Manatheron posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 2:32pm

First off, thanks for the Update.

call me a Sadist if you like, but I've been advocating that particular avenue on the Caractus to any author that was foolish enough to ask my advice on their fic (and several that weren't ^.^)

Your take on the linked journals is interesting, but I'm wondering how exactly enchantments would be able to tell an exact physical age. It was one of the things that bothered me in cannon too. I would have thought that somthing liek that would be based more on the mental or emotional maturity of a person.

{Shrugs}

anyway, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, Keep up the excellent work!

uthamm posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 12:58pm

Nice chapter - Rita in the bug zapper - PRICELESS!

BTW - nice work on the Ron redemption - sideing with Hermione against McLaggen was a nice touch.

Lon Huey posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 8:58am

So, I'm one of those lurkers you dislike so much that rarely review. I always read your posts and enjoy them greatly. I have to sneak time away to read them and by the time I finish, others have made any sentient points I could offer.

Anyway, good chapter, loved it, always do. Thank you for sharing your hobby with those of us who enjoy reading where your fertile imaginations take us.

Sometime you really must take us on a full ride in that odd little disclaimer world of yours.

Crys posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 8:39am

> but with the arrest and subsequent execution of Dolores Umbridge
*cheer*

> Walden McNair is stepping to the forefront of the opposition. "This bill is a danger to us and our way of life. Do you think Harry Potter sacrificed his magic for house elves? Of course he didn't. And we should uphold his great sacrifice by sticking with our glorious traditions."
*scoff* And Walden McNair is the local authority on Harry's ideals, is he? *eyeroll* I sure hope Harry eviscerates (metaporically if not literally) him by the end of this.

> Milfred McFertile, aged 102, and mother to 67 children, 407 grandchildren and 1209 great-grandchildren
*choke* Er, talk about appropriate names. Geez, hasn't this family heard of ZPG?

> "He’s got a magnificent spike," said Olga Broomhildegarde, team captain. "We all wanted to see what he could do with it."
*ponder* No, I don't think I do want to know whether it was Bob or Alyx who wrote that sentence.

> She was rushed to a hospital where she would spend the next three weeks recovering enough for her to Apparate to St. Mungos.
And nobody asked the Grangers anything about how this woman became electrocuted in their yard? Even if Hermione couldn't recognize her, wouldn't someone at least have ASKED?

> Perhaps she could do something to take away the smug grin Hermione wore now days?
Harry, Sirius, and the Ministry have to deal with the Cult of Voldemort. Hermione has Parvati and Lavender. I'm not sure which will be more difficult to deal with. As the later scene w/ McLaggen proves.

> Ministry spokesman Perky Weatherbee . . .
. . . ran off at the mouth and laid the groundwork to make the Ministry look like a bunch of raving lunatics when Harry comes back. *cackle*

Like the bookspace idea you're developing. Also an externally enforceable way to keep the libidos under some level of control.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Bobmin356 replied:

Asked?

You forgot, the Grangers were away in Fiji at the time and she collapsed in the street, not in their yard.

This is another case of the ministry dismissing muggles as unimportant. Skeeter doesn't remember what happened or why, and the ministry didn't put the location together with the fact that the Grangers live on that street.

Mel Evans posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 6:44am

Once again, I'm rapt with the chapter. There is so many story lines and so much going on, that there is never a dull moment. I'm looking forward to the continuation of Tonks and Lupin's relationship, and the wedding of Sirius and Cindy.. what an opportunity for pranks that will be.. And of course, can't wait for Hermione and Harry's relationship to continue growing. IN other words.. I can't wait for the next chapter.. but I'm sure you've heard that a thousand times already..

Ken Warner posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 6:03am

Loved the chapter - I particularly enjoyed the bookspace, and the rules changing as the characters age - that is an interesting set of charms that someone in your universe has created.

that PAC Rim Newts being different from the British ones is an interesting one, and the practical requiring the transfiguration of a working muggle device is cool - Can Harry eventually transfigure motorcycles? and be able to do a range depending on the needs of the moment? from a trials bike to get through the Scottish mountains to a KZ1400 so he and Hermione can get away from attackers at 200 MPH??

Seriously - this is one of the most engrossing of all the current stories that I follow - thanks for the early birthday present. (8 december)

warm regards

Mionefan posted a comment on Sunday 2nd December 2007 4:02am

Nice long chapter. Waiting to see the snogging get serious. Lavender and Ginny still look like promising problems.

Sheepstamper posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 8:51pm

Once again you have surpassed yourselves, excellent story telling. Things appears to be moving rather nicely in the Harry / Hermione relationship, neatly interspaced with a hint of magic every now and then.......Sheeps

rune1806 posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 8:02pm

how did the deatheaters find them in fiji? i thought it was a hideout as harry does not look like evan all the time? what are lav and frances foils for hermione? great update love the story.

Bobmin356 replied:

They weren't looking for Harry. And since Sirius isn't hiding, he was easily found.

Lavender and Frances are meant to be obstacles for Hermione. Frances will not reappear, she's had her shot. Lavender is another issue, but it won't last much longer. She's needed to help Hermione overcome some of her own self doubts.

webdoc posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 4:11pm

Bravo...... eagerly looking forward to reading the rest.

Keep up the good work.

patrickokc posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 3:16pm

Yet another great chapter in a long line of great stories and chapters! I really do like the way you are building up the relationship of Harry and Hermione slow and steady the way 2 people with such obvious low self esteem would do so. I am also impressed at the way the "journals" have limits to what they can do and hope you explore that more and maybe the magic behind it.
I really cannot wait until Hermione can let the world know that the 'as cute as Harry was' Evan is really Harry!!! I never really like Lavender much, but then again I had a Lavender named Mandy I went to school with and we never did get along well...I cannot wait to see the rest of this story and am also looking forward to your X-men x-over...I hope those naysayers have not discouraged you and Alyx not to post it.
Thank you again for writing this story!
Patrick

joeBob posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 1:16pm

Great chapter, thanks!

Nice blend of teenie-bopper stuff and real plot advancement.

The Nagini scene was off-putting. Discounting ambush, no snake is a match for a healthy farm dog.
Dogs, cats, and even squirrels routinely kill snakes; even deadly ones like Rattlesnakes and Copperheads; with no problem.
Heck, there's even a famous video of a rabbit terrorizing a big rattler!

Against a pack of dogs there is only one possible outcome -- dead Nagini.

Of course, a real snake would be absolutely immobile outdoors in winter. Snakes cannot function in the cold and usually die with much exposure to snow and ice.

Your story is good, that's why it irks to see such avoidable errors on such a small plot device.

Donald McLeod posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 1:05pm

Generic Reader #6 poked his head above the dirt. "I'M NOT DEAD YET!"
Alyx I'm glad to be generic reader 5 and 3 quarter whith good runners. I always git so rapt up in your stories and intro's that I fail at indepth review. Even if you brought back that 'kiss my foot' Lucius you story is great. Now i'll jest git my runners on. Thank you.

Jizzle posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 1:00pm

The first line of that first article really makes it sound like the Quibbler is trying to undermine the American ministry. While believable, I wonder if you meant that the British ministry is the one doing the undermining?

Cindy patting Sirius on the head and assuring him that Emma knows about "the mouse" was classic.

I liked the chapter and look forward to the next one. Happy writing.

Wolfric posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 12:46pm

Well Rita Skeeter in a bug zapper desrves to be on my list of favorite fiction scenes. I continue to enjoy your fine story. I like action scenes and I suspect that more are in the offing. Those will no doubt be welcome in the fullness of time. Thanks for writing. W.

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 11:44am

They say he screams like a Banshee every time he sees someone wearing something pink

Now that's an absolutely priceless line.

Gardengirl posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 11:43am

Great update. I really appreciate how this isn't about boogeymen around every corner, Lavender notwithstanding. It's great to read a well-written fic that's about character development, not crash and burn stuff. Thanks!!

Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 10:03am

Excellent. Loved it. Every time I picked it up to read, I got another email with changes to a project I am working on for a friend, so it took me a while longer than usual to read and review.

At one point, when Harry is about to parasail, you say his feet let the ground rather than left. That is the only change I can remember.

Thank you for writing.

Mike (MoA)

Muad'Dib posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 9:46am

Very nice chapter once again. While Fahrenheit is used by some to indicate temperatures, Celsius is still the more common variant in Britain. I'd really like to see a bit more Japanese, but I understand that it obviously has very little to do with the plot itself. I'm a big 'Japan fan' myself and study the language as a hobby.

rathvander posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 8:30am

The story is shaping up to be really interesting. And the character themselves have grown up and matured really well.

I like how Harry's life with the Dursleys is actually have more of an impact on his personal life. It seemed like in the books it didn't really hold any clout despite JK making it such a point.

The interaction between Muggle and Magical influences are also a nice blend. The fact that muggles do live in Britain along with all the magical folk seems to get glossed over a lot in the original books.

Actually a lot of stuff is glossed over or just not well explained.

Thanks for taking that next step and bringing parts of our world into a world that we wish we could be a part of as well :D (gotta keep the kid alive).

On a side note I do hope that karma bites Lavender in the ass, nothing too major, just a little dose of her own medicine ^_^.

Anyway thanks for the great read, looking forward to the next chapter.