dennisud posted a comment on Sunday 9th December 2007 1:13pm

I kinda hoped the DA-Six from the 5th book would still be involved and they are by what Luna's Dad is doing with those off the wall stories, but I'd like to see neville, Ginny and Luna more. Ron can find a shark to talk to (;-))

dennisud

IamNotawriter posted a comment on Sunday 9th December 2007 11:55am

Re. A.H. I appreciate the happy coincidence.

I was taking it as a subtle salute to another great series.

la13 posted a comment on Saturday 8th December 2007 10:59pm

Seriously, I LOVE the Quibbler articles. You really capture the absolute insanity of them! Umm, that's meant as a compliment...

I like all the Hermione drama back at Hogwarts. Very intrigued to see what's going to happen with that. Enjoyed the chapter.

Decumo9 posted a comment on Saturday 8th December 2007 10:57pm

You know, I actually printed out the fanfiction excuse note and filled it out. I gave it to my dad, and he laughed like crazy. He then asked to read your guys' stories, and now he loves them as much as I do.

jackstraw posted a comment on Friday 7th December 2007 10:23am

A basic principle of contract law is that you cannot have a contract if both sides do not agree to the terms. Harry never could have had a binding contract (even in canon) because he never agreed to the terms of participating in the Tournament. That always bothered me in GOF. How can he possibly be forced to participate when he never put his name in? However, after he began to participate then he could have had been held to an implied contract that was enforceable to a degree, but he was never obligated to participate. And even after this, most contracts entered by a minor are unenforceable or Harry could say that because he never understood his obligations, since he never formally entered into a contract, and thereby could still break the contract.

Of course, in PofP after Harry refused, the Goblet could have tried to enforce the contract (as it had spit out his name) and then the prophesy could take primacy which cause a clash of magics. But I don't think Harry could have ever lost his magic, even for that moment because of an unenforceable contract. His refusal to participate and the throwing down of his wand could have affected other charms that Dumbledore had placed on him that were dependent upon his acknowledgement of Dumbledore's position as guide or substitute father-figure. Something like that.

I know there is the catch-all excuse that magic contracts are different than regular contracts, but that part doesn't work for me. Otherwise, smashing story so far!

Bobmin356 replied:

Let me see if I get this.... you're attempting to apply principles of LAW to fantasy fiction?

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

Might I suggest trying some CSI or LA Law fan fiction if you want that sort of stuff.

dexterz posted a comment on Friday 7th December 2007 2:49am

loved this update...in one word its endearing..have to see whats gonna happen to lav-lav..please update soon ......waiting anxiously for more of your works....

sanghamitra posted a comment on Thursday 6th December 2007 1:06am

as usual wonderful reading material. wonder what miss Brown is up to now and how it'll blow into her face. just please dont include any imperios into it. are you going to tackle harry = horcrux issue in this story ? it sure made Ms Rowlings climax powerful.
Its strange that so long after the last book and nobody has tackled the 'Master of Death' angle in their story. I was hoping one of the authors in this site would take up that a pivot point in their plot and since you're the first to start a story so soon after the book came out I was hoping for it but the rings already been destroyed. well i hope some other story will take it up.

Potter Thinker posted a comment on Thursday 6th December 2007 12:28am

This is an exceptionally well written piece of ff that should have some interesting spin-offs as well if another author is brave enough to write it. (NOT ME, chicken HERE)

rodrigo2 posted a comment on Wednesday 5th December 2007 5:57am

Great work, simply superb. I'm very intrigued in how you managed to make me fall in love with this story so fast. Anyway keep up the great work.

Ezra'eil posted a comment on Wednesday 5th December 2007 4:42am

I've already reviewed this, but decided to read it again. I was wondering. I read Dumbledore's Army, and the sequel Harry Potter and the Spiritus Crystalus, and the question came, Why are these not on FanFic Authors?

Just wondering.

gohanel posted a comment on Wednesday 5th December 2007 12:58am

So far, one of the greatest stories I read. The focus of the story is also surprisingly good. While I usually like a bit more actionpacked HHr stories, this one really drags you into the characters themselves, instead of just the storyline. Keep up the great work and I wish the 10 days till next chapter were already over.

Also, a slight comment on KenF's review: while this buildup to harry teaching transfiguration to hermione's seventh year is indeed interesting, I believe you mentioned harry not becoming a teacher. Either way would be a great story :)

KenF posted a comment on Tuesday 4th December 2007 7:15am

Oh, yes, the other thing. Lavender really seems determined to win the Queen Bitch award, doesn't she?

KenF posted a comment on Tuesday 4th December 2007 7:14am

I'm sure I've forgotten several things that I wanted to note.

Good joke on the queen of the Milwaukee Labor day festivities.

I've seen the bugzapper get Rita onece before, but they killed her off. I find your take on translating beetle injuries to her human form to be most nastily satisfying. Yes, I do not like Rita.

My inner eye (the same one I used to pick stocks) predicts that Harry will return to Hogwarts as the transfiguration professior and gryffindor head of house in time for Hermione's seventh year.

More seriously, the development of H/Hr's relationship is quite satisfying... no ridiculous pileup of problems, but not too perfect either.

Arkeus posted a comment on Tuesday 4th December 2007 1:39am

oh, at the beginning of the chapter you have cindy and emma talking about "harry" before she knew his real name.

Otherwise very good.

00_Knight posted a comment on Tuesday 4th December 2007 1:25am

Again you guys are awesome! This story shows your brillance as well as the greatness of future stories to come!

Keep writing and I'll keep reading!

Arkeus posted a comment on Tuesday 4th December 2007 12:54am

Hey, good!
A lot of things i mildly disagree with in technicalities, but it's well enough done so i will shut up.

Good ideas about fuuji and so on.

tatsu.zzmage posted a comment on Monday 3rd December 2007 2:38pm

Once again a great chapter. Your disclaimer was a tad troubling, disturbing, and quite funny ^_~
nice work flushing out the characters that that twit should have in the original series. i mean sure its all about harry buts still Ron was so 1-dimensional and most people thought that Dumbeldors brother liked Goat shows or something.

stealacandy posted a comment on Monday 3rd December 2007 12:30pm

Hi!
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I like your tory, although it could be more quick paced. But this chapter was the limit - I don't know what the word count is, but it was fairly long, andd hardly anything hapened in it!

Anyway, the fisrt place to cut would be all those journal entries, they rrally are annoying, and don't really contributeto th e story. So, less journals, more story, and more power to the press - that's the story's theme, after all, isn't it? So more power to the press, more Power of the Press, keep up the good work and more power to you.


mo

Bobmin356 replied:

If you want fast paced, do yourself a favor and go elsewhere. The Journal entries are integral to this story and won't be done away with just because you don't like them.

We write for ourselves and since you're not paying for this, YOU DON'T get a say in what we write.

Have a slow day. :)

Fenris Ulf posted a comment on Monday 3rd December 2007 2:21am

Another chapter down and as usual my review will leave alot to be desired. There is a reason I read fanfiction and not write it and that is I have problems communicating through writting or speech or any other form of communication... blame it on too many video games where most conversations are preset ie:
: Name
I am Iolo
: Job
I am a Bard
: Join
Aye Avatar I am honored to join thee

As you can see I am not much for communication.

Now onto the Review!!!

Lavender seem to be a thorn in Hermione's side and I have a feeling she will be back causing more problems before to long. It was good to see Ron stick up for Hermione hopefully it is a sign of him maturing a bit. The whole anti muggle thing has always seemed like it would work against the wizarding world. I think if it came to war the muggles have both the numbers, the communication, the organized forces and the technology to really give the wizards a beating. Not sure how many spells there are to do alot of damage seems like it's mostly direct damage spells (ie the cutting curse) vs Area of Effect spells (I guess a Nuclear bomb is the ultimate area of effect skill... Wonder what the saving roll would have to be...)

OK now I forgot where I was going with this I think it's time to stop typing before my review gets to long or rambles anymore.


Rob

Patches posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 6:36pm

This is very good. I like the part about Remus and Tonks. That is excellent. She is just what Remus needs. I'm glad Sirius asked Cindy to marry him. That was great. Sirius needs someone fun and smart like Cindy to keep him on his toes. She even pranks him well! I'm glad Emma was able to point Remus in another direction to look for the Horcrux he is seeking. Harry and Hermione are moving right along in their relationship. I'm glad Harry is opening up to her. I can understand how someone like Harry with his family history would have problems with moving on in a relationship after living with the garbage the Durseley's handed him when he was small. That is really interesting the way you developed the do's and don't of bookspace. That is really a neat concept. I like Harry's feelings about his relationship with Hermione and his tutors and also his relationship with Sirius and Remus. That is great. Keep up the good work and I am sending 2 dozen jelly donuts. I even included some filled with blackcap jam. If you lived in Northern California you would know that those are wild black raspberries that grow out in the hills on thorn studded vines. They are difficult to find. They are only ripe in late June and early July. You have to share the berry patch with black bears and it is very difficult to find enough for a batch of jam. (A batch makes 8 1/2 pints of jam). Enjoy! pms