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JoFarries posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 7:40pm for The fall of the House of Potter

I can't review. There are no words to describe how much I loved this story. I absolutely adore a "Albus gets his comeuppance" story, and this was one of the best I've ever read. I bow you to, for you truly are a magnificent author! Enough honestly-meant flattery. Now, on to the actual review. :-) I love how you've portrayed the Greengrass family. They were believable to read, especially the relationship between Daphne's parents. I liked the interactions between Harry and Neville, too. Longbottom of Longbottom is truly someone to have at your back, isn't he? And I like the idea of him marrying Susan and Luna. Maybe would have liked to see the ex-Potters get more of a bashing, but hey, you can't have everything. Liked what happened with Ginny, Ron and Hermione, too. Might have wished for more than a good thumping from his wife for Ron, tho. And Ginny deserved to die alone, imho. Characters were well written, understandable and believable. Story was well written, with no stuttering mistakes (ones that make me stutter to a halt, not a speach problem! :-D). All in all, a great read! Thank you so much! Jo

Mierin posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 7:39pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Wow. Excellent story, as always. Thank you for sharing your talent with us plebians :)

-Mierin

hga posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 7:35pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Epic fail due to the level of mind magic Harry knew about by the time it went AU. To illustrate, imagine Dumbledore had done to James and Lily what Hermione did to her parents (something Harry wouldn't necessarily have known to be possible but couldn't discount as impossible).

Now imagine Harry learning the truth after he's made the Potter family extinct....

The bottom line is that Harry has to talk to at least one of his parents before he could proceed as he does in the story. If despite all this he still wasn't willing to, one would hope Daphne would realize having anything to do with him could be a terrible mistake.

FyreIce posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 6:54pm for The fall of the House of Potter

A very different story of Harry's parents still alive. It is hard to accept Harry agreed to the marriage contract, blindly assuming Daphne would become a great wife. But, it worked. Daphne still seemed too much like a slippery slytherin, even if she was from that house. I guess I am having trouble finding them compatable. Nice to read something totally different, none the less. You covered all the angles and characters nicely, even including an epilogue.

mrsfwolf posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 6:21pm for The fall of the House of Potter

AS with all of your stories, this one is excellant

ladyimmortal posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 5:45pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Freakin' a! That was one marvelous story, Bob & Alyx! Talk about life turned around quickly. You always manage to take an idea and build it into a marvelous story.

Thanks so much for this. You totally rock! :D

rune1806 posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 5:33pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Wow this was good in so many ways I have trouble remembering them all. The whole Dumbles thread was great, the Potters alive I was not sure about however it really added so much to the story. The wizarding culture that you built around the 18th century thinking was well done. Great story.

athenewolfe posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 5:27pm for The fall of the House of Potter

wonderful story thank you

betsymc51 posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 5:21pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Thank you for writing a really interesting story. I enjoyed reading it very much. I had just finished Sunset/Sunrise for the 3rd time, and was delighted to find a new adventure to indulge in. I am not much of a reviewer because it is not my place to pick at any of your work. I think you two are brilliant and I have enjoyed everything you have written. It would be ridiculous for me to try to tell you how to write anything! And I was a bit afraid to review anything, because you can be hard on people and you scare me!!! LOL. I just want to thank you for your years of obvious hard work and for sharing with all of us.

Betsy

tsmuckitelly posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 5:15pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Thank you for another great story. I really like your writing and appreciate a good story. I cannot begin to express my appreciation for all of the good fan fiction authors that keep the characters alive.

Chris15 posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 4:57pm for The fall of the House of Potter

An excellent story. I have only one complaint, you never really discribed Daphne physically. What color is her hair, how tall is she, you just kind of left it to the reader to make it up.

I do like how your version of Lily and James eventually understood that Harry wanted nothing to do with him, too many stories like this have them repeatedly trying to apologize and explain to the point of stupidity no matter how Harry rejects them.

Nice job of putting Dumbledore down, he went out with a wimper and not a bang.

A little curious as to how Neville got with Susan and Luna, my guess is that Susan was part of a contract and Neville had feelings for Luna and Susan didn't mind.

Also a little surprised that no mention of Remus and his reaction to finding out about his friends betrayel.

I hope that the joke about punching the Harry/Daphne ticket means you are writing a whole series with Harry with the unusual ships.

More soon please.

jeffstrauser@yahoo.com posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 4:43pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Outstanding Story!!!!

Snag posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 4:37pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Woosh. A bit grim, this one. Although Voldemort being beaten by a spell designed for Quidditch players did give me a good laugh.

Fun! All in all, a nice spin on the marriage contract riff.

vl100butch posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 4:06pm for The fall of the House of Potter

this has got to be the most original fanfic i've ever read.....and it is superb even by your standards.....

that being said....
(in bunker, with k-pot securely on and wearing body armor---awaiting attack from FPIA)

pretty please, with donuts and alan rickman, can we have some more mutant storm.....

Jim Edge posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 4:05pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Awesome story! Great work as always!

pug54321 posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 4:01pm for The fall of the House of Potter

how about writing one where james and lily don't die but are in a coma in someplace where their house elves hid them for 7 years, when acciadntly apparates he goes to them and not the school building. majarly pissed at dumbles for what they he did to their son they form their own faction to fight the war they know is coming.

Rift120 posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 3:27pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Fairly nice although I think the Ginny epilogue was a bit to cruel and bashing... especially since you had her realizing earlier in the story that she had lost teh race for Harry and beyond that she was a non entity in the fic

edgerton posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 3:26pm for The fall of the House of Potter

loved it lol great story and excellent bashing lmao i cant stop laughing... i think maybe you should write another HP/DG story there arent many good ones out there (few yes but not great stories) i have read most of your stories and they are excellent so there for i think you would be the best person to write more HP/DG and others i like how harry is when he usally ends up with a slytherin woman...

Slytherin66 posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 3:21pm for The fall of the House of Potter

Great story

Slytherin66 posted a comment on Saturday 29th May 2010 3:19pm for The fall of the House of Potter

This was a most enjoyable story I liked Harry not to weak or too strong and enough of a backbone to be interesting. Daphne was fantastic as always a true Slytherin for a wife how could Harry not change the world. A very good way for Harry to gain power and makes sense the sorting hat was great fun.

The Greengrass family were an interesting couple and I am glad Priscilla found a purpose and was happier than she already was.

Longbottom did well in this story two wives and became Minister.

I loved what happened to the Potters, Albus, Ginny, Ron and Granger bashing of the know it all is rare but is always good.

A nice death for the Dark Lord and his followers and the Draco's mum going to Azkaban was a nice bonus.

The fate of the Dursley's was just why they deserve using Myrtle for revenge was very clever and I liked the darker Myrtle. I would love to read another story where she helps get revenge on those who wronged Harry.

This was a great story from start to finish. I look forward to your next story I hope its Harry/Susan or Harry with two Hufflepuff wives. Slytherin revenge is always good but I would love to read about Hufflepuff fury.

Thanks for this story.