gdbessey posted a comment on Saturday 7th April 2007 6:06am

Just a quick note, since I haven't finished reading, but this story is phenomenal. I love AU stories, and I especially love to read a story so well written.

I admit, I'm a fanfic snob. If the first paragraph is so poorly written, I will not read further no matter how intriguing the idea.

This one is beautifully done, with great characterizations, on-the-spot dialogue, and plot that flows incredibly well. I'm very much enjoying it.

I also appreciate the story recs that I have picked up from the authors. The pet peeves are great and spot on. Holding chapters hostage just tickes me off, and author comments in the middle are extremely annoying. I hate delving into a chapter only to find the flow interrupted by an inane comment.

I cannot wait to read more.

Gabrielle

bluezy posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd April 2007 5:16am

I read this book in one go, I really liked it.

Thank you for sharing it amongst us, critics. I have written some fictional stories myself but would never dare to share them.

Bluezy

vateruncer posted a comment on Thursday 29th March 2007 7:50am

I have sat and read this story and have been intrigued in many ways, yet the one thing I have to compliment you on is how very hard it is to tell that two people wrote this story. Though I will also say that I found your disclaimers as well as AN's to be a welcome change to many stories I have read. I just wished to say I am going to start posting reviews or sending an email to the two of you as I begin the next story. If you wish to contact me before I do get a chance to review here is my email. vateruncer@yahoo.com

funderbunk7967 posted a comment on Wednesday 28th March 2007 9:04am

I absolutely love your story! It took me a week to read it, but it was definitely worth it. I can't wait to see how the sequel/7th year ends.

bauer posted a comment on Tuesday 27th March 2007 3:57am

Excellent story. I rather enjoyed two other fictions of yours that were sent to me by a friend. After reading them I had to see what else you could come up with. I must say good work and please continue to write and entertain

wolfey posted a comment on Sunday 25th March 2007 2:03am

hey i kno you prob hate when people do this but i noticed one thing wrong with your first chapter. when you mentioned the article bout hermione and harry dating. that happened in fourth year. you said third.

Amber Dragon posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 11:54am

Wasn't your Pet Peeve in the last chapter improper grammar mistakes that result in not testing your beta? Here is a mistake that I found in this chapters disclaimer:

Suddenly a machine barks and killing all on the stage.

Wrong tense!

Bobmin356 replied:

That's the key point though, isn't it? The disclaimers and AN's are never beta read. They are the last things added to each chapter after it's been beta'd (which is mentioned in an AN for one of the chapters, I think). Nice try, though. I'm sure if you really want to hunt through the beta'd portion of each chapter, you'll find a mistake or two that was missed. However, you'll miss out on a lot of great fan fiction on the net if you spend all your free time hunting for them. And in the end, what does it get you? Not a lot, I'd wager.

Quynh posted a comment on Wednesday 7th March 2007 11:04am

Damn straight on the Peeve... though I am a beta for one, and it is killer trying to figure out what this next line says.

Naruto as fight he smashes face of Sasuke, blowing face and brusing cheek.

Needless to say, I've had it for about half a day and I'm still about 5000/8000 words left to go. Oh how I weep.

Great chapter, and I find it steadaly harder and harder to ever read an acuall Harry Potter book, seeing as I only have PS and HBP... though I do enjoy reading the former, and I suddenly hate the latter... hn

Quynh posted a comment on Wednesday 7th March 2007 8:22am

Damn right on the pet peeve man... Bloody 'ell, I've read a 3000 word chapter ( which is really hard for me... you and many other writers have set my standers to at least 7000+ words PER chapter now >_< ) and horrid grammer...

Exept your Authors attack fic... I laughed like a bloody buffon

Quynh posted a comment on Wednesday 7th March 2007 7:29am

Wow... I can honestly say... DAMN MAN! You ( one of you 2 that are reading this... unless both, the this revioew is screwed ), are BLOODY AWSOME!...

I feel as though I have somehow dishonoured my Viet decent... eh

Selma Flamel posted a comment on Sunday 4th March 2007 9:30am

Initiated with chocolate...that's my kind of initiation...though....hmmm

What does ‘the Lion’s Pride is roaring’ mean?

Excellent story.

Selma Flamel posted a comment on Sunday 4th March 2007 9:19am

The twins are wonderful. "BOWEL-Movement" How could you use such a pun? (ha ha)

Harry's speech to Minerva about her "children" was very heartwarming.

Favorite line: "Little creature, his brother was injured and we don’t know where to go."

Selma Flamel posted a comment on Sunday 4th March 2007 9:05am

You saved the library! Wonderful!

Favorite line: "After tonight, that young man will be a legend, whether he wants it or not."

Selma Flamel posted a comment on Sunday 4th March 2007 8:17am

I still don't think Ollivander is fully human, but I like him.

Minerva's appropriate punishment comment was on target. His last minutes would have been filled with terror.

So a half blood was supporting a half blood who preached pureblood superiority. Did anyone ever notice Voldemort sounds like Hitler. They both talk of a superior race, but neither would fit into their own idea of superior race (or blood).

Deanna Gail posted a comment on Sunday 4th March 2007 4:46am

Although I rarely review chapter to chapter, I wanted to say that I Love your story. And as much as I appreciate reading a well written story....I REALLY appreciate your "Pet Peeves".

I am SOOO happy to find actual authors, who have the SAME "Pet Peeves" I do!!!

Well Done!

Sikandar Durrani posted a comment on Saturday 3rd March 2007 6:27am

Even though this is the fourth time i have read this chapter i wanted to ask one thing? Taquella and Lime Jello....EWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!

Bad Picture....now i have to dryclean my brain for reading that.

Maleficus-lupus posted a comment on Friday 2nd March 2007 9:48am

*wince* I as usual spoke before double checking my facts, please ignore my usual idiocy.(except for the avid reader part)

Maleficus-lupus posted a comment on Friday 2nd March 2007 9:46am

Just a minor note, I think Millicent should have said "I LOWERED the Acromantula Barrier." Rather then: "I raised the Acromantula barrier." Since raised is usually thought of as meaning activated rather then deactivated.

Ever an avid fan,

Maleficus-lupus

james27 posted a comment on Thursday 1st March 2007 2:27am

I had no idea you guys wrote Dumbledore’s Army and Spiritus Crystalus! Those are are of my all time favorite fanfics!!

james27 posted a comment on Thursday 1st March 2007 12:30am

I was reading your online sobriety test and realized that I have a wireless mouse *sob* Oh well... I love your story and believe it to be one of the greatest HP fanfics out there.