jessie179 posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 11:08pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

Bravo! It was a great second chapter. *Two thumbs up*

Crys posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 11:05pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

> They don't think it's a Russia lawn chair. Perhaps it's Chinese.
*laugh* That whole scene was great.

> "Voldemort was thrown out of his body and sucked into Nagini, making her a double horcrux?"
My brain is starting to hurt. Okay, clearly horcruxes exist. Fine. But you stated Nagini attacked LV. You implied she killed him. So LV would be in free spirit form sometime last fall. He'd have no reason to stay close to Nagini (she's tried to kill him before). He may or may not be anywhere near the other horcurxes when Sirius and later Remus melt them down. So he may still be free and not "stuck" in one of them. Harry and company are making logical assumptions, but they don't know that Nagini attacked LV, so that may throw their assumptions out the window. Though I can't imagine you're actually going to tell us what his state is, as useful as the info would be to us readers.

> why won't he just say what he means?
He already told you. Because he doesn't understand it either. He Loves you, but he doesn't understand the emotion enough to identify it. I'm surprised Remus (or you, for that matter) hasn't twigged to that fact. Okay, your parents did later, but still . . .

Victor and Cedric fighting over Fleur without magic? Huh. Figured Cedric would be more attached to Cho than that. Though you wanted a valid excuse to let Fleur win and that was the easiest one available.

Cindy. At this point, it's hard to see if this matters to the Harry storyline or if it's just an independent side-plot. Please keep her a total muggle and no weird connection back to Lily or something. That kind of plot curve has become painfully cliched.

Quite enjoyable fic. Looking forward to more.

Bobmin356 replied:

Two points.

Voldemort right now is stuck inside Nagini. I thought we made that clear.

Cindy never knew James or Lily, or their parents. But I understand she once saw a Milk Carton that was then bought by someone that knew Petunia's friends at school. Small world eh?

KenF posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 10:47pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

Hmmm... This chapter is long enough that I'd have to take notes if I wanted to leave a useful review. I enjoyed it, though. I wonder if Minnie McG will keep her mouth shut?

Joseph Fritz posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 9:26pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

Excellent

kainboa posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 9:17pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

great chapter as usual, love the idea of the ring foci.

keep up the great work :)

Fishburne posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 8:32pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

How intriguing.

I like this bit of fluff, and think it has loads of potential.

That being said, I still cannot decide if the potential is gravitational, elastic, thermal or electric. I am working on the math, but need a larger word count to complete the calculations.

:)

How's that for a request to update soon?!?

Better than a llama in the shorts?

Fish

Akali posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 7:49pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

I am loving this story. Really. It is brilliant. Update soon, enjoying it heaps.

iluvchocs posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 6:44pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

This is great. I loved the Quibbler articles included in this chapter, and the idea behind the focus rings is fascinating XD

Nights Silhoutte posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 6:40pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

A nice chapter, keep it up. You once mentioned that you were going to do a Harry Potter/X-man crossover, is that still going to happen?

solicitor posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 6:18pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

Alex and Bob, congratulations you have once again started a story that, in my opinion, will be among the top. Now I have to face waiting, with baited breath, (I have to find some good mouthwash), for the next update. Thank you for producing such well thought out and detailed stories.

Sarah B posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 6:13pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

Great story so far and I look forward to more. I particularly like the way that H&H are letting their relationship develop slowly. Is Hedwig around at all?

Kimr posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 6:12pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

An excellent addition to the story, a refreshing change on most stories involving harry/hermoine, as these tend to stick much to canon, e.g. sirius dies and harry is pulled to hermoine in his grief, etc.

I know that you probably wanted to ensure that readers saw the growing relationship between harry and hermoine, but the snippet of mcgonagall finding the tracker was a tad bit too short imho. it would have been nice for a little further expansion in this to better build anticipation as to what mcgonagall and ollivander would do with the information.

Wonder will harry get gryffindor's sword as a symbol of his heritage? How will he return to the wizarding world, only future chapters may tell,keep it up!!!

fx posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 6:04pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

Thanks for the fic and update Bob/Alyx. You can have any animals you want Bob, as long as I get updates. Well, at least the virtual ones. Ignore flamers, send them into a blackhole or something. Stay healthy.

Ben Russell-Gough posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 5:43pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

Well, this is an interesting story building here. It also seems to be something quite different from your usual work.

I note from your closing A.N. that this is a personality driven story, mostly a romance. I'm not usually a fan of pure fluff, so I'm glad that the closing of the Voldemort issue will exist in the background.

Whether this will be enough to keep me reading is another matter. However, I have a soft enough heart that I am willing to give it a try, especially with authors as good as you two.

So... what next? Obviously McGonagall is going to work things out independently before too long. What isn't certain is how she will react. She may be of the opinion that, should Harry wish to make a new life for himself away from Britain, that is his business. On the other hand, she might see the chance to get power through him and... well, as Dumbledore showed, the lure of easy power has corrupted far older and wiser wizards than she. Additionally, if Harry still has his magic, so may Tom and she may end up disrupting our heroes' strategy trying to warn people of this looming threat.

In any case, I will be reading to see more.

BenRG's Rating 7/10

rune1806 posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 5:19pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

what a great update! i like how you are writing real people and not the 1d ones found so much in fanfic (and book 7 what a waste of paper).

Finbar posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 4:55pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

hi Bob,

I'm going to first off say that I love your story. you two just have a brilliant style that sucks me in for hours of enjoyable reading.
Kudos to you!

That said, as a travel agent, who sells a LOT of Fiji, I cringe. Alot, when reading about things they do in Fiji.

I'll post in your Yahoo Group when I get home:)

Rex posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 4:18pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

bob alyx any chance of a little trip to shanghi for are love birds at some point maybe maggical Egypt

Graup posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 4:03pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

I am really enjoying the story here. Good job.

I am not sure if you want suggestions, but little quips about people entering "the next grand adventure" might be interesting, or funny, or maybe even stupid.

I can imagine short outtakes like the lawn chair (which was hilarious), showing Dumbledore and Wormtail interracting with the Potters and others on "the other side". Other DE or Voldie misadventures could add some levity as well.

Honestly, I tire of the emus, llamas, killing Snape, etc. that comes at the beginning of the chapter. They were funny early on, but I struggle with them now. I will probably just ignore them in the future - I hope that doesn't offend you.

Your writing style is extrememly engaging, and enjoyable. You have always stayed positive, even when dealing with some nasty things. I truly love all of the stories you have published. Great job!

Rory Smith posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 3:32pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

great read so far, this chapter was long as hell though. Really hope it continues this way and doesnt fall flat on its ass as most fics seem to do when people get tired of writing and just want it to end. (Kinda like what JK did with her "I need to talk to ginny, but there would be alot of time to talk later" statement cause she never cared for character development.

I find myself looking forward to the updates, that doesnt happen often; great work!

piad2691 posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 3:30pm for Chapter 2 - Year Four Continued

Great, you are back on line again, it is difficult to find a good fanfiction on the web, so I really enjoy yours. There is only one bad thing about a new one from you, I need a new chapter every other day to make it, but I know that is not possible, so I WILL try to wait ......!!!!

I like this Harry, he is quiet, and things come slow to him, that is good. It can be a bit to much, when he has a new power every time he is turning a corner.

Loking forward to a new chapter soooooon, greetings to you and your llama-boss.