Crys posted a comment on Wednesday 21st June 2006 10:59am for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Alyx, please keep Bob properly medicated. That intro was more than a little disturbing.

Tied off one thread, though definitely not in a way I expected. I was under the impression that Dudley was undergoing a lot of training. More than simply learning how to use a handgun and a rifle. Oh, well. He served his purpose (no matter which side you were on).

I can see how the results of the raid were the fault of three people. It'll be interesting to see if Hermione learns anything from it. Or if Eocho demands her head on a pike (literally) for what she did.

Yes, Harry screwed up by cutting off the bond. But this is not the first time he's run off to sulk in private.

I agree with Remus (underinformed as he is). She should have spent about one minute thinking about what Harry was likely to do with this info before assuming he was going to go and try a rescue.

Miles, I feel, did the best he could with limited information. Hermione essentially tells him that Harry's gone to this location to rescue his cousin. Who knows Harry better than she? He had to accept her interpretation of Harry's likely actions. Miles's decisions flow from that point. Caleb did what a good 2IC is supposed to do and tried to play Devil's Advocate. Didn't work, but that wasn't his fault.

Kinda curious what the one letter was. Being the one from Lucius makes little sense. Why would it have started from Azkaban right after the raid?

Looking forward to the next chapter.

BJH posted a comment on Wednesday 21st June 2006 9:11am for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Nice chapter, some serious Hermione bashing but very nice.

It does seem odd that you have Hermione acting so impetuously. It seems rather out of character for the girl who fought with Harry to think things through in the conclusion of OotP. But then again it is your fic so I won't complain too much.

BJH

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Wednesday 21st June 2006 6:58am for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Fabulous chapter. I like the way you have Hermione making mistakes. She is a very smart woman... book smart. You have done a wonderful job in illustrating some weaknesses that can come into play when one refuses to allow themselves a moment of circumspection... or at least a second opinion... she should have gone to the brotherhood NOT to the government forces for a solution. She also should have trusted her husband a bit more. Yes, Harry should have shared his feelings through the bond... but that is an ongoing struggle for him, to share and expose his weaknesses. Hermione, on the otherhand paniced and I don't envy her when Harry is well enough to give her a dressing down and for her to accept responsibility for the dead and injured.

Blue Werewolf Boy posted a comment on Wednesday 21st June 2006 5:21am for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

awsome chapter

Patches posted a comment on Wednesday 21st June 2006 4:54am for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

This is an excellent chapter. I really like the interaction with Harry and his friends like the impromptue party around the pool. The battle at Askaban was spectacular! Quite a finish when Harry blows up 1/3 of the island! I thought it was good that Harry could help everyone understand the downside of war and how their efforts saved their own friends lives. It is amazing how Hermione could mess up so badly. Harry has to remember that communication is paramount to solving life's problems. Of course Harry ends up in the hospital again! That was quite a twist getting Duddley killed by wizards! Justifiable under the circumstances. It is too bad Harry didn't think about Dudley's reaction to Harry summoning him. Vernon and Petunia by their actions caused their own son's death! That's irony! Thanks for writing. I look forward to the next chapter! pms

Carey posted a comment on Wednesday 21st June 2006 4:28am for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

""Narcissa has been tutoring me on the subject. She seemed to feel it was part of my duties as Lady Potter-Black, and that I would use the information to guide my husband in a subject he loathes," she said with smile as she reached out and took Harry's hand. He looked at her for a moment, his expression dignified, then he stuck his tongue out at her."

This line nearly cause me to spit water all over my laptop...so, great chapter as usual!

Jimbocous posted a comment on Wednesday 21st June 2006 12:32am for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Great updates, really enjoyed them. One minor point; it's Whinging, not Whining. Though, having read you too, that could have been intentional

KLGreen posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 11:07pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Excellent chapter. Hermione needs to learn that the same lesson that she expeted Harry to learn.

hedwig_edwiges posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 10:53pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Hermione is going away and beyond here. It seems that more than ever booksmart has nothing to do with common sense. I loved the way Harry is growing and learning to deal with his feelings, good and bad. I think Miles could be good as counselor and Caleb is prime to take the head job. Luna as soldier... I don't know if any armed force can survive that. Or Ginny! Hermione was never one of my favorities characters and she never is on my list for Harry's mate but you did construct a quite belivalbe relationship here, until she started to act like she was 15 again and thinking she knew best. Maybe if she just take care of the library the war will go better for everyone.

candace1 posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 10:09pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

I just wanted to tell you I love your take on Harry Potter. I was disappointed with the sixth book too.I just want to know, who's going to kill off Malfoy senior when the time comes? He really is an A §#. But really, I love how you two write. Forever your faithful reader, Candace

AcceleratedGlass posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 7:59pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

good chapter update soon

Matt T posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 6:28pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Oops... sorry Harry.

scott2 posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 6:04pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Great chapter but hermione seems to have taken harry's place in jumping in head first, is there something up with that girl or has harry just matured (mental emotional etc) due to the whole days long matureing and hermione is still at where she was playing catch up (shrug) just curious, luv the story and hope for more soon :)

freakyfinger posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 5:29pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Yesterday, I went to a Printers Convention. You get to see all the different things that people want Printing on: customized keychains, flyers, pens, cups, etc. Well, one guy was selling custom labels for bottles of water. The minimum order was one crate, which had 72 containers, which had 18 bottles. It was only 24 cents a bottle, but when you add it up, that's a lot of water!

Chris1 posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 4:55pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Nice chapter, but I spotted several mistakes. Well, only three or so, mostly missing words.

One of them is:

Harry's danced wickedly and he wore a feral smile

It should be Harry's eyes or sth, I think. Tho it would be really weird if that sentence was: Harry's something danced wickedly and he wore a feral smile

:D

And when Danni portkeys Harry away, you said it Dan, but ended with "her" :D

Nice chapter :)

fashizzlism posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 3:54pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

welll... personally i think that alot of what happened was Harrys fault... i mean he left angry and completely blocked their link....

im very dissapointed that you left it there, i wish there was more... i hate it when Harry or hermione are left in a 'condition' or a apart bit if you understand what im talking about

Keep up the good work and update asap

Luke

Alex00 posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 3:40pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Wonderfull chapter.

Christopher Estep posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 3:32pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

Dudley is now a corpse, after shooting Harry in the back. However, none of the four wizards who AK'd the idiot can really be blamed for it. Hermione really needs to get a grip on things.

Travis Schubert posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 2:15pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

um, i'm probably going to sound mildly retarded, but is it just because the Brotherhood is Celtic, or do you have a problem with Christians? the general vibe i get is that the story is implying that Christians are, well sort of mentally deficient. i know its a story, and i do enjoy it as much as i enjoyed Sunset, but i was just curious. this is just something that has been nagging me over the past few chapters. again, sorry if i am being stupid, but i would really like to hear from you guys about this.

Bobmin356 replied:

Alyx here. Most non-muggle born witches and wizards have a problem with Christianity in our story. After all, Christians were responsible for the burning of witches. Eocho also has a problem with it, but then, he's a Druid, isn't he?   Harry has never experienced any sort of religion.   All he knows is what he's been taught at Hogwarts (back to the burning thing!) and he doesn't have much of an opinion either way.   Hermione and her parents ARE Christians, however, and have strong moral views shaped by it. Religion is mentioned a few times in the story, but it won't be a major plot point.

Brian Figus posted a comment on Tuesday 20th June 2006 1:55pm for Chapter 13 - Aftermath and a Reckoning

I don't know what to think really. Part of me feels bad for Hermione, but this sort of behavior isn't new for her at all. She's always been a know-it-all. Normally that isn't a bad thing, as her knowledge acts a as balance to Harry's overall power, but in a war setting her implusiveness and arrogence can get people killed. And now 12 men have died because of her actions. I can see Harry not blaming Hermione for his injuries, but he'll be hard pressed to comfort her with 12 dead men on her hands.

Yeah, yeah...he shouldn't of gone off and it was Miles who ordered the strike over Caleb's objections...BUT...Hermione had no business reading Harry's letter in the first place. She initiated the bond and he should be allowed to deal with things on his own. He wasn't even gone that long...barely a few seconds when Mione did what she did. As for Miles, I can't remember if he knows about the procephy or not BUT he does know that without Harry Haven will fall apart due to lack of morale..at least! Yes, he should have sent the elves...but had Hermione been right then that could have cost too much time. He made a bad call, but for the right reasons. Also, keep in mind that even though Hermione isn't in the chain of command she is in the Brotherhood and is Harry's wife...therefore he was probably taking her alot more seriously than he should have.

What should be done with Hermione? Well, with this being her 2nd strike in a a very short amount of time she should be banned from all command decisions and combat operations. Kick her out of combat training because she has no place in the field. She's a researcher, not a soldier and this incident proves that. She, above all, needs to realize that her actions have consequences. I'd suggest that Harry order her to apprentice herself to Danni. With her knowledge and the right training she'd be a fantastic healer and medical researcher. That way she could still "contribute" but wouldn't be able to fuck things up so badly anymore.

It's sad anyway you look at it, but she needs to be punished severely. Punish her to little and she'll let her arrogance get the better of her again, but to much and she'll break. And considering that Harry is Magilos he's going to have to punish her. Even with their bond I wonder if their marriage will survive. Somehow, I think it will but if I were Harry it would be long time before I trusted her with anything important again.

Bobmin356 replied:

Alyx here. Many people thought we were too harsh when we wrote Remus' rant at Hermione.   I think you're the only one who's gone the other way...and a bit extreme at that.

Remember, the whole thing started   with Harry shutting down the bond and storming out. Had he not shut down the bond, Hermione would have felt what was going on and been able to ask for clarification.   He started what would turn out to be a complete disaster.

Hermione had every right to read the letter.   She's his wife, she was concerned about his reaction and wanted to know what caused it.   Being unable to locate him via the bond, or even feel him, she panicked. She thought he had gone to Dudley and she rushed off to find help.   She didn't think, she just moved forward based on a flawed assumption. She moved the disaster along by rushing to Miles.

Miles, being who he is, should have known better than to send out his troops blind. Caleb tried to point this out to him, but he didn't listen. He hammered home the last coffin nail in the disaster.

Now you can weigh out blame here if you want, but the simple fact is, all THREE of them are responsible for what happened and they'll have to come to grips with that. None of them can point the finger of blame at the other for one simple reason.   None of them have clean hands in this.