kcgx23 posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 10:05pm

Fabulous story, I hope you continue it, it will make a great AU story.

Frank Hacklander posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 10:02pm

Great conceit! And, a more than interesting realization. What, if anything, was in the bread that Harry gave Snape ("old bean"!!)? The bond with Luna? Lots of dangling threads so please tie some of them up.

Old_Crow posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 9:53pm

Hi,

I loved it! You invented the first post Riddle world that I have found to be interesting. I hope that you choose to continue with it.

O-C

Ramos posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 9:52pm

Mwah-ah-ah-ah! Glad to see Dumbledore got what he deserved!

SeanWH posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 9:46pm

More! More! Encore! Encore!

I'd ask some stupid question like "where do you get your ideas?" but there's really no point.

What a great beginning!

Jamie46 posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 9:34pm

LOVED it!!!! :) (at work, can't write much more.) But damn, that was awesome. One of the best revenges I've ever read. Mondo kudos to you for that terrific story. And yes, I can see where the plot bunnies would abound with that story, and how they could continue, but it's also a great ending here, too. But wow. Just love it. :) Awesome. Thanks so much for sharing!

Sandra Smith posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 8:53pm

Excellant story. I do hope that you carry it on to the future

Arvin Betancourt posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 8:44pm

SEQUEL, YES???

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 8:40pm

Wow. Just wow, this was something indeed, and a fascinating story to read, and the way that Harry concocted his vengance against the wizarding world was far more terrible than Tom's version in some way, better in others. A really great idea, too bad some of the ones that were heroic in your other stories weren't in this one, as it sems Susan and Neville were left behind, along with some of the others. Luna's revenge was incredible, and interesting, was Albus so convinced it was all for the greater good, or had he convinced himself to the point of idiocy? I do hope to see the return and what might happen after that.

Michelline posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 8:30pm

Most excellent. I loved Harry's interaction with Snape and Luna's plan was brilliant. I can't wait to see further fics set in this universe.
Thanks for such reading enjoyment!

JP posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 8:29pm

Superb. I particularly adore your use of Mad-Professor Luna.... And the pets line at the end was sweet.
The Wombat

Ken Warner posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 8:26pm

stunning story - and a truly vicious revenge

DrT posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 8:16pm

A lovely story. I really think you said it all, though.

"T"

Kyle Bissett posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 8:14pm

The problem will come when it becomes time to reintegrate a colony of early 21st century people into a 31st century world. Societies will have changed significantly in that time, and the people on the Cay won't know most of it.

There's also the issue of getting the people in the 31st century to accept magic, and the issue of reintegrating the magic genome into the human race, as only the people on the island will have it.

The fact that mages of the 1st Cay generation will have longer lives than anyone else (When mages tend to live longer than muggles anyway) might also cause problems.

Shawn Pickett posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 7:58pm

Brilliant, Harry's final solution was so poetic. Any wizard worth saving by his estimation had already fled to his island, conversely, if the wizarding world had even left themselves on muggleborn, they may have stood a chance of figuring out how to fix the problem. A few points, though, one being, at the end of the story, you talk of Charley and his daughter heading to Hogsmeade, which you had previously stated was extremely cursed by Luna with Dementor effects, so had the curse worn off after 20 years, had they built a New Hogsmeade, or were Charley and daughter engaging in a bit of masochism? Point two, which is really more of a question, did Albus actually subscribe to the whole it's the half bloods and muggleborns fault that the rest of the wizarding world did, did he simply turn a blind eye to the whole thing while he was reaping the glory for what he didn't do, or was this some plan of his to begin with? For that matter, did Charley subscribe to this crap as well, or did he just not care as long as trouble didn't come to his door? Percy I can easily see trying to go which ever way the wind blew in attempt to gather power, Charley I'm not sure of. Regardless, a great story, it would be interesting to see what happens when Harry's crew returns to the world, though anyone that would know what he did would long be dead.

Freddie posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 7:03pm

Bloody Oath this is an excellent plot.

You should continue it, it as so many options.

Thanks a lot

Freddie

Midnight posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 6:44pm

Brilliant. I loved it.

It reminds me slightly (actually, quite alot) of Asimov's foundation series.

A crumbling society, one man with his science and power attempting to remake the world in a better way. Very striking imagery, and even if you've never read the Foundation series before, it shares alot of similar themes.

I can only hope that a continuation of this follows in a format similar to the Foundation Series. You've given yourself great scope to work with.

Congratulations again for a brilliant short story.

Tazol posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 6:31pm

These are the types of Rabid Plot Bunnies I like to see expressed.

Excellent work, and definitely a keeper.

anettemargarete posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 6:28pm

wow a truly remarkable plotbunny there!

thanks for typing it out.

greetings anette

10dedfish posted a comment on Monday 2nd July 2007 5:39pm

Excellent story. Im not all that big a fan of revenge stories, mainly because they all start off really great then stop because he has had a change of heart blah blah blah. I did find several typos and a couple of repeated words, but nothing other than that. Keep up the good work guys!!

10ded