Shawn Pickett posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 11:58pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

Great Cahpter, rite more!










Sorry, had to be done. It was a great chapter however. I do find McGonagall's attitude somewhat odd. You'd think after the mess with Dumbledore last year she'd have paid closer attention to what was going on around her. At least when she realized the situation she took steps to correct it and showed some genuine remorse. The bit with Lavender and Parvatti was interesting, I'd like to see them get pranked a bit more for their actions though, what they did was fairly cruel. I found your take on the Weasley's in this chapter interesting, I wonder what they, and the rest of the wizarding world will say when the truth outs?

Dragen posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 11:38pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

What a great chapter, I REALLY love your Standard Disclaimer: and Author's Notes: they are just as good as your stroies.

Keep up the great work, and update soon.

solicitor posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 11:32pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

Please forward an address where you may be served a summons and complaint for intentional infliction of emotional distress.
This morning I check your site, hoping for an update. I was quite pleased to discover your latest. I had forgotten to do my usual morning constitutional. When I reached the section with "the talk" my bladder awoke and requested attention. I was torn between laughing my ass off and taking a piss.
Therefore, because of your actions (ie writting this masterpiece), I came closer to wetting my pants than I have in over 40 years.
With all of the above taken into consideration, I am contemplating filing suit against the two of you for intentional infliction of emotional distress. I will be happy to settle out of court, provided that you agree to post a warning at the start of each chapter warning your readers of the dangers of reading before leaking. Also, you must finish this fine work.
Thank you for your fine work, please continue.

Hagrid posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 10:39pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

In an attempt to reduce the stringyness of Lemmings I have found that the liberal use of a muggle blender and sugar turns them into Lemming-aid rather nicely. A southern bar b que sauce added after a slow roasting helps if you are in need of solid food.

As you can see, I have no whiny complaints concerning grammar and since I know what BBQ is I am clearly not a Brit so I can't attack you on that front. I am also rather pleased that my application for the numbered beta program was rejected.

Chloe Broefan posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 10:36pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

As always, it was wonderful to read a new update on your fab fic. What can I say: Lav is a cow, I can't wait for the inevitable confrontation scene, I know you'll nail it; loving Harry and Hermione, the poor little bundles of insecurities that they are; Cindy and Sirius and lovely, but poor Remus needs some action; Emma is a love, and she's sure keeping Dan in line, not that we hear much from him; my take on the Weasleys is not as kind as yours, but I loved Emma's insight into Ginny's character - too right!; I missed the orgy scenes, any chance you'll use them in future chapters?

Well, I think that's all I have to say. I can't wait until the next update!

Nights Silhoutte posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 10:32pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

Great Cahpter, rite more!

A great chapter, keep it up.

rathvander posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 10:09pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

Your pacing is awesome guys. I love character driven story lines and this is one of my top favorites.

The fact that Harry and Hermione are actually learning/training together is refreshing as well. And I still want one of those rings XD.

Thanks for the new chapter.

Tim Henderson posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 9:48pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

How did you get Will Ferrell to appear as Generic Reader #6?

Ricky posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 9:26pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

Hey Bob And Alyx, Once Again A great story and another great chapter; I'm really looking forward to reading more

redjacobson posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 9:19pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

I'm enjoying the story; and I'm glad that Umbitch is going to get the spanking she deserves *GRIN* I like the way you mangled Percy's name; and the Quibbler articles are a hoot!

Loved the bit with Remus getting caught in the prank war

Thanks for posting, and I'm looking forward to the rest of the story

red

DrT posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 8:58pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

Ah lik youse riten. Rit more offen, plese. De lllama be cutes. Humsters tast butter then lemings.

(Have pity on us poor educators, who can't skip over such immortal prose, like we writers can)

Perky Weatherbee?? Wonderful! Good use of McGonagall to drive the story forward. Please don't be too nice to the Weasel family if you can help it.

"T"

Brady Dixon posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 8:03pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

Have you seen spam-a-lot recently?

Ben Russell-Gough posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 7:32pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

There were lots of interesting moments in this story but, for me, the most important was your exploration of the characters of Hermione and Harry in terms of their self-doubts. I've always considered Hermione a text-book introvert and Harry obviously has a lot of baggage in that area too. It is one of the reasons that I thought a relationship with Ron (who is a walking inferiority complex) and the extrovert Ginny was such a bad idea. The Weasleys would end up dominating Hermione and Harry in a way that both sides would find psychologically damaging.

Thas aside, I really do like Cindy and her relationship with Sirius. Like McGonnagal says, ol' Mrs. Black will be spinning in her grave. I'm sure that Sirius only cares about being with Cindy but if he were honest he would admit that this thought is a bonus.

Ron and Ginny are going to be a problem, I can feel it. The Weasleys, as portrayed here, have a lot of pureblood prejudice against Muggles and Squibs. That is going to put them increasingly at odds with the Golden Couple, especially in the critical period between Harry breaking cover and his revealing that the loss of his powers had been a ruse to give him time to get the Horacruxes.

This thought aside, this story showcases the predator!Ginny that I have noted that chem_prof over on fanfiction.net occasionally prefers.

The fall of Umbridge was well written. I look forward to the fall-out from the trial at the Wizegmont. Either she will go down and bring the current Ministry with her, or she will be exonerated for political reasons, provoking an internal split in the Ministry between the progressive and reactionary factions.

They are long chapters, but they are always worth the effort.

BenRG's Rating: 8/10

moontenshi posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 6:49pm for Chapter 4 - Year Five Continued

I really like your new story. Keep up the great work and I'll look forward to the next chapter.