Jim_xinu posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 6:24am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

"Charlie was shocked to see large swatches of London had burned to the ground. There were a lot more people in the city than in the urban areas where people were hiding and hoping things would blow over."

Err, urban areas would be cities. Are you sure you don't mean rural?

""My word, if it isn’t Charlie Weasley! What a fortuitous and welcome find," murmured a grandfatherly voice."

Ouch! Poor guy's luck just ran out. I don't remember if Charlie was around in Sunset, but I can certainly understand his desire to find his Mum, especially if he wasn't around for her recent rampages. I wonder if she wouldn't be knocked out by the Line, though.

It'll be interesting to see if he buys into DD's lies, is coerced, or used as a hostage.

Considering all the live-and-death they've gone through--and still have in front of them--I think they're worrying a bit too much about a little nudity.

Thank you for *not* dragging out Hermione's proposal acceptance. For a moment I feared large amounts of angst. :-)

The Johansens are cute.

This shows that Haven's still rather disorganized. They already knew they were going after a bunch of kids, somebody should have been preparing some place for them.

Thanks for sharing this with us--it's a great story.

Kristina posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 6:08am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

i really like this chapter, i thought hermione's reaction to harry proposing was cute! but when is molly coming back into the picture? we haven't seen her much! although she was being a little evil, we need to know what is going on with her! and is ron dead? cause i really hope so! i didn't like his attitude! but keep it up! it's really good!
~kristina~

Jake posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 5:35am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Great chapter, Like I said, I really like Mama Johansen and I'm really happy that you're giving her a big part in the story. I wonder, is that grandfatherly voice owned by Dumbledore? I can't wait to see what you do with him. Keep up the great work and update soon!


-Jake

MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 4:45am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Another great chapter, I think Dumbasadoor is gong to use Charlie to get to Harry. I can't wait to see what you have planed next. Wonderful Job! Bob and Alyx.

MPF

Christopher Estep posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 4:33am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

However, it looks like *somebody* has an interest in Arthur, whether you realize it or not. Meanwhile, Harry proposes to Hermione! Also, Riddle searches for the Cauldron of Chaos (which he needs for a potion-based ritual). Charlie sneaks back into Britain and, if I'm not mistaken, eventually runs into Dumbledore. I see Hermione is *still* recovering from bonding to Winky.

Viridian posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 2:41am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Another great chapter! The tensions are slowly starting to build again!

I noticed Neville has not made an appearance lately. Is he still having problems from Ron's last attack?

Arthur Weasley is hilariously goofy, what with his being smitten and all. Nicely done.

"As to the readers creeped out by our comments about the French President." - That was't a real world reference??? I'm shocked, I tell you, shocked. really.

Kyle Bissett posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 2:11am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

So Albus is reforming the Order. I wonder how many members are still active. A sizeable number were probably killed by Shacklebolt's treason, several members defected to the Brotherhood, and the rest are most likely in hiding.

You haven't stated anything about Molly's survival or lack thereof. That will probably come in a later chapter.

I can tell this will not be an HP story where the epilogue states he becomes Minister. If he can barely stand making a public statement without a question session, he'd never last in politics.

shlager_5321 posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 2:00am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

great chapter once again
i wonder though if dumbledore will realise that this tim around he simply cant win this war?
anz as much as i would like to have Harry kill him i think that it would be more fitting if he would be thrown in prison
cheers!!
update soon!!

Regress posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 1:11am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

As to the last comment in your note for this chapter (Not every single person will be hooked up with someone. Sorry.) , THANK YOU! It's a pretty common error, from what I've read anyway, to hook everyone and their grandmother up with someone and have them all go from neutral to madly in love in 6.2 seconds.

Hehe, You haven't heard from me yet, but I've been reading your stuff since about half-way through Sunset, and I like what I've read!

I do wonder why you haven't had harry throwing around his magical might even more (I know it sounds odd concidering you've had him throw up a anti-evil shield around all of Britain, but bear with me). I mean how hard would it be for him to jump in every now and then, smite a bit of evil, and jump back out into Herm's waiting arms? Yes, he can't do EVERYTHING, but right now you've got him throwing his political and financial weight around, and not doing very much with his magical weight. I don't know, maybe I'm too used to all the "Harry the lone avenger, stalker of evil in the night" stories that are around, but it's a bit odd to see him as a near magical god, and just not using it all because a prophecy told him that he couldn't go to bat yet. With him being so aggressive in this, it strikes me as a bit odd that he'd bow to prophecy so quickly, when he's magically capable of holding off an entire death eater army along with voldie for an extended period of time (ie. protecting hogwarts) What stopped him from conjuring a big honkin' rock to squish them all when he had them right in front of him? If he can create a shield around all of Britain then a really big rock couldn't be too hard for him could it? Maybe it's just me, but he's being a bit of a push-over in this.

And what about Dumbledore? I mean... he's a master manipulator, and yet he still hasn't managed to conjure himself up a clue? I know you've got him as a pretty uptight and set in his ways bastard-behind-the-scenes, but is he really STILL thinking that Harry should just bow to his whims and that everything will turn out smelling like roses, Harry will be his willing pawn, and he'll be the big almighty god-like hero again? Your really don't like the old bag do you? Personally I'd give him a BIT more credit, but not too much. Unless you just went with the whole, he's really an evil manipulating bastard at heart, and has no real good intentions beyond his own ownership of the wizarding world. In which case you've done a very good job.

Now that the rant is out of the way, I really do like your writing! Both of you! It's your story and my mild criticisms won't stop me from enjoying your writing, or your torturing of Snape, who I have to agree is most certainly NOT Alan Rickman, who may or may not be a nice guy, and not a greasy bastard at all.

Hehe, sorry about all that, I didn't mean for this to be a negative review, it just kinda came out like this. That and I was bored, and saying "J00 r0xx04z!!!1!!eleventy-one!" just wasn't going to satisfy the boredom.

icaro posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 12:45am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

The old man again!!!
You said that we'd know more about Molly in this chapter, but nothing, no finding, no dead body, only poor Charlie running like mad, getting hurt (I've a soft spot for him) and being found by Bumblebee...

Read you soon!!!

Crys posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 12:37am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Clever idea with the portkey that "Claude" gave Charlie. Not only for him to give, but for you to include such a person.

Arthur stumbling all over himself trying to talk with Melinda (and trying to hide from his sons while doing so) is . . . endearing. Though the fact that she finds him intriguing yet does not seem likely to pursue him makes me wonder if that pairing is going to progress.

*snicker* Hermione bolts from the room after Harry asks her. That's just funny.

I like how you're having Charlie searching for Molly. He's being optimistic, perhaps, but we don't KNOW that Molly is dead. We only know she turned her back on the Weasley morals.

Charlie's been found by AD? Uh, oh . . .

As always, looking forward to the next chapter.

AK posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 12:33am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Disclaimer: 1) a renunciation of any claim to or connection with; 2) Disavowal; 3) a statement made to same one's own ass. (Dogma)
Hehe! You know just your comments alone are almost worth reading the story :). The Metatron indeed, well at least you have good taste in movies, do you like platypi? Stupid animals...
Anyway to the review! So good ol Dumbledore is still around, well he might be a nuisance in your story but he is smart and powerfull right? And he is not dark ( I think you said that somewhere that he was just misguided or something) So yeah I guess he might end up usefull... for the plot at least :)

Mickey posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 12:10am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Nice chapter, Liked Harry's proposal and Hermionie's (eventual) acceptance.

One problem, by this point in the story people rescued from England may be so malnourished as to have problems if they eat as much as mama Johansen would be willing to feed them. Deaths are unlikely as of yet but eating until they throw up should happen with people such as the orphans.

The Unicorn

P.S
If you want to stop the reminders of the parts of Britain how about explaining where Harry's ward line goes? You had Harry say Voldermort was stopped at the shores of Britain yet Britain controls part of northern Ireland. Has that portion come into Irish control (Oh! won't THAT be fun?) under control of british forces not in contact with those under Voldermort's thumb? Under Voldermort's indirect control (i.e he controls it using orders from controled agents but has no Death Eaters there) disolved into complete chaos (the most likely possibilty IMO) or is it inside the wards confining Voldermort?

Meg posted a comment on Monday 12th December 2005 12:04am for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Awesome chapter and Awesome Birthday present for me!!!!!!!!

Coulda been longer, though... ;) But since you didn't know it was my b-day today, I'll forgive you both.

Meg

Elfguard48 posted a comment on Sunday 11th December 2005 11:47pm for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Great chapter and story. As for nit pickers and those who are affended you didnot include their country(blowing a rassberry). Get a life or write your own. I'm an American but has strorng English and Irish blood lines. Please keep up the good work. The nit pickers can write their own if they are so bothered by yours. Take care....Helen

Paul Ellison posted a comment on Sunday 11th December 2005 11:45pm for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Brilliant new chapter, no nitpicks here, for an outsider you're doing a lot better than most (inc natives)! I swear some don't know what an atlas is!

Keep it coming and good luck with the insanity case for Alyx ;-)

Dedr24 posted a comment on Sunday 11th December 2005 11:33pm for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

I have been reading your work since Dumbledore's Army, and I have been a fan ever since. That stated, every time I read a new chapter I become a bigger one. Great work. Is that Dumbledore that found Charlie?

harry85 posted a comment on Sunday 11th December 2005 11:22pm for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Who's the one who found Charlie? Well, we'll see it soon. As for the rest, I liked the chapter a lot, you know.

TheBlackPearl posted a comment on Sunday 11th December 2005 10:47pm for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Oh, what an intriguing update.

It would appear that Dumbledore found himself a bit of leverage in Charlie. I'm not altogether sure Harry will leave Charlie to rot with DD in the face of Ginny and the twins' pleas to help their brother. Though, it might be prudent to do so, given the current state.

I know Snape is bad...downright evil in this Potterverse...however, I remain fascinated with his characters. One of Rowling's greatest creations.

And, of course, being the female romantic sap that I am...I adored the proposal. Hermione's reaction. Poor Harry, but it made her answer all the sweeter.

I am really interested to see this rite to call up the Brotherhood. I have no doubt, that it will bring forth many surprises and be an absolute joy to read.

I do hope they manage to retrieve Charlie, explain about Molly and Ron, all without any major damage to any main players I am fond of.

I look forward to the next update. Wonderful job.

Pam

rmcclain124 posted a comment on Sunday 11th December 2005 10:23pm for Chapter 3 - Weasleys Woes

Another outstanding chapter.

First off, Charlie Weasley must have dung for brains. I know that you have plans for him and that he will probably be a catalyst in some sort of subplot, but as someone just looking in from the outside, he's got dung for brains. That said, I can't wait to see how that all plays out.

Second, the proposal scene was quite amusing. It was one of those, "I know I'm forgetting something" moments. Perhaps her parents will get her a remembrall (?sp) as a wedding or wedding shower gift to commemorate it. Oops!

Third, to all those that are criticizing you for the inclusion/exclusion of lands under the title of the british isles and the blating of new characters...bugger them! JKR has introduced new characters with every new volume. She does catch some grief over it, but it's hard to argue with an author that sold over 6M copies of her book in the US alone over a weekend. She must be doing something right.

Best regards and post again soon -- PK Fan