Clayton Rickey posted a comment on Friday 23rd September 2005 4:54am

It has been pretty good so far, but you got one thing wrong that I can think of. In Painful Recovering , you said that the last time Harry visited his vault was the summer before his second year. Actually, the last time he visited his vault was the summer before his third year, after he ran away from the Dursleys.

izoomzoom posted a comment on Friday 23rd September 2005 2:37am

I am impressed so far. I normally don't think too much of the H/HR fics (I'm a H/G shipper if I ship at all) but just reading the first chapter you've got some great story lines here. I've always like the uber-Harry plot line and this should be no exception. I'll hopefully get through all the 17 more chapters this weekend and I'll be ready for more...

I _really_ approve of your 'peeve' I feel that begging for reviews is degrading. You do this because it's fun not for the attention. If JK had written HP for the money, it'd never gotten published 'cause it would have sucked and we wouldn't have the world to play in. Keep going!

IZoomZoom.

ThunderGod posted a comment on Thursday 22nd September 2005 4:22pm

Once again, another great Chapter, twists and turns..seeing Dumbledore burning his bridges down is enjoyable. While I don't agree with some things, I do agree with freedom of choice and peoples ideas on stories. I enjoy the storie despite not liking some things, because the things I DO like are excellently written..so there.

I also love the pet peeves section..ONE of the many things I love and agree with.

ThunderGod

Foreverread posted a comment on Thursday 22nd September 2005 8:00am

This is quite a good story, and I'm sorry it was taken off of ff.net. Why was it taken off out of curiosity?

Padfoot's Godchild posted a comment on Thursday 22nd September 2005 3:12am

I LOVE it!! I love reading stories like yours where Harry is strong and fighting back! I'm looking forward to reading more of your story and its sequel.

BTW, I loved Dumbledore's Army and Spiritus Crystalus also! I'm like you guys. I love reading fiction with nice long chapters and without a lot of spelling mistakes. Bad spelling in a story always turns me off.

I love the pranks!! I've pulled quite a few of them myself when I was in High School, Nursing School, and when I was in the U.S. Navy in 1971! My favorite day of the year is April Fool's Day, because I can always come up with something!

Great Story!

draregerreip posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 10:54pm

Waow .... I just found out about your story yesterday... It made for a very very short night (and absolutely no work so far today) :)

One of the best ongoing work I am aware of... and I'm glad to see that I wasn't the only one that couldn't stomach reading HBP til the end (skimmed it actually)

As to your story, well what can I say, you write extremely well with very few typos or mispellings, a knack for flowing dialogs and great characterization ... the plot is excellent as well.

You make a great case for some very difficult hypothesis (Draco's goodness and Harry's acceptance of it, Ron and Molly treason, Harry's superpowers, Dumblebee's tunnel vision and manipulations, ...)

Only thing, not a complaint but a suggestion if I may. You give us an action packed novel but at some points it's a bit lacking in the descriptive. We are on such a frenetic pace that at some point we could use some more relaxed chapter with a bit longer scenes to vary the pace of the story, something like an eye in the raging storm.

Looks like this story will finish with a successful relocation in Irland... I just hope you'll be as profilic in giving us the next instalment with harry coming back and kicking Riddle's ass ... I wonder what we'll be your new title .... "A new sunrise"?

Thanks for giving us this fantastic story.

hyper_swain posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 3:21pm

i am loving your chapter lenghts. the story so far is excellent

Firelegs posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 7:46am

I'm sorry about FFN.net; it's getting ridiculous. Good luck:) I like the chapter.

Samantha posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 7:03am

Love it! I LOVE how Harry, the twins, and Hermione got rid of the Prophit and how Hermione told her father her views. I LOVE what Luna's jinxes did to Dumbledore! I HOPE the Board of Governor's DO SOMETHING about Dumbledore THIS time! He needs to be permentally removed from Hogwarts. Also, is it Ron at the end? Or is it someone completely off the wall and unsuspecting so that no one would think it was them?
Love ya,
Sam

Christopher Estep posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 6:18am

The girls (mostly Hermione and Luna) take command in this chapter, but the stage is set by Emma (Hermione's mum) at the Irish construction site. I am kind of curious as to what Lucius' reaction will be to the ambush at Cousin McNulty's house. Sounds like the twins had better intel than Harry (they knew about Zonko's also using that storage space that the DP owns and used the opportunity to take down a competitor). Dumbledore snoops into Luna's diary and is sure the spells she said she used are fake. Uh, Albus; they are NOT fake. They aren't physically harmful, but they are NOT fake. In short, Albus DUMBledore, you're *busted*. (The only thing that saves him is the Aurors kick the whole sorry mess to the Board of Governors instead.) Right at the end is the Dreaded Cliffy, in which one of the Nibbler moles reveals himself (likely Ron).

Mark posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 5:16am

Hmmm. The attack on the Daily Prophet and the Malfoys seem rather Voldy-ish, and far too cruel for Harry.

Other than that, great chappie! I love the idea of using the Chamber as Headquarters, and DD is getting his comeuppance for being evil, and everyone is finding out that LUna isn't as crazy as they thought!

Amy posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 3:08am

yeah great chapter please update again i'm sorry that fanfiction took down your story. I'm beauty0102 and been reading both your other stories and really like it and been reading this story seen i have found the other one.

Samantha posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 1:38am

While I've noticed you guys are pretty down on FF.net for what is a very good reason on your part I have to admit I am very pleased about the decision they made. Had it not been for the amount of discussion it caused in the fanfic communtity it might have been a while before I discovered your wonderful story.
Onto the review...
Too many AU stories turn into bizarre flights of fancy that bear so little resemblance to canon that they really have little need of a disclaimer. In my opinon those types of stories are an insult to JKR's work as they reject the world she has created. Your story is however, in my opinion, very complimentary to JKR's writing. You have kept the universe she created more or less intact in terms of magical spells, attitudes and beliefs etc. In changing the personalities of the main characters, what you have done is open up a new realm of possibilities that is entirely in keeping with the canon universe she has created. In certain ways this makes your story even more believable than many of the stories I have read that claim to be canon. In combining the elements of canon with these (dare I call them) new characters you have created a whole new universe that is a showcase to your abilities as writers. It is not often that one finds authors who understand the tenets of writing well enough to create a believable and entrancing story within the fanfic community and I would like to thank you both very much for sharing your talents with us. Call it AU all you want - in my opinion it is canon with a what-if and a bloody good read.

ankerbau2 posted a comment on Wednesday 21st September 2005 12:58am

Great Chapter!

Harry was a bit careless, I'm afraid. He turns his back to the door and he hasn't the Marauders Map.

Kathleen posted a comment on Tuesday 20th September 2005 11:59pm

Wow!! What a great story! I came across it the other day and just finished the last chapter you've got posted today. Keep up the good work!
(btw, I LOVE the inventive disclaimers.)

Julia posted a comment on Tuesday 20th September 2005 10:06am

cool story guys
i was ready 2 blow up the ff website wen i founds out sunset wasnt there, sigh... good thing u put it here. as 4 the porposal, for her next birthday, he could give her a neckless that is a timed portkey that will transport her to a sunset beach where harry has set up a nice picnic for them both, and in then he gives her a single red rose with the ringcase, he gets on 1 knee, opens the case and asks her 2 marry him. i dunno, that was a split second idea. e-mail me if u think u can do somethin with it of just nead plain different ideas

Greg posted a comment on Tuesday 20th September 2005 7:22am

Great Chapter! I liked how you had Hermione destroy that Zonko's building. That just cracked me up!! :-) Keep up the good work.

gummihu posted a comment on Tuesday 20th September 2005 4:11am

One word. DON’T. Sit on your fingers, take up knitting.

how do you knitt when you're sitting on your fingers??

Great story btw

Brian McCrary posted a comment on Tuesday 20th September 2005 12:43am

"Boys, Hermione probably knows more spells than all of us combined. Why, just the other day she was telling me about this circumcision spell she’d learned about that could be done from a distance," Ginny said in wide eyed innocence.

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You know, that's a particularly nasty threat, considering that unlike the US, circumcision is rarely practiced in the UK. The vast majority of British males would still be...vulnerable to such a threat....

hyper_swain posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2005 5:10pm

your an are very amusing, i am getting almost as much enjoyment from them as i am your story! i have a fic on ff called aftermath and would be intrested to hear your opinion on it. i'm not trying to solicit reviews i just respect you two as fan fic writers and would value your input greatly.