By Bobmin
Reviews
Jeremy posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 4:00pm
You are doing a great job. The only issue I have is with Harry in this chapter. yes tonks should have been dressed down for what she did. It takes two to tango what about remus he agreed to go out. Also humiliating Tonks infront of a group of people would create resentment from Tonks. This is somehting you glossed over. Being a leadrer yes is giving reward and piunishment. This has to be measured with wizdom. Not going off suddenly when you are mad and only heard one side of the story. I am not at all trying to flame this story i have loved it from when I found it. The calaber of the site is parr excelant. I myself do not want om but I know of a great author who I feel his stoies would fit in great. How can I help him get published here?
Sam posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 2:11pm
great chapter as usual
Crys posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 12:21pm
Team Weasley repairing everything. Even some of the items they didn't take? But that wasn't mentioned in the news articles . . .
About the giant carcass: Just a bit of psychological entertainment, leave a note on it saying, "You're welcome. - HP" Drive Snape and DD batty trying to figure out Harry's nefarious hidden motive.
Great stuff! Looking forward to more chapters.
Orion Scorpio posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 11:12am
Great fanfic! I've been reading your fics ever since Dumbledore's Army and I see your writing has improved a lot. While there were the occasional section and paragraph in DA (and to a lesser extent in Spiritus Crystalus) that I felt I could have written better myself, this is most certainly not the case in Sunset Over Britain. Wonderful job!
A few things, though:
1. I'm somewhat disappointed with how you depict Voldemort. He doesn’t do anything but sit there and behave like a lunatic, occasionally stroking his pet snake (Ugh. Bad image. Bad, baaaad image!) This is odd, since he’s supposed to be a genius — "The most brilliant student Hogwarts has ever had." Of course, this fic is AU so *your* Voldemort may be more like Hitler; a certified nut job and control freak, with little real ability.
2. How on Earth could Richfield honestly think Voldemort was a myth? Denying that he had returned is one thing, but denying that he existed in the first place? I have difficulty in believing anyone could be so completely idiotic. On the other hand, there are people today who honestly think the Earth is flat, so…
A couple questions:
1. The sanctuary Harry has built has room for a thousand families. How much of the wizarding population in Britain would that make?
2. How in the HELL did the Weasleys steal the HMS Victory??
vl100butch posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 9:12am
Hey guys,
I guess this story is going to stop at "The end of the beginning" after Harry finishes playing Lord Gort (because he is planning taking back his homeland from the bad guys is a better fit to my mind)
Loved taking Victory---I don't know if HMS Warrior was restored at that point or not...
AND fixing the Rosetta Stone---ROFLAMO!!!!
Next chapter soon, pretty please.....
SCWLC posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 8:17am
Is it wrong that I find your authors' notes to be almost more entertaining than your actual story? I want the overly large magically resistant dwarves. Can you include the dwarves?
But seriously now. I've been particularly enjoying the detail you include in the story. I'm the first to admit to being impatient for various writers to 'get on with it', but I'm enjoying all this lead-up to the climax(es). And, although I will forever be unable to fully go along with the notion of a H/Hr 'ship, I am enjoying the way you've managed to pull it off without making it into some sort of list of logical reasons that they 'ought' to be together.
Finally, I will be hypocritical and thank you for updating regularly.
SCWLC
Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 7:15am
A most enjoyable read and I had to snicker, nay guffaw, at the thought of the Weasleys stealing HMS Victory. *smile* It's probably a good thing the previous HMS Vanguard wasn't preserved there (last operational RN battleship), stealing that would be a bit daunting even for Team Weasley. ;D
I heartily agree with your pet peeves. The occassional error will slip through the most dedicated and competent group of Betas (as I well know, both as a writer and Beta), but some stories out there make me shudder when I read them and the considerable number of errors ruins my enjoyment of the story.
Paulo posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 6:40am
Hi, Bob and Alyx.
I keep forgetting to do the review thing, because I honestly suck at it, and I kinda hate having nothing else constructive to say than 'great work'.
But... sometimes praise should be given. This is turning out to be one of the greatest stories I've ever read, so EXCELLENT WORK!
Aside from that, one question. Sunset will end when Harry and Co. leave Britain and the sequel will pick up from there?
Paulo/BigHead.
Greg Johnson posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 6:38am
Good Chapter! I can't wait to see what happens when Team Weasley tell Hermione that they've fixed all the broken items. That will be awesome!! :-) Keep up the good work and update again soon.
patrik svensson posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 6:30am
grejt story,
keep upp the good work.
Opinions are like assholes.
Everyone has one - but some just smell worse than others.
Mike posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 5:29am
You crazy writers! You stole the damn HMS VICTORY!!! I'm impressed. Oh, and I was wondering, as I am writing a harry potter fiction myself, where there is huge wizarding war going on, between Voldie and his forces, I was wondering if I could use some of your aspects of your story, mainly controlling muggle army units to help overthrow britian.
Mary posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 5:09am
I'd like to be a fly on the wall when Hermoine finds out the Weasleys have "fixed" all those priceless historical objects. :o)
This just gets better and better.
Charles posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 4:16am
Ok, wow :)
I love the Weasley "Heritage" bandits... Its just such a "Gred and Forge" kind of activity... Though from his time working in the Egyptian pyramids for Gringotts, I would assume that he would know what the Rosetta Stone was.
Keep up the good writing, though can you write a bit of action soon?
-Charles
Shawn Pickett posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 1:42am
Nicely done, I rather like the bit with the underground railroad, the thought hadn't occured to me yet, but it is very appropriate. While I understand Harry being upset with Tonks, I kind of thought he was a bit out of line there, I was seeing shades of Dumbledore's treatment of Sirius and Harry, though in fairness, if Tonks had went to Harry, like Harry and Sirius had tried to go to Dumbledore, she would have gotten better results than Harry did. The bit with Narcissa addressing the refugees was brilliant, it should be interesting to see if Harry's rep does cause a problem in the future. I wonder how Voldemort will react when he realizes that he is overlord of Britian, and essentially trapped there? Outstanding chapter, thank you.
Zaxxon posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 12:42am
Need to close the italtics, instead of letting it run the entire story.
Otherwise, very good... looking forward to more.
Oldwolf posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 12:17am
All in all an excellent chapter. I have only one complaint and that's primarily visual. The italic's were not turned off after the first news article.
Beyond that, everything looked good, though I'm curious as to Flint's fate, though I may have missed it in the chapter
Eliew posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 12:05am
Only one little comment, I would have thought that Hermione would have read 'Gringotts, A History' so that even though she never had the chance to go down to the vaults, she would at least knows about them and the security involved.
MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Sunday 16th October 2005 10:39pm
Another great chapter, I like the underground railroad idea that they are using. I cant wait for the next update, I think its going to be an inportant chapter.
Semper Fi
MarinePotterFan
Eliew posted a comment on Sunday 16th October 2005 10:18pm
Interesting start, though it's really sad that most of the people that Harry trusted isn't all that trustworthy, especially the Weasels, save for the twins and Ginny. Now I'm wonder who else within the Order does not know of Albus's ulterior motives, people like Kingsley, Moody, Dung, etc.
Read your A/N regarding canon picking, but still just wanted to point out about the letter from Ron to Hermione where the Prophet was mention. Shouldn't it be 4th year rather than 3rd. If it's written as 3rd on purpose, then ignore this.
Meanwhile I'll continue with my reading. :)
beauty0102 posted a comment on Monday 17th October 2005 4:39pm