Matthew posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2005 10:41am

Woot! Another update!

I loved the punning references to old-crow... although you may want to explain them in the author notes so people who aren't familiar with him will know where to find his stuff.

Also, one old nagging plot question (sorry if I brought up something that has been answered before). Harry swapped Hermione's drugged pumpkin juice with Millicent Bulstrode's... did he know she had a role in making the potion or something? Why didn't he just banish it? I'm surprised making another female student molest Ron isn't considered to be a form of rape in itself (for her, Ron just got karma). It just seemed out of character, especially for Hermione to condone it, unless she had some role in the plot. (Besides being a no-good slytherin =).

Darrell posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2005 7:43am

o god please update how could you do this to us

(sobs horribly) but nice touch with Dumbledore LOL and i hope he finally gets his

Jack-A-Roe posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2005 7:24am

Well that was an interesting chapter. I loved them burning down Zonko's.
I would have Harry beat up Malfoy a little more, but that's me.
DD is getting sloppy. He should have been able to test for charms on the book.
Yes, recapping the story is definitely one of my pet peeves. Why would I read this story if I didn't know the backround already?
My second pet peeve is authors misspelling the characters names or places in the book. Sirius in not Serius or any variation. How does one misspell Fawkes?
Don't even get me started on horrible use of tenses...if Harry already did something you can't use present tense....sorry just venting.
Looking forward to 19.

Ben Russell-Gough posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2005 4:58am

Wow! What a cliffie with which to end the chapter? So who is it? Knee-jerk reactions aside, I would say that it is a 50-50 split on it being Ron or Snape. Ron because he has pretty obviously started tumbling down the slope to the Dark Side and Snape because I have a sneaking suspicion that he is the one who tried to kill Draco.

The rest of this chapter has some interesting elements of the wider story, with Harry's exile town taking shape and plans afoot to completely blockade a Voldemort-controlled UK on both magical and muggle levels.

The whole thing with Luna is hillarious, of course. Her defensive jinxes are wonderful. It is really in-character for the Dumbledore in this story that he would assume that, just because he hasn't heard of a jinx, that means it can't exist.

As it is, I don't think that he is fatally damaged by something as simple as sneaking a look at Luna's diary. He could just claim that he needed to make sure that she wasn't engaged in unspecified "illegal" activities (although even this would still be frowned on). However, given his loss of control over Harry, the number of murders in the school (and the imminent delivery to the Staff Room of an unconscious Dark Wizard or two) I don't think that he can avoid the imposition of a new High Inquisitor (probably Madam Bones) authorised to review and counter-sign on all of his decisions.

It is most likely that Harry will now decide to bring forward his evacuation. Hogwarts is quickly becoming such a focus of dark magic that the few benefits of remaining are almost all gone.

Wow! I just can't wait for more! This is probably the best HP fanfic I've ever read! Only "Lions of Gryffindor" by madscientist over on Portkey is a peer, in my humble opinion.

BenRG's Rating: 9/10

Riven posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2005 4:34am

another awsome chapter.
deffinetly an O+ for all the dumbledore bashing going on in this chap. however i must say that was a bad bad cliffie there at the end so im afaraid i must recamend that you be sent to the ministry for "reprogramming"
hopefully this way you will learn that cliffies are bad, also i will ask the house elves to remove your bedding in the hopes that you will spend more time writeing and less slaaping ;)
anywho, cant wait for the next chapter.

John

John Wilburn posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2005 12:26am

Dear Bob n Alyx,
Really enjoyed the story so far. I thought the tip of the hat to Old Crow was great.

Thanks
John

Holly posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 11:33pm

I am thrilled that you posted a new chapter!!!
I'm completly hooked on this story! Can't wait for the next. Your doing an excellent job. Keep up the great work.

Muirnin Cocan posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 11:04pm

Excellent chapter... I am so glad that Dumbledore got hit by what HE believed was NOT true... Luna's Jinx!

I was laughing so much at your 'Oh so subtle references' to Keith and Old Crow... your comments - I half expected you to have Keith say something about 'Family Matters' *grin*

I have now decided that you both are Jiminy Cricket and have become my conscience! You both make me feel extremely guilty for my lack of posting anything new! I promise that once I can get my darling Rose and Christopher up and well again I will be sure to start writing more often! Even if I have too many stories going at one time!

Great work... I adore this story... can't wait to see what else you have come up with...

As Always,
Muirnin - who will always believe in Shipping what is RIGHT over what is Easy...

Meg posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 10:59pm

OMG. What an evil cliffie!

Love the way you had Harry deal with McNutter. The Twins are so evil! Highly amusing, but still evil.

I'm really hoping I'm right about who the attacker is. It would just fit in so very nicely.

Totally looking forward to 19!

Meg

Meghan posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 10:01pm

Fabulously written as per usual. :) Very consistent which is something I LOVE about your writing. As for proposal suggestion (which by all means take or leave or rearrange or whatever...) I think it would be great if he did it while in the library and instead of a ring gave her a self updating Hogwarts, a History (but then I think that's funny and it's not really romantic but it's different). I'm trying to think of what has and hasn't been done in fanfiction and besides the library the only other location I can think of is in the Forbidden Forest and the Chamber of Secrets. Prehaps Harry borrows some of his dad's proposal to his mom and takes Hermione by broom to a clearing in the Forbidden Forest? Whatever you guys do will be fantastic and unique. I'm looking forward to it.

Adam posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 3:39pm

Great chapter, I did love what Luna did to Dumbledore he deserved everything he gets. The added bonus is that none of the students will now trust him with anything private, after all if he is willing to read one persons diary, who is to say he wont read another. That is something that cant really be repaired. As for who came through the door at the end, well it will be interesting to find out. I did like the idea of putting some sort of ward up round England to stop the DE's gettin out. Keep em coming this is continuing to be one the best stories I hve read.

hyper_swain posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 3:24pm

love the story and the chappie lenghths! i also am anoyed by the idea of people bugging you about this not being to cannon when you've blatantly stated that it is au.

noylj posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 2:24pm

Sorry, I think the Mayor and Governor have more to do with any lack of response in the first 72 hours than FEMA. It is first a city, then a state issue, and if the city can't follow its own emergency plans and if the governor can not get her resources in action, then blaming the Feds is just so much malarkey.
Love the story, however, but I can't wait for you to bury Dumbledore and Snape...please? Soon?

minervakitty posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 12:15pm

Serves the pervet Dumbledore right for reading a diary. It's Prewitt that Harry's meeting? I do hope that Ron gets put in his place. Does Dumbledore know more about Harry's plan? Harry should totally humilated Ron in a duel that would have him in recovery for a very long time.

Joyce posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 11:08am

Hey, just to let you know:
You have misspelled a few words. This isn't canon. And my own pet peeve is summaries that say no slash or no HBP spoilers, which effectivly stops you searching for fics that have the elements in question. And thanks for the explanation of "shite"; I never did understand how so many people were that dumb.

My three favorite things about a good fic are a well crafted story, long chapters, and three times a day updates. You do the first two so well, I can forgive the last.

Of course, this whole review was written to make you laugh, so please, if it didn't come across as funny, don't be upset. I love your fics, and read all three (up to this point) in the last few days. Sadly, this means I will have to wait for the rest, but I can live with it. :)

Joyce

MarinePotterFan posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 10:55am

Another Great chapter, Lucius got off easy. Dumbdor is going to get off easy I think Harry should help the Board of Gov to CAN him. So Minerva can take over and make it easier to get everyone out when the crap its the fan.

Later
Marine Potter Fan.

Shawn Pickett posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 10:08am

Luna Lovegood RULES!!! Hexing the headmaster for reading her diary, outstanding. It would have been better if he hadn't read it at all, but at least he will suffer some difficulty for his transgression (though I suspect not much). I rather liked Arthur taking Albus to task in front of the Order, though it's a shame that Albus was able to divert suspicions so easily, what a bunch of sheep, and most of them will likely be slaughtered like sheep. Outstanding chapter, thank you.

Mark posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 9:57am

LMAO! Luna's jinxes are inspired. Dumbledore is truely reaping what he's sowed for violating her diary. You know, Hermione makes a good point, when is the Board going to finally decide that enough is enough? Plus, will when will Amelia finally drop the hammer on Dumbledore? And is our mystery bully on the Astronomy Tower possibly Ronald Weasley? If so, there's going to be a butt whooping the likes that has never been seen before. Keep it coming!!

Lady FoxFire posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 9:40am

First off your disclaimer lack it's usual flare but I will forgive you this once because you're still recovering from FF betrayal.

So does Dumblejerk look like the Incredible Hulk?

What is Snape brewing and which side is he one. I need a reminder.

As for who Harry meetsin the Astronomy tower I'm going to say it's either Snape or Ron. Hmmm it's more likely that it's Ron

Amanda posted a comment on Sunday 18th September 2005 9:25am

Best disclaimer yet! I enjoyed this chapter so much. This was your best work yet. Fluff, but not too much fluff, and the scenes with Dumbledore and Luna were FANTASTIC! The cliffe-hanger was brutal though - it WAS Ron wasn't it? I loved that the twins *ahem* put the competion in thier place. :D