jewels posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 11:26am

If you're sick of Voldemort, have him trip over a lump in the carpet and break his neck. Then move the rest of the story on without him. I'm sure you could write just as good a plot with the antagonists you've got already. Harry vs the Ministry, Harry vs the bigotry and prejudice, Harry vs Dumbledore and Co., Harry's gradual makeup with his friends, the complications of the Mutants and their dificulties... See, lots of stuff to work with.
Anyways, great story.

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Peter Clark posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 10:48am

I demand a refund. Or a donut. Either will do. ^_^

OK - on with the review: another superb chapter!

I also like the notion of taking the story in a non-Voldie direction. Just kill him in a random and pointless way that highlights that even basic Muggle technology can kick wizard arse. Maybe have Harry's jet malfunction and drop a turbine on him? :)

I am also UBER happy to see the two of you writing fics again, including the one-shots. You're my favourite fic writers. Actually, you may be my favourite writers!

So (and I know you hate this) please update! But I don't care what you post, so long as you post something.

Oh, and can I have the number for the Naked Donut Delivery Service?

adevilinthedark posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 10:04am

I can definitely understand your problem with Voldemort. Years and years of fan fiction have understandably drained potential creativity into "oh god, that again?"

I didn't really feel as though that would be much of problem in this story. It doesn't appear as though you plan to end it at Voldemort. Clearly, the wizarding world itself is a problem in your work. Taking just voldemort out seems a bit like cutting off a Hydra's head. We all know how well that works.

Either way, its good to see this updated. Now, does this site have an alert function? Or is it posted on a site that does have that function?

fyrecat posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 9:17am

...Hey, I want a refund! Everyone else is getting bailouts, we should at least be entitled to a refund!

Ah well. I understand the Voldemort issue. It's a tough nut to crack. You could always do the whole "He went off to meet his fate... After it was all over, Harry bought a condo on Waikiki beach and spent the rest of his life surfing." thing.

It's a bit anti-climactic, but it solves the whole issue of how to kill Voldie.
Now that that's solved, can we get more of the story?
Please?

knightsbridge posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 8:49am

While I'm one who tried to "suck-up" for another chapter of this story, simply because of the Mutant aspect I have to agree that Voldemort has had his time in the spotlight, and quite a few authors have just stopped writing fiction, or like Abraxan have published their own book.
Some fiction authors (am I allowed to to mention names?) such as hgfan1111 have written great work, and Voldemort is mentioned only in passing or in a short dream. There is nothing cheery about the works...Carry You Home is a bucket of tears work, and Away From The Sun, a wip, is a wonderful mystery.
I loved the Marriage law fic. Whatever and when ever you write, it's always good to see you...
Darian

CyrusMajin posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 8:48am

I don't have much to comment on about the chapter itself. It was well done but I'm not sure I can offer anything helpful in terms of advice for your writing.

I will, however, comment on your decision for where to go with this, other than to Voldemort. My thought is that crossovers offer a greater range of where you can set your end point, usually making your climax be either an original villain or one from the other source material.

Classically, for X-men the cliche is to use Magneto, though Apocolypse or Mr. Sinister would probably be better. However, with what you seem to be setting up here, I'm thinking any pro-human/anti-mutant villain group would be the best for your climax (Friends of Humanity, Church of Humanity, Genosha (w/ Cameron Hodge), etc.) Just a thought.

fyrecat posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 7:30am

I'm really loving this story so far!

There were a few editorial issues I noticed.

Minerva was lamenting her "lack of inaction" regarding Harry's upbringing.

Lack of inaction would have been action. That sentence needs to be fixed.

there were a few other minor issues, but I can't recall them at the moment.

Thanks for sharing yet another wonderful story with us.

I look forward to updates as soon as possible.

Cheers!

hatten_jc posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 7:14am

Why not write a twist. Let some bodyother person destroy Voldemore. ?

Voldepants perhaps found out about Harry being a Mutant and decied to investigate other mutants.

And perhaps made Arcopolips or some of the other big bad mutants notice him and his wizards.

mellow47 posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 5:08am

For whatever it's worth, I agree with you: hoe many times, and ways, must Harry do away with V? As long as that remains a main constituent of a Fanfic, then that Fanfic is constrained. For this story, I would think the main 'villain' is wizarding society as a whole (such as in Wizards Fall--great story, btw). I think it would be amusing for Harry to do away with V rather quickly in this story, he really is nothing more than a sub-plot. The main story is the reaction to Harry being a mutant, how he deals with it, how he, and his family deal with his mind-rape (good angle--never cared much for the Snape character) and whether or not Harry can 'forgive' the wizarding world and his friends (personally, I think Ron is a lost cause: being me, I would have dumped at the beginning of 4th year).

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 4:45am

A novel and well written story, but I'm finding it has a bit too much pressured forgiveness.

SarahSummers posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 4:01am

I love this story. I have read everything you have written here and on ff.net. I agree with you about the Voldomort stories. I read several challange fics about harry dying and being sent back in time by his personal grim reaper and enjoyed them immensily. Maybe a plot bunny can errupt for you and alex and Felur can be his love intrest instead of ginny or hermione. just a thought. Thanks for all the great storys. Sarah.....

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Mot70 posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 3:11am

Welcome back, it's good to see new stories/chapters from you! A carrot to consider for your "shy" plot bunnies: if you're needing a "large-scale" villain, does "Voles-in-his-shorts" really need to be the Black King (to use the chess comparison) all the time? Make him the Pawn that we know him to be, and "Build a Better Villain"! *grin*

That said, regardless as to which way you decide, may your keyboard always be home to worthwhile plot bunnies.... you keep writing 'em, we'll keep reading 'em!

crocket posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 12:47am

i think this is a great story .wouldnt it be great if the power he knew not was the mutant teleportation gene so to kill him he just teleported him to the moon.and then the story no longer is about harry and snakeface but how harry and the mutants join with wizards and help human norm accept them.I dont see why the story has to be harry verses mouldywort.This is a fan fic cant he kill tommy piddle fast and easy then drag deatheaters and stuff into scary and nasty ways of dying and use his influance to remove ministry and mybe create a mutant wizard world?.

Kim Patterson posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 12:29am

I love the new chapter and the character interaction contained there in. Forget Voldemort, write whatever direction you'd care to, there will always be plenty of us who enjoy the story you spin. Thanks again!

PaulKellington posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 12:19am

I really like the way you're dealing with Hagrid. He's not the brainless follower as he appears in so many fics. Once again, you take solid character traits and apply them in ways that make a story worth reading.

I understand you're notes about Voldemort and continuing this fic. I will say that I've not really even thought about Voldemort in this one. You've done a good job of telling the story and the conflicts Harry's going through. To that end, Voldemort is an afterthought.

I'm sure there are those that would disagree and claim that the battle between the two should be paramount. But, it seems to me, you are telling a different good vs evil tale and doing an excellent job of it.

Thanks for your time and efforts.

darkelf12 posted a comment on Monday 20th April 2009 12:15am

Dude, it's your story and you can take it anywhere you want, and I doubt any of us would care. We just like reading your work, because it is fun to read. You can write really funny when you want to, and then go as serious as Sunset and Sunrise. I like that in a writer. So if you think this needs to go somewhere else, then that is where it can go.

Peace.

Kokopelli posted a comment on Sunday 19th April 2009 10:54pm

As always, a pleasure.

I have great sympathy with your Voldemort plateau. Tom Riddle as Voldemort was JKR's weakest creation. So often Voldemort's lines sounded like Emperor Zurg from Toy Story.

Now, on to the niggling comments.

I was an avid reader of X-men in my highschool and college days - then I went into the US Air Force and had some appreciation for just how much maintenance went into jets - some of which deservedly were awarded the title "hangar queen." Assuming that Harry's jet is some variation on the Harrier (or the VTOL version of the F-35) it's an amazingly expensive plane to maintain, requiring hours of maintenance on a regular basis. Details like this, of course, are another example of real-life intruding into a good yarn, so I'll tell myself to shut-up now.

Glad to see that you're still writing - I'll read whatever you post, without regard to frequency or era.

J

STBgirl posted a comment on Sunday 19th April 2009 7:46pm

I'm glad your writing again. I spent a nice long relaxing tea break reading the new chapter and in some ways i perfectly understand why your fed up of Voldemort. He's been killed so many times by so many different people making his death original in any manner is getting more difficult by the day. Good luck and i look forward to the next chapter.

Patches posted a comment on Sunday 19th April 2009 5:24pm

Dear Bob, I am so glad to have another chapter of MS. I really like what you are doing in this story. Snape as truly evil is one story line I like. You have combined the X-men with HP in such a way that I find it completely enjoyable. I have read and reviewd all your shorts you have published lately. They were great fun. Thank you for that. I think it is great that Harry is doing so much learning about the Muggle world and the Wisardins world. It will take really smart people to make that crossover. Harry has a head start and He is doing great about it. I am glad he made up with Hermione. That was a good scene. Harry told her what he really felt about her views and let her know another fight right now would be the last. Hermione is pushy at the best of times. She needs to curtail her opionion sometimes and be a better listener. Harry needs Hermione and she needs him. They are too goood friends and they shouldn't lose that. I'm glad Ginny talked to Jean and then Hermione talked to Ginny. That gives her some good feed back from 2 different opinions. It helps her to see the bigger picture of who and what Harry is to her, the wizarding world and his friends. I understand why you are frustrated about "how to deal with Moldyshorts, again!" It could be something so simple as Harry blowing him away with a rocket from his jet! I know you could do a lot more with that idea than I can imagine. Just trying to help if you don't mind. I won't be offended if you don't use it. Thanks again for sharing your tallent. I love everything you write. pms