) becomes magically weaker or stronger.
What training will Harry get?
Will Hermione stay with Harry? Will she train too? What about Ron and Ginny?
Keep up the great work.

minervakitty posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 8:48pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

I'm not surprised that Sirius finally figured out that Dumbledore was a controller. I'm glad a lot of things changed in Hogwarts. Does this mean that Fawkes would show up in another story? Never did figure that Albus would buy it by a muggle lorry. Would have been just right for him to choke on his lemon drops. Is Harry learning under the tutors?

TheBlackPearl posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 8:44pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

How delightful! I look forward to seeing where this story is going. :)

turnlach posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 8:39pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

This sounds like a one-shot.

Where are you going to go with this.

Chem Prof posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 8:03pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

A very curious chapter. There's not enough here for it to stand on its own - it's more a summary of events. So it must be a prologue for a longer story to follow, but one wonders what the story is. So many things are notable by their absence. I am confident that this is intentional, rather than sloppy writing, which leads me naturally to speculate where this story is going to go.

The entire fall term at Hogwarts is dismissed in a few words. Nothing on the other tri-wizard champions or the first task, so we must assume that Viktor, Fleur, and the tournament itself will have no role in this story. A brief suggestion that Dumbledore had some complicity in Moody's captivity, but no more. The Order of the Phoenix was not reactivated, so apparently there will be no role for them.

Ron and Ginny are summarily dismissed from the story with the comment, 'He missed Ron and Ginny, of course.' Pettigrew is dead. At least a part of Voldemort is dead. The wizarding world assumes that Harry has lost his magic and forgets about him, but this assumption turns out to be wrong. If so, then Voldemort must still be a threat.

Then there is the focus on Nagini. So, do we conclude that Nagini will be the primary villian in this story? That would certainly be unusual! On the other hand, there are still the other Horcruxes to deal with.

Whatever is going on, at least Hermione appears to have a part in it. That's enough for me right now. My only hope is that we won't have to wait too long for the rest.

I eagerly anticipate the next chapter.

chem prof

shadowtrey posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 8:00pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

*grins* Awesome. Simply awesome. This is the first time I've ever seen that used against the old dark tosser.

Though I do wonder... did he use the wizarding world's inability to think outside of the box against them, or is it something else?

DrT posted a comment on Sunday 7th October 2007 7:49pm for Chapter 1 - The Goblet of Fire

<scratches head> I thought Voldie was snake chow? Oh, well, I'm sure things will become clear in later chapters. I'm enjoying this premise v. much.

"T"