dennisud posted a comment on Monday 10th December 2007 8:50am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

I am very exitied to see how this one turns out.

I like the pacing and graually build up here using such a nice twist and though its definitely a Dumble-bash, its still good. Not Order of the Pheonix, and even Fawkes seems to ne MIA!

Also I like how Ron and Ginny are also maturing and I'm so juiced to read how Harry will walk down the main hall of hogwarts blowing the Wizarding worlds minds!

Please update soooooon!

dennisud

IamNotawriter posted a comment on Sunday 9th December 2007 11:55am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

Re. A.H. I appreciate the happy coincidence.

I was taking it as a subtle salute to another great series.

la13 posted a comment on Saturday 8th December 2007 10:59pm for Chapter 5 - Year Six

Seriously, I LOVE the Quibbler articles. You really capture the absolute insanity of them! Umm, that's meant as a compliment...

I like all the Hermione drama back at Hogwarts. Very intrigued to see what's going to happen with that. Enjoyed the chapter.

dexterz posted a comment on Friday 7th December 2007 2:49am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

loved this update...in one word its endearing..have to see whats gonna happen to lav-lav..please update soon ......waiting anxiously for more of your works....

sanghamitra posted a comment on Thursday 6th December 2007 1:06am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

as usual wonderful reading material. wonder what miss Brown is up to now and how it'll blow into her face. just please dont include any imperios into it. are you going to tackle harry = horcrux issue in this story ? it sure made Ms Rowlings climax powerful.
Its strange that so long after the last book and nobody has tackled the 'Master of Death' angle in their story. I was hoping one of the authors in this site would take up that a pivot point in their plot and since you're the first to start a story so soon after the book came out I was hoping for it but the rings already been destroyed. well i hope some other story will take it up.

Potter Thinker posted a comment on Thursday 6th December 2007 12:28am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

This is an exceptionally well written piece of ff that should have some interesting spin-offs as well if another author is brave enough to write it. (NOT ME, chicken HERE)

rodrigo2 posted a comment on Wednesday 5th December 2007 5:57am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

Great work, simply superb. I'm very intrigued in how you managed to make me fall in love with this story so fast. Anyway keep up the great work.

Ezra'eil posted a comment on Wednesday 5th December 2007 4:42am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

I've already reviewed this, but decided to read it again. I was wondering. I read Dumbledore's Army, and the sequel Harry Potter and the Spiritus Crystalus, and the question came, Why are these not on FanFic Authors?

Just wondering.

gohanel posted a comment on Wednesday 5th December 2007 12:58am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

So far, one of the greatest stories I read. The focus of the story is also surprisingly good. While I usually like a bit more actionpacked HHr stories, this one really drags you into the characters themselves, instead of just the storyline. Keep up the great work and I wish the 10 days till next chapter were already over.

Also, a slight comment on KenF's review: while this buildup to harry teaching transfiguration to hermione's seventh year is indeed interesting, I believe you mentioned harry not becoming a teacher. Either way would be a great story :)

KenF posted a comment on Tuesday 4th December 2007 7:15am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

Oh, yes, the other thing. Lavender really seems determined to win the Queen Bitch award, doesn't she?

KenF posted a comment on Tuesday 4th December 2007 7:14am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

I'm sure I've forgotten several things that I wanted to note.

Good joke on the queen of the Milwaukee Labor day festivities.

I've seen the bugzapper get Rita onece before, but they killed her off. I find your take on translating beetle injuries to her human form to be most nastily satisfying. Yes, I do not like Rita.

My inner eye (the same one I used to pick stocks) predicts that Harry will return to Hogwarts as the transfiguration professior and gryffindor head of house in time for Hermione's seventh year.

More seriously, the development of H/Hr's relationship is quite satisfying... no ridiculous pileup of problems, but not too perfect either.

00_Knight posted a comment on Tuesday 4th December 2007 1:25am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

Again you guys are awesome! This story shows your brillance as well as the greatness of future stories to come!

Keep writing and I'll keep reading!

tatsu.zzmage posted a comment on Monday 3rd December 2007 2:38pm for Chapter 5 - Year Six

Once again a great chapter. Your disclaimer was a tad troubling, disturbing, and quite funny ^_~
nice work flushing out the characters that that twit should have in the original series. i mean sure its all about harry buts still Ron was so 1-dimensional and most people thought that Dumbeldors brother liked Goat shows or something.

stealacandy posted a comment on Monday 3rd December 2007 12:30pm for Chapter 5 - Year Six

Hi!
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I like your tory, although it could be more quick paced. But this chapter was the limit - I don't know what the word count is, but it was fairly long, andd hardly anything hapened in it!

Anyway, the fisrt place to cut would be all those journal entries, they rrally are annoying, and don't really contributeto th e story. So, less journals, more story, and more power to the press - that's the story's theme, after all, isn't it? So more power to the press, more Power of the Press, keep up the good work and more power to you.


mo

Bobmin356 replied:

If you want fast paced, do yourself a favor and go elsewhere. The Journal entries are integral to this story and won't be done away with just because you don't like them.

We write for ourselves and since you're not paying for this, YOU DON'T get a say in what we write.

Have a slow day. :)

Fenris Ulf posted a comment on Monday 3rd December 2007 2:21am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

Another chapter down and as usual my review will leave alot to be desired. There is a reason I read fanfiction and not write it and that is I have problems communicating through writting or speech or any other form of communication... blame it on too many video games where most conversations are preset ie:
: Name
I am Iolo
: Job
I am a Bard
: Join
Aye Avatar I am honored to join thee

As you can see I am not much for communication.

Now onto the Review!!!

Lavender seem to be a thorn in Hermione's side and I have a feeling she will be back causing more problems before to long. It was good to see Ron stick up for Hermione hopefully it is a sign of him maturing a bit. The whole anti muggle thing has always seemed like it would work against the wizarding world. I think if it came to war the muggles have both the numbers, the communication, the organized forces and the technology to really give the wizards a beating. Not sure how many spells there are to do alot of damage seems like it's mostly direct damage spells (ie the cutting curse) vs Area of Effect spells (I guess a Nuclear bomb is the ultimate area of effect skill... Wonder what the saving roll would have to be...)

OK now I forgot where I was going with this I think it's time to stop typing before my review gets to long or rambles anymore.


Rob

Patches posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 6:36pm for Chapter 5 - Year Six

This is very good. I like the part about Remus and Tonks. That is excellent. She is just what Remus needs. I'm glad Sirius asked Cindy to marry him. That was great. Sirius needs someone fun and smart like Cindy to keep him on his toes. She even pranks him well! I'm glad Emma was able to point Remus in another direction to look for the Horcrux he is seeking. Harry and Hermione are moving right along in their relationship. I'm glad Harry is opening up to her. I can understand how someone like Harry with his family history would have problems with moving on in a relationship after living with the garbage the Durseley's handed him when he was small. That is really interesting the way you developed the do's and don't of bookspace. That is really a neat concept. I like Harry's feelings about his relationship with Hermione and his tutors and also his relationship with Sirius and Remus. That is great. Keep up the good work and I am sending 2 dozen jelly donuts. I even included some filled with blackcap jam. If you lived in Northern California you would know that those are wild black raspberries that grow out in the hills on thorn studded vines. They are difficult to find. They are only ripe in late June and early July. You have to share the berry patch with black bears and it is very difficult to find enough for a batch of jam. (A batch makes 8 1/2 pints of jam). Enjoy! pms

Manatheron posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 2:32pm for Chapter 5 - Year Six

First off, thanks for the Update.

call me a Sadist if you like, but I've been advocating that particular avenue on the Caractus to any author that was foolish enough to ask my advice on their fic (and several that weren't ^.^)

Your take on the linked journals is interesting, but I'm wondering how exactly enchantments would be able to tell an exact physical age. It was one of the things that bothered me in cannon too. I would have thought that somthing liek that would be based more on the mental or emotional maturity of a person.

{Shrugs}

anyway, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, Keep up the excellent work!

uthamm posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 12:58pm for Chapter 5 - Year Six

Nice chapter - Rita in the bug zapper - PRICELESS!

BTW - nice work on the Ron redemption - sideing with Hermione against McLaggen was a nice touch.

Lon Huey posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 8:58am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

So, I'm one of those lurkers you dislike so much that rarely review. I always read your posts and enjoy them greatly. I have to sneak time away to read them and by the time I finish, others have made any sentient points I could offer.

Anyway, good chapter, loved it, always do. Thank you for sharing your hobby with those of us who enjoy reading where your fertile imaginations take us.

Sometime you really must take us on a full ride in that odd little disclaimer world of yours.

Crys posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 8:39am for Chapter 5 - Year Six

> but with the arrest and subsequent execution of Dolores Umbridge
*cheer*

> Walden McNair is stepping to the forefront of the opposition. "This bill is a danger to us and our way of life. Do you think Harry Potter sacrificed his magic for house elves? Of course he didn't. And we should uphold his great sacrifice by sticking with our glorious traditions."
*scoff* And Walden McNair is the local authority on Harry's ideals, is he? *eyeroll* I sure hope Harry eviscerates (metaporically if not literally) him by the end of this.

> Milfred McFertile, aged 102, and mother to 67 children, 407 grandchildren and 1209 great-grandchildren
*choke* Er, talk about appropriate names. Geez, hasn't this family heard of ZPG?

> "He’s got a magnificent spike," said Olga Broomhildegarde, team captain. "We all wanted to see what he could do with it."
*ponder* No, I don't think I do want to know whether it was Bob or Alyx who wrote that sentence.

> She was rushed to a hospital where she would spend the next three weeks recovering enough for her to Apparate to St. Mungos.
And nobody asked the Grangers anything about how this woman became electrocuted in their yard? Even if Hermione couldn't recognize her, wouldn't someone at least have ASKED?

> Perhaps she could do something to take away the smug grin Hermione wore now days?
Harry, Sirius, and the Ministry have to deal with the Cult of Voldemort. Hermione has Parvati and Lavender. I'm not sure which will be more difficult to deal with. As the later scene w/ McLaggen proves.

> Ministry spokesman Perky Weatherbee . . .
. . . ran off at the mouth and laid the groundwork to make the Ministry look like a bunch of raving lunatics when Harry comes back. *cackle*

Like the bookspace idea you're developing. Also an externally enforceable way to keep the libidos under some level of control.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Bobmin356 replied:

Asked?

You forgot, the Grangers were away in Fiji at the time and she collapsed in the street, not in their yard.

This is another case of the ministry dismissing muggles as unimportant. Skeeter doesn't remember what happened or why, and the ministry didn't put the location together with the fact that the Grangers live on that street.