Sunrise Over Britain
By Bobmin
or even show the letter to non-family. before the 'bonding' it would seem probable, but seems highly unlikely after she saw the memories...
this is probably your biggest mistake until now in this and the previous story.....
Do you have Azkaban off the coast of Wales as a deliberately anti-canon aspect of this story or did you forget it is in the North Sea?
Great battle. A whole new perspective on Neville. I like.
At the start of the section titled 'Operations Center, Briefing theater (August 12th)...' I half expected Snape to walk out in an exploding thong, your disclaimers are really messing with my head lol, loving this story (and the disclaimers) thanks for sharing :-D
Great Azkaban scene. Azkaban is in the North Sea not the Irish (other side of Great Britain); or is that an AU thing (why would AU rearrange the map?)?
“Well, that might be true for a Weasley, Ginny, but you're a Longbottom now,” Luna said with a sniff. “Besides, that curse died out a long time ago. The Weasley family just
didn't realize that it hadn't passed through the generations and did their best to fulfill a curse that no longer existed. ” self-fulfilling huh
“I'm going to have cast a permanent cushion charm on her if she ever gets pregnant,” -- excellent idea Remus.
a calming drought?? a calming dry desolate place// probably a calming draught or draft...
I think the two of you are terrific authors --- doing something not many people have the ability to do -- take a story and remove it somewhat from the originating author and make it totally
believable.
Love it.
Um, I thought it was Alpha, Bravo, Charlie, not Able, Baker, Charlie. You used the Joint Army/Navy phonetic alphabet, used until 1956, now people use the NATO phonetic alphabet.
I'm still here and still reading your story...just thought you'd like to know that^_^
This is marvelous! Well plotted, well crafted, intelligent, and believable within your AU setting. I loathed book six, too. My only nitpick is that Harry hasn't been to see Hagrid in months, to
explain things. Harry and Hagrid are fairly close, in view of the fact that he was Harry's very first friend. I realize he couldn't tell Hagrid in advance, because Hagrid isn't exactly discreet, but
a conversation between them would be lovely.
When Snape bites it, can he please be wearing a thong? LMFAO
Wonderful story! I just read all of Sunset and now Sunrise and they were both very well written ^_^ and in this particular chapter I only noticed one mistake ;)
"Neville sighed and shook his head wearily. He checked his watch. It was just after seven in the morning. They had been on the island for barely an hour and he felt like he had been awake for
days!
“Alright, Second Squad, let's dig in and hope no one wants to pay us another visit today,” Neville called out.
He turned to start cleaning out the debris from his own hole when he heard someone shout. “Look!”
Spinning, he turned to face the fortress. The Dementors had fled to the top of the walls and were trying to escape into the building. All around them were the glowing Angels. The Angels circled the
top of the building, every so often plucking a Dementor from the mass and dispatching it. Above the Angels, an enormous Celtic Cross hung in the sky, glowing brightly in the morning sun. It was the
unofficial symbol of Haven, and the official talisman of the Brotherhood of CELTIC Knights(<---- wasn't is the Brotherhood of DRUIDIC Knights?).
Able company broke into a cheer at seeing the huge cross. Then Baker and finally Charlie companies took up the cry."
Well, that's all I have to say ^_^ both stories are very well written and I can't wait for the next update ^_^.
I have joined you on your journey,(Sorry i use you to mean both authors) and love your story to no end. I am very happy with what you have created and obviouly your happy with what you've created
or you would have stopped writting, that's all that matters to me.
This series may have started as an experiment but it's the best experiment I've ever seen(read). i extremely like the way you have taken characters from JK's works that were displayed as evil or
disliked (Draco, for example) and tried and succeeded to come up with a convincing way of changing their personalities. I also wanted to see if you could take something I saw as unlikely or not
believable (A Harry/Hermione pairing) and make it work.
I am pretty sure that if enough people broadcasted or reccomended your story you would have a cast of about ten of thousands. This is a Harry Potter story, but there are other voices that are heard
and it makes the story unique. This story is well thought out, is believable and is bloody brilliant! Thank you for your hard efforts and great job.
"Frankly the Harry going into and coming out of book six is a weak wimp that is probably going to end up getting killed in book seven. Book six was a major disappointment in my mind and it turned
the last book (and all fan fic based on book six) into nothing more than a treasure hunt."
I know you guys aren't like that little psycho who wrote "A Slytherin REvenge (the story where everybody was against Harry and he hooked up with Blaise ZAbini, a girl version)" which was on ff.net
for awhile. Remember that guy? The author's notes were him swwearing like a sailor with Tourette's about the stuff he hated from canon and cursing out his negative reviewers.
So I hope you'll forgive me for saying this (and perhaps appreciate a counter view-point), but you sound like you're almost disappointed that a) For once, we have a pretty good idea how the next book
will go and b)It limits what one can do in post book 6 fics. To that I say:
So what? Rowling herself said 6 and 7 are more like one book split in half or something to that effect, so halfway through one book its natural you might have a rough idea how the other half might
go. And JK is under no obligation to build a foundation for fanfic writers.
"Harry still hasn't received any decent combat training, but he's expected to duel a wizard with 50+ years of experience. Bye bye Harry."
But by that logic, even assuming Harry had been trained from birth, Voldemort would still have three decades more experience. The problem is is that a lot of people write stories (I'm not including
you, because you guys are obviously smart enough to know better) assuming the "power the dark lord knows not" is some super destructive force that lets him do wandless and non verbal magic that would
enable him to level a building with one spell, when Dumbledore makes it very clear that the power is just love. You guys write a super powered Harry, but you have better reasons for ignoring the
canon explanation and make a good case for doing so.
At the end of HBP, Snape seems to make it pretty clear that Harry is pwoerful enough, he just needs to close his mind so he won't telegraph his attacks to a powerful Legilimens.
Over time, I have become less and less convinced that the final confrontation will take the form of a conventional duel, and if Harry dies, it won't be because he's well trained or not.
That said, I am a long time fan of both of you guys' works. I just can't help but notice that the people who criticize HBP the most are fanfiction writers and readers, especially those who have wrote
and read numerous versions of year 6. If that's the case, I'm staying away from post HBP fiction so I won't be let down by the real thing.
No offense- but have you noticed this as well?
I think I have a differenet perspective than most, as I first read the entire Hp series 1-6 last summer non stop without any breaks between 5 and 6 for me to ponder the infinite number of ways number
6 could go.
I will agree that Dumbledore could have at least tried to extrapolate how the "power" works and could be used. But I also think that we have a disadvantage over the characters, so to speak: we know
there's only one more book, one more year, but the characters don't. He probably simply expected a lot more time.
That said, I eagerly await the rest of the story.
And when are we going to see Dudley again?
This is such an awesome story. I'm glad that you and your wife are still working on this and are planning on finishing it. You two could definitely write original stories if you desired but I certainly don't mind reading your HP stories!!! I love the relationship between Harry and Hermione as well as the other Brotherhood members. I also enjoy the original characters you've added into the HP world like the Healers and other foreign ministry workers and such. I can't wait to see what Voldemort's reaction is and I'm wondering if Snape will finally be killed off or if something else will happen to him. He's a very bitter man, which is sort of how I picture him to be. Dumbledore is off his rocker and something needs to be done about him, he keeps making problems wherever he goes. It would be interesting if Moody came to Haven, or was found and decided to help out since he could be a real asset to them either in training spies or whatnot. Luna is a very interesting character and I've grown to like her a lot. Keep up the good plot and character work!
nice update looking forward to the next.
I don't know what to say. I simply love your stories. I know you are not JK Rowling, but to be honest I am glad that you aren't. If I can say so I even like your sequals to what she has written
beter then hers. There are quiet a few fanfics out there that I think are better then the book 5 and 6 of JK.
I can say only one think. KEEP GOING!!!!
well done chapter. Hermione sometimes is to curious for her own good.
i seem to have hit a back button without noticing...