The Power of the Press
Chapter 3 - Year Five
By Bobmin
Reviews
nurray posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 3:38pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Hmmm... I must go back and re-read the earlier chapters with Minerva mentioned and check the timestamps.
When Minerva find the tracking device it was spinning slowly. At that time I thought Harry was already in Fiji. Later on we have the device rotating very slowly and Harry hasn't moved any further away.
Ahhh... Harry was at Hermione's house when Minerva first sees the tracking device again. Ok, the headings (and Quibbler dates) are quite important.
As Sirius and Remus are moving around the world I suggest you submit entries to the Quibbler's tale of Harry spotting from them. Not only is it a prank to misdirect people, it will annoy Harry. Sirius would enjoy doing it at least.
Harry in a batsuit? Would the wizarding world know what a batsuit is?
James13 posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 3:34pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Now that was a satifying chapter :)
One does admit, however, at being curious as to what the journals do for 1 hour, every 2 days....
Sarah5 posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 3:20pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
I really enjoy this new story you paint vivid pictures and you gently add layers.
Best wishes
Terry Swain posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 2:58pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Great chapter. :)
Jimbocous posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 2:53pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Not sure what I like best so far, but killing Bumblemore twice in one scene (do I smell compromise here?) has to rank right up there! Another nice story, with lots of the charachter development that you both do so well (and someone with well-known initials seems to forgot how to do in her last two efforts). Thanks for a great read so far, looking forward to more!
Lostchyld posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 2:37pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
I'm not entirely sure if I look forward to the author notes or the chapters more. I know when I haven't time to read the chapter, I'll usually read the disclaimer anyways, especially if I need a laugh.
As (fanfic)authors, you have transcended favorites and become deities.
Cheers.
-Caet
LifeScientist posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 2:22pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Nicely done. Good character development and credible situations (particularly Harry's illness). Couldn't agree more with the disclaimer, maybe you should Make Alyx come out of her shell a bit more...might help old JK before she gets started on some other character-mangling project like HBP and the DH that naturally ahd to follow after it.
Matt
RoseWolf posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 2:20pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Bob & Alyx (Will wrestle for donuts)
OK, mud wrestling, fine. Jello wrestling, that's cool too. But donut wrestling? That's just WRONG on so many levels! :)
Great chapter!
Wolf
Jim_xinu posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 2:01pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Great chapter, thanks for sharing it with us.
Alex Austin posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 2:00pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Give me your address, and I'll see if I can have some Donuts delivered for you. I absolutely love this story so far. Can't tell that you're not an H/Hr Shipper.
Angus Hardie posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 1:17pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
This is a really good new chapter.
It's turning out completely differently than I had expected (which is great!)
I'm enjoying it very much and I particularly like the quality of the original characters. (Cindy and the Grangers to some extent)
I look forward to the next part very much.
FenrisWolf posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 12:58pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Another good chapter, though a little sparse on action. I love all the journal conversations between Harry and Hermione, but they keep mentioning other people (Hermione especially) and talking about their actions, but we never get to see them first hand. I know it would bulk up the story quite a bit if you went over board with it, but one of the things that drove me crazy about DH was exactly the same problem. The readers would get to hear about some pivotal event second-or-third-hand, and while the basic details were present it lacked the emotional impact of a first-hand account.
For example, in Power of the Press Hermione has mentioned several times Lavender's snarkiness about Hermione's boyfriend 'Evan', but we never get to see the actual event. The same with Lee Jordan's injuries or Umbridge's being targeted by pranks.
The developing relationship between Harry and Hermione is wonderful, as is Sirius's with Cindy (and the brief meeting between Remus and Tonks was priceless), but by themselves they seem a little...bland?
Then again, maybe I'm just being greedy; after all, we did get all the interactions between McGonagall and the others this time around. I suppose I shouldn't quibble about what else could have been present. Just try and keep in mind that, at least when Lavender, Umbridge and the rest finally receive their comeuppance, it would be far more satisfying to read them in the first person, not the third. TTFN!
Bobmin356 replied:
I suppose I should point out that a lot of this story will be like that. You will see mention of things happening that are beyond the scope of the three couples we are trying to concentrate on.
Somethings we will see up close and personal and some we will only hear about either in a journal entry, or in a newspaper article.
This is principily a love story set against the backdrop of a horcrux hunt. Some pieces of the hunt you'll see first hand, others you'll read about. The main focus is in the character interaction, not action scenes which are deliberately being kept to a minimum.
You will see Umbridge get hers. And Lavender is only starting to be a problem.
As far as the relationships go, they all start out bland. Remus and Tonks will start slow. Sirius and Cindy are a little faster. Harry and Hermione will be the slowest of them all. I want to build some depth in these relationships, I want to see some emotion. Anyone can write a scene where people fall into bed right away. I'm trying to make them seem real.
-bob
Selector11 posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 12:40pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
As always I love it.
Sigh, if only I could write like that.
Jay
amy1 posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 12:35pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Dearly wondering what Umbridge is going to do without Harry there, would she turn her attention to Hermione? (and why?) Otherwise, good chapter, keep up the work!
Sirius in love?.....what a hoot!
ps...where is Hedwig anyway?
pss....as a manager of an office I cannot accept this type of work/school excuse!
Kirk Staley posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 12:07pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five
HAHahahahahaha. Funny last disclaimer.
Michael63 posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 11:49am for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Your latest chapter was great, no surprise. Your Public Service Announcement, though, got me quite a few strange looks, as it caused me to, from other people's perspective, start laughing out of nowhere for no apparent reason. Not that I'm complaining. Anything that can make me laugh like that is a job well down. Thanks for improving my weekend with your writing, and I look forward to more from you in the future.
Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 11:46am for Chapter 3 - Year Five
*chuckle* Oh, ghod!! Some of that was downright hilarious. I do love the interaction of Nagini and Tom, it seems that Tom made a rather large mistake. I can't wait to see what his reaction will be when he finds the dead basilisk.
The rest of the story was humorous and quite touching. Harry's illness was quite believeable and the effects seem to be reaching several folk. I have to wonder which couple has it worse, Sirius/Cindy or Hermione/Harry, but it should be interesting for both. 'Twill be quite interesting when Andromeda and her daughter show up (I can just see Sirius and Emma teaming up to match 'Dora with Remus - that should be interesting).
I'm not surprised that Scrimgeour sent Delores in even without the reasons Fudge took those actions; he still wants more power and control, just as Fudge did. I do wonder what he'll do if/when Tom manages to manifest himself again.
I hope they contact Minerva before too long as I -really- think the Chamber needs appropriate warding and warning charms.
Greg Johnson posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 11:37am for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Another great chapter. Can't wait for the next. Keep up the good work.
daewos posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 11:36am for Chapter 3 - Year Five
Poor Tom, I feel so sorry for him - not! It will be interesting to see how you bring him back into the story.
Overall, an excellent chapter, the way you are drawing the characters out is really bringing the story to life. I look forward to you dealing with Umbitch.
My only gripe is that the chapter was not long enough!
goddessa39 posted a comment on Saturday 3rd November 2007 3:56pm for Chapter 3 - Year Five