By Bobmin
Reviews
Fenris Ulf posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 12:13pm
Experimenting is something you do well. Didn't you say while writing sunset that you chose to write a good Draco becuase you wanted to see if you could? Your proven track record with experimentation is easy to see.
I do like how your having Harry and Hermione explore thier relationship and thier insecurities about each other it seems very real and not full of canned conversations.
Does Alyx dream of chasing Bob with Whips and marshmellows or is it the other way around? My wife was looking at me like I lost my mind while I was readding this as I laughed out loud several times tonight.
As always thanks for the update and please,
rite mur sone itz veri gud.
Rob
hercules1991 posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 11:40am
I absolutely love this story. Every time I find the e-mail alert telling me that you have written a chapter I absolutely go wild. The characters are so believable and the the dialogue they use and the situations they find themselves in seems so incredibly thought out. I cannot wait for the next installment. the world of Harry Potter really should belong to you. Had you written the original seven books I would've paid any amount of money for the entire collection was your autographs. Please do not stop writing any time soon. your development of the relationship between Harry and Hermione is so incredibly realistic, that I believe even die hard Harry and Ginny fans would have a hard time denying their chemistry. I really should have written more reviews I promise from now on I will. I wish you luck in the future of the story.
hercules1991
Sakya posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 10:54am
Great Cahpter, rite more!
Hahahahaha, sorry, I couldn't resist. Sorry. (wipes tear away)
It actually took me a few seconds to understand what it meant the first time I read that.
Anyway...
Great chapter, please write more soon. (and I know it's not the important part of the fic, but I can't wait for Lavander to see Evan and Hermione together... yes. I'm petty and childish)
joeBob posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 10:23am
Meh.
Way, WAY too much sap, not enough plot.
If you are going to waste ink on the teenie-bopper dross, at least bust out a telescope in your "bookspace"!
kb0 posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 9:14am
Oh, I knew I forgot something. Your take on the Weasleys in this story is interesting. Neither good nor bad, at least not too much. Ginny's view on Harry not being worth her time as he's not a wizard any more (to reinforce the wiarding bias you're presenting in the story) doesn't work so well with me (I'm not upset or anything, it just seems overy strange, or maybe OoC). OTOH, I find Molly's distrust of Harry/Evan to be hilarious. As for Ron, who cares? :-)
Kevin
kb0 posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 9:09am
Nice continuation. I especially liked bringing Minerva into the "conspiracy". The joke with holding her over the pool in cat form was inpired. :-) It was also nice to see you give Sirius someone he could relate to, so seeing Cindy get into a prank war was very appropote.
"Bookspace" was an interesting interesting concept. That brings up the question about if people could shag in there and still be virgins in the real world. I'll leave that that question up to you... However, I suspect you already have an answer. :-)
Oh, and have virtual toothpick: ==---- ;-)
Kevin
Imbrium posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 4:48am
One of my favorite things about your writings is the amount of humor you manage to interject. I never laugh out loud while reading as much as I do while reading your fics. On a side note, I was recently diagnosed as a diabetic and fully sympathize with donut obsession. They sell fresh baked donuts where I work and they call to me on a daily basis. The pain and torment is very real, though nothing compared to my need for chocolate anything. Oh, how I miss those wonderfully sweet things...
rune1806 posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 4:37am
i liked the cat over the pool, very funny. cindy winning the prank war was funny as well. more brest touching please and thanks again for the note it got me out of work friday.
Darak1 posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 4:29am
pfft you're obviously lying, everybody knows Lemmings aren't stringy when stewed.
delta16669 posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 3:16am
Do you promise to make Nagini into shoes? Or at least a nice purse for Hermione?
Lang posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 2:22am
Great Cahpter, rite more!!!111oneoneone
ily.the.cat posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 2:09am
Wow. This was in intense chapter. Wow
Sami
sanghamitra posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 12:19am
Excellent chapter as ever. This mindspace thing ... I think I've read something similar long time back in a story called "The Secret Nurse", I'm not sure though. McGonagal give Hermione a Talisman to nail on her Bed frame which takes her to some place similar to your mind space though it quickly turns into something more like a Harem.
Banner posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 12:18am
I read the new chapter last night, then went back and reread the entire story this morning. Then I skimmed for my favorite parts. This story is so much fun! I've been trapped in the house with two sick kids all week, and I really really needed the lift.
[Perky Weatherbee] * chortle *
I've always liked a strong, intelligent Harry. JKR made him SUCH a whiney, careless brat.
Thanks so much.
nurray posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 11:26pm
Great Cahpter, rite more!
No dammit, someone else has done that one. Hmmm... authorship is harder than it looks. Besides I dont want to end as Generic Reader #7 (I'm at least a 9 3/4!).
I am enjoying this perspective view you are writing in. For this story it is working well. Good story concept and it is well executed. I find myself looking forward to the email announcing that another chapter is available.
I dont think I can offer much more praise than that. Thankyou for the creative effort.
I'm not sure how it would be worked into the story but wouldn't there be a headmasters portrait of Dumbledore by now? Even though Dumbledore was sacked, the portait should still appear. Most of the headmasters would retire, not die in the job so continuous service shouldnot be a requirement. With the magic in the portraits to assist the current headmaster, McGonagall should be able to ask Dumbledore's portrait some soul searching questions.
James7 posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 9:04pm
Great Cahpter, rite more!
Ok, can you send Alyx over now? I need a good whipping:)
Ok, I'm only joking, I spell badly, but not that bad (I hope)...
Again, a wonderful chapter to a great story! I don't review much, because the stories I read are usually so good that there's no criticism I can give that I don't have problems with myself... Here I just wanted to say 'Thank You' for writing such wonderful stories and making them available to all your adoring fans..
I look forward to seeing some more of those conversations between Harry and Hermione...
Personally, I like your style of writing for this fic, I much more enjoy first person story telling then 3rd person, even if that first person switches sometimes (between Harry and Hermione or whom ever else you use). You switch between them some times I think, but you do it so well that it's not confusing at all, and blends in with the story very well...
Ok, I'm ready for that whipping now, I just hope I don't end up in the ground like that Generic Reader #6 <evil grin>
Thanks
--James
PerfesserN posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 8:15pm
Nice and easy does it. No, you don't have to jump into the sack on the first page of a fiction - but it's a great eye opener, right there on page one!
Forget the snake, everyone needs to keep an eye on Molly Weasley, she's got a pureblood agenda that would make Salazar Slytherin proud.
I think Nagini will turn out to be good at the end of the story - large snakes taste like lobster, if prepared properly.
(Be honest, you expected me to say "just like chicken," didn't you?)
Write on!
N!
Cathy Ann Walker posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 7:25pm
>>"Proper spelling! Properly punctuation! Proper commentary! And stop offering to pet my llama!
Please write more chapters.
Why do men have two heads and women have four lips?
photobug33 posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 5:15pm
"Proper spelling! Properly punctuation! Proper commentary!"
properly punctuation?
just teasing, especially with all the extremely poor grammar I've been reading lately. At least you guys know how to spell and use the correct words in the right places.
Actually I'm enjoying this works quite a bit. Your style experiment is working just fine, keep up the good work.
bookaholic_au posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 12:56pm