CRose posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 1:28pm

Not a bad story. I do think you're laying on the relationship way to much though. It feels like your forcing them together. Ah well, it's way to common in stories these days.

I was thinking that something might happen with the Horcruxes. That maybe the knowledge that one or more of them exists and a death eater might go to any lengths to get one and bring back his master. Any lengths. It would be a race to get the last horcrux. It might even come to the point where his followers start treating Voldemort like a god to worship, inadvertently giving him a slight boost in power.

Papa MidNite posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 1:07pm

hey i love it so far, it seems like bob played harry in the letters and alyx played hermione, well it seemed that way keep up the good work.


PapaMidNite

wwwendy posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 12:52pm

cute...couldn't help but laugh at the 'Aboard STS 66... ' scene with the chair...though part of me expected them to see something resembling Santa's sleigh (after the previous scene with Remus & Sirius)

Also, I was wondering if what went up into orbit also came down...say, perhaps, during the next disclaimer? It would be kind of funny to see Alex & Bob (or others) dodging lawn chairs.

riegert8 posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 11:46am

I like the talk that Harry had with Hermione about his life, even better that he talk about how got out of tri-wizard tournament. It would be hard to talk about something that he would rather forget, what is worse is to be seen at the worse moments. It is something else that Harry and other try to guess why Dumbledore did what he did, I find it Hard to believe that Dumbledore would have money problems. I would believe more that he did for control, some people never have enough money. It sad that Ron and Hermione is not getting along, it could be said that Harry was a buffer between Ron and Hermione. What is worse that Ron is attacking Ginny's boyfriend and proving what kind off an asshole he is. It is great that McGonagall is really close in knowing that Harry still has magic. Harry has a good idea to keep his magic a secret and have people believe that Voldemort has no magic, there is a down side is that since people believe Voldemort has no magic.Some would make a mistake if they ever run into him believing that they could kill Voldemort

Ravenclawchaser68 posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 9:21am

People are silly. I usually am a fan of Dumbledore, but I can appreciate a good story even when he's a total nutjob. This is a very entertaining story so far. I agree that it's nice to see more of Sirius. He's a fun character who opens up a lot of possibilities. Thanks for writing!
Jay

Mark Weippert posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 9:20am

I gotta say, I'm really enjoying this story, please, keep up the great work!

Fenris Ulf posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 8:52am

Another great chapter from the Llama, Emu, and donut loving team of Bob and Alyx. I look forward to the next exciting edition of this story. Until next time may crumple horned snorkacks (sp?) let you go for a ride and may your wards be protected from decay.


Rob

la13 posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 7:54am

Yay...another chapter to this story!

I liked the Sirius/Remus interaction, you really have the banter down and at least in your stories they're happy!

Can't wait to see what happens next.

Sikandar Durrani posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 6:20am

Can we say Wow!!! Great story you two. I was laughing while reading both chapters and I am willing to bet that Fleur's (phlems (sp?)) heritage had something to do with her winning the tournament. I am betting next chapter Harry is found out. Keep up the great work till next time Alex

Tarkas posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 4:16am

I find it hard to make any decent comments on this story and chapter -- with perhaps one exception. It's an excellent chapter of yet another excellent story from Bob and Alyx, and that really sums it up. Good plot, good characterisation, insane disclaimers... classic Bobmin fare, and we love it.

The one hopefully constructive comment that I would make is that, however many betas you have working on this, you really need a proof-reader and a Brit-picker, the former to deal with the grammar glitches like those pointed out by other reviewers -- unless they're caused by some weird form of software corruption -- and the latter to deal with a few, but nonetheless jarring Americanisms that slip through. All your work generally needs to be darn near perfect is a little polishing as regards the language rather than the story.

Oddly enough, I have experience in both proof-reading/editing and Brit-picking... <g>

Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter with considerable anticipation, though I should warn Alyx that Emuicide can be extremely hazardous in hot weather. When it gets warm, Emu brains go into Manic Staring and Panting Mode, and a wise person gives them a very wide berth. ;-)

aboulhosnc posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 1:59am

Okay first off considering who sirius is do you think that he would even consider marriage after two months thats nowhere near enough time. Also I know this isn't your first story but have you considered how a teenager would feel about their parents. Having them talking about it so openly like that while blushing over the littlest things is really a paradox and it gets kind of uncomfortable to read

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 1:38am

Well, this was well done, and really got a kick out of it. Harry and Hermione work well together, and I like the way you handled them in this fic, and look forward to more of this in the future.

Jason Karr posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 12:54am

this is a interesting story. I like how you are writing Dan and Emma,it is nice that harry is finaly geting the education that he needs and passing what he knows to Hermione. Looking forward to what you are going to be doing with the new headmaster.

PhoenixAnkaa posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 12:25am

I have to say, I absolutely love this story so far and am thrilled that you are continuing foreword with it. So few writers are willing to tackle the personal side of the Potter-verse, and those that do rarely do it well. This is by far the best I have read in a long time and I thank you for that.

Your development of Harry and Hermione's relationship has been masterfully crafted to this point. To many writers have them jump head first in to a physical relationship without expanding on the emotional aspect and trials of best friends falling in love. And of course adding a love interest for Sirius just rounds out the story for me. I have always felt JKR did not do his character the justice it deserved.

You have been my favorite authors to read for quite a long time, and I can't help but get a bit excited whenever I see you have a new post. I look foreword to the continuation of this story and whatever adventure you take us on next.

PA

Jenni posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 12:25am

Another fun ride from the dynamic duo! Thanks, guys! Can't wait to see more.

Teresa Lynne posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 11:40pm

Another excellent chapter! Hmmmmm....between emus, crabs, and Darth Vader it looks like you guys are keeping busy! I've enjoyed seeing how Harry and Hermione's relationship is going, and the glimpses of Neville and Ginny's, and Sirus and Cindy's are good too! I can't wait until McGonagall contacts Harry, she'll be happy to see him and know that Sirius and Remus have taken good care of him. Thanks again for the story!

jessie179 posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 11:08pm

Bravo! It was a great second chapter. *Two thumbs up*

Crys posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 11:05pm

> They don't think it's a Russia lawn chair. Perhaps it's Chinese.
*laugh* That whole scene was great.

> "Voldemort was thrown out of his body and sucked into Nagini, making her a double horcrux?"
My brain is starting to hurt. Okay, clearly horcruxes exist. Fine. But you stated Nagini attacked LV. You implied she killed him. So LV would be in free spirit form sometime last fall. He'd have no reason to stay close to Nagini (she's tried to kill him before). He may or may not be anywhere near the other horcurxes when Sirius and later Remus melt them down. So he may still be free and not "stuck" in one of them. Harry and company are making logical assumptions, but they don't know that Nagini attacked LV, so that may throw their assumptions out the window. Though I can't imagine you're actually going to tell us what his state is, as useful as the info would be to us readers.

> why won't he just say what he means?
He already told you. Because he doesn't understand it either. He Loves you, but he doesn't understand the emotion enough to identify it. I'm surprised Remus (or you, for that matter) hasn't twigged to that fact. Okay, your parents did later, but still . . .

Victor and Cedric fighting over Fleur without magic? Huh. Figured Cedric would be more attached to Cho than that. Though you wanted a valid excuse to let Fleur win and that was the easiest one available.

Cindy. At this point, it's hard to see if this matters to the Harry storyline or if it's just an independent side-plot. Please keep her a total muggle and no weird connection back to Lily or something. That kind of plot curve has become painfully cliched.

Quite enjoyable fic. Looking forward to more.

Bobmin356 replied:

Two points.

Voldemort right now is stuck inside Nagini. I thought we made that clear.

Cindy never knew James or Lily, or their parents. But I understand she once saw a Milk Carton that was then bought by someone that knew Petunia's friends at school. Small world eh?

KenF posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 10:47pm

Hmmm... This chapter is long enough that I'd have to take notes if I wanted to leave a useful review. I enjoyed it, though. I wonder if Minnie McG will keep her mouth shut?

gadriam posted a comment on Monday 15th October 2007 9:38pm

This is one hell of a storyline. Yes, this chapter could stand on it's own, but more is always welcome. Just keep the scale down, please? There is no need to make the chapters progressively grander.

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