By Bobmin
Reviews
Vilkath posted a comment on Monday 29th June 2009 8:27am
Well this is one the better HP/Xmen stories I have read, and thankfuly not slash like oh so many of them these days. That being said I am slightly disapointed that Harry too the Xmen aproach to enemies.. ignoriing them while they cause more trouble and misery for others. Oh Dumbledore did all these evil things, gets caught on it.. and nearly no fall out from the actions.
Other then that it's okay, the planned pairing is a bit anoying but I can live with it. Harry/Ginny is a bit wierd pairing to put in this fic considering it was placed before 6th year, before they even dated or talked to eachother really. So harry had no connection to Ginny really, yet she betrayed him.
So why would Harry chose her over any other girl in hogwarts of the Xmen universe? That just seems like one the weak parts this story. Considering there is hardly an unatractive female mutant in the whole Xmen universe.. it's sad to see a cross over story stick with canon pairing.
Tracey1 posted a comment on Friday 26th June 2009 11:15am
This story has me so intrigued. I just re-read the whole thing just to get to this chapter. I just read the conversation between Ginny and Hermione and suddenly saw Bobs Special Note and thought NOOOOoooooo!!!! This cant be the end of the chapter! I sincerely hope you dont lose interest in this story all together. I am anxious to see some more of Jeans muggle studies lessons. I dont follow the xmen so the only 2 characters I knew were Xavier and Logan. I like the addition of the characters from that universe and how you have put them in the context of the Potterverse. I really dont know what else to say except well done. I eagerly await the next installment.
memnoch541 posted a comment on Wednesday 24th June 2009 4:09pm
Loved the wizards fall update, re-reading this again, so I guess this review should fall in the wizards fall reviews.. but I digress. Re-reading the wizards notes here and all your stories... (I re-read your stories all the time because I love them...) I haven't actually even read the harry potter books but know enough about them via movies and audiobooks to know you took the HP universe into a wonderful direction. And with the last installment of wizards fall.. with your bunnies prevailing, and a hope you'll continue this story without letting it hang in limbo... kill voldy easy with a simple way of the "power her not knows" as harry simply teleporting into voldies body and becoming corpeal. Then carry on the story as you see fit... we're in AU.. so no horcruxes or some such garbage.. dead is dead.
digger posted a comment on Tuesday 23rd June 2009 2:16am
have the aurors kill the bastard. have the wizarding world get hit by a clue by 4 and they beat him. have him attack the royal family and have the boys at hereford (sas) deal with him. i really don't care just give us some more of this story.
Harriverse posted a comment on Sunday 21st June 2009 4:43am
You've brought up a very good point--how many ways can you skin a Voldy? Your level of expertise as a writer means that I will read anything you write for the sheer pleasure of an intricate story, even if you can't find a new way to cook the Snake. After all, doesn't snake taste like chicken? What makes Mutant Storm so nice is that Harry was interacting with a new set of characters and so a new world was created to play in. But just like you said, it is a story about Harry Potter so you've brought him back to the 'old stompin grounds'. Unless you want to bring more mutants into Hogwarts or the DE's and therefor invent a reason to better intertwine the two uni's, I think I don't know really anyway I can help you out of your dilemma with the Potterverse: Voldy is the bad-guy JK invented. Your capture of the Mutant cast is spot on and quite enjoyable. Maybe Harry can kill him quick and go be an X-Man? So, I'll just worship you from afar and eat lots of butterscotch oatmeal cookies in you honor. Say hi to you writing partner for me!
tmp059237 posted a comment on Wednesday 17th June 2009 2:31am
Here are my 2 cents for the continuation of this story.
<SPOILER>
After some time, the Muggles discover the Wizarding World, with the constructed explanation that witches & wizards are mutants and nothing else. Dumbledore is demoted with cause, and finds himself in an isolated retirement home for the innocently crazy, sedated and minus a wand.
Enraged by the exposure, Voldemort starts to intensify his actions against the muggles, even participating personally to raids. In one of those, he finds himself pitted against some mutants who kill him.
The prophecy isn't true (Trelawney was a real fraud), but the Horcruxes thing is real. Now that some Death Eaters know how to revive him, they adapt the ritual further, and Voldemort finds himself a new body. He now has 5 lives left - while he's ghost-like, you can have Voldemort see the world in cascades of green symbols, hinting at another crossover ;-)
Through some Death Eater's boasts, Dumbledore learns of Voldie's death-and-return-to-life. He wants to return to his former glory as a Dark Lord killer. Through a brief surge of mental power, he gets the man's wand, frees himself, and seeks Voldemort. They fight, and kill each other somehow (gas pipe ? train wreck ? both are woefully ignorant of the muggle world - LV has 4 lives left)
Learning about each other's world can lead to meetings in person. The bad guys find each other: Voldemort, Magneto, etc. They try to unite, but fight in their deluded sense of self-importance (and conflicting goals). Some bad guy kills LV creatively (3 lives left)
The bad guys recruit some of the lawful evil Death Eaters, while a revived Voldemort recruits some chaotic evil mutants (compare the alignments).
During this, the forces of good/light meet and unite (captain Britain comes to the fore for... er... Britain I think ;-). They encounter some of the bad guys and even dispatch Voldemort - whose soul is so fractured that he can't split it further, and he is also weaker and weaker the more he dies. While LV is waiting for a revival, the good guys find one of his Horror-crux and destroy it (1 life left).
In a massive battle at a life-sustaining space station construction site (muggles aided by magic start going in outer space, and have wands slowly become lightsabers - ala Rorshach's Chemistry - hinting at yet another crossover), Voldemort is finally killed by falling debris, leaving only a footnote in the Grand Scheme of Things.
</SPOILER>
Louix
Shadalarion2 posted a comment on Monday 15th June 2009 8:43am
Reading this story again. Like to point out 2 things.
Bill Weasly. : Is not Bill an employee of Gringotts? Running off to tell Dumbles is a violation of the oath he took when he is working at the bank. He needs to be punished by the Goblins for violating his oath to Gringotts. Maybe lose his magic and lose his access to his vaults for life.
Harry's Scar: Remove the stupid thing. Get the American Mages to remove that curse scare. He still keeps his abilities to talk to snakes and getting rid of his lightning bolt scar will annoy dumbles to no end and make snakeface cower in fear.... since on the plus side getting rid of the scar removes his connections to volemort's mind which dumbles wants to leave in place. Makes sense to remove it...
Drifter950 posted a comment on Sunday 14th June 2009 10:31pm
GRIN, Demand a refund? Heck no. Harry's finialy told the wizard world to stick, and your story of how they get him to care again is well worth the wait.
I love the way your expanding your characters to be more responsible and understanding. Even in canon, it was rare that a character even understood what the personal problems were. Harry usually forgave without any penitence.
Anyway, thanks for the very interesting read. I am putting this story in my browsers favorites file to check periodically (since I can't find a story alert (yet)).
May the MUSE always be with you!!!
~!^
james27 posted a comment on Thursday 4th June 2009 5:29pm
When I first started reading fanfiction, and I mean in a 'spending ever free minute reading' kind of way, Dumbledore's Army and Spiritus Crystalis were two of my favorites, and for the most part they still are.
I've been a fan of yours for so long that I'd follow this story in any direction you wish to take it like a lost puppy. I'd follow ANY story you wrote just because I know I'll enjoy it, you haven't posted a single story I haven't. To date only one other author had done the same and that's Jeconais.
In the end I suppose it doesn't matter what you do to old Voldie. You could simply push him off a tower, have him choke on a Lemon Drop, have Dobby kill him, have him slip getting out of the bath, or just give him a VD like crabs or herpes and make him a bit of a joke. It doesn't matter to me, just please keep writing and posting!
~James
P.S. Is there actually anything 'standard' about your Standard Disclaimer? I swear, I find myself looking forward to an update for those every bit as much as I did the actual post.
Bob Swagger posted a comment on Thursday 4th June 2009 1:28am
I hope you update this again soon It's an interesting fiction. Very well done :) Will Harry ever come into contact with the rest of the "Mutant High" group?
Starlingswings posted a comment on Sunday 24th May 2009 6:12am
I really love the fic, but I understand about running out of ways to kill Voldemort. It's the reason why I mostly stick to reading HP fics instead of writing them now. Would you be willing to write a post-Voldemort X-Men crossover? You're a great writers, and that might keep your attention.
Ian Morgan posted a comment on Thursday 21st May 2009 7:29pm
If you want to finish voldemort of early and then take the story wrer you want it to go.
i love all your storys and would love to see were you could take this story universe
rede30325 posted a comment on Wednesday 20th May 2009 1:42pm
Look totally agree with you on Voldy actually wish there were more post Voldy stories. But I will likely enjoy this story however it end up.
thyrokio posted a comment on Saturday 16th May 2009 3:05pm
OMg Kingsley shooting at Jean was the worst thing that could possible happen for the order.
GOod work
thyrokio posted a comment on Saturday 16th May 2009 1:48pm
Pretty neat powers he has, so hes come close to being evil but he's being led back to ''the light''?
Good work
Arvin Betancourt posted a comment on Saturday 16th May 2009 6:46am
please,please,please,PLEASE!!!!! don't abandon this story. I've been waiting for a rezally good crossover story fo this two genres and this is the BEST.
prateek91 posted a comment on Friday 15th May 2009 1:32pm
loving this story.keep up the good work!!!!!
Sankara posted a comment on Thursday 14th May 2009 6:55pm
"All of those stories have dealt with the issue of Voldemort. In fact I have a number of very large plot bunnies that will never see the light of day because of Voldemort. Frankly it's become rather old and hard to come up with new and interesting ways of killing off the bugger."
Then may I suggest just not worrying? Most of the stories I write are all about Harry/Hermione/Luna/Ginny/etc, and Voldemort is rarely seen. Generally he only appears in the final battle, because the stories *aren't* about him - they are about the good guys (and Ron).
So (as an example) make this story about Harry, Ginny, Hermione, Luna, Jean and company, and have "the final battle" as a minor plot thing - just something that happens at the end of a chapter. No big build up, no angst or hand-wringing chaos. He just goes out and kills him, then moves on with his life.
It's worked pretty well for me.
j_finchfletchley posted a comment on Thursday 14th May 2009 12:06am
Phew, five chapters read and five essay reviews posted in one day — haven't done that for a while. A bit jarring at first to see you've skipped straight to the school, makes sense really though considering that everything you needed to accomplish in the summer break has been done. I got the feeling that Harry would be arriving at school in the jet, and it was a suitably entertaining entrance — again the wizarding world's backward nature is revealed with the purebloods not knowing what a mobile phone was or a jump jet. The only thing that bothered me was the description of the dive, with him pulling out with 100 feet to spare; at that speed this distance is a fraction of a second, so I'd think that Scott would have taught him better here. Even the crack aerobatics teams set a "deck" when they're performing their displays to impress the crowds, below which they don't perform any high risk manoeuvres. While I think Scott would be quite happy for Harry to perform aerobatics at a reasonable altitude, and to buzz the school at low altitude, the low level pull-out from his crash dive would probably class as high risk — if even the slightest thing goes wrong with your plane at that height in such a high speed manoeuvre, you have no chance of correction before you slam into the ground. Maybe it's just me, but while Jean may not notice, not being as familiar with flying, I think Scott would seriously chastise him for that one; it's not a toy to show off but a serious piece of hardware that he could kill himself and any bystanders with.
Love Harry's put-down of Snape though, as well as Hagrid's kick up the backside for Ron and the gang. Good to see some development from Ginny — she's at least starting to realise that Harry won't be happy living in some replica of The Burrow, isolated from the perks and comforts of the regular world while working at some desk in the Ministry. I was a little disappointed in Hermione though — with first her critical approach to him and second the fact that she should have seen the look of hurt when she refused his offer of a flight and at least tried to show that she's willing to help repair their friendship. Serious kudos for the way you wrote Luna though — most people have a lot of difficulty writing her conversations, either turning her into some mystical daughter of the faeries who's statements about strange things and creatures are all true, or turning her into a complete and utter lunatic. JKR herself seriously disappointed me when she ridiculed her character for the sake of providing cheap humour in the Quidditch match in HBP.
Harry's new attitude is something to behold. It makes sense that he's no longer willing to be the one who takes everything on himself, and I feel that his antagonism with Snape will come to boiling point sooner rather than later. I sincerely hope you don't fall back on a repeat of the way you handled Dumbledore knowingly keeping a Death Eater in the castle in Spiritus Crystalis, with an innocent student being killed. While it was powerful that time, it would be nice to see something new, with it only coming back to bite Dumbledore himself on the backside, further damaging his trust with Harry or causing problems with the Ministry.
With regard to the difficulty you have with Voldemort in your A/N, might I suggest that you don't really deal with him in this if it bothers you so and affects your ability to write. Marginalise his actions, have the fear he's causing limited to a few hand-wringing statements from the press, Order and Ministry, and focus on the parts you enjoy — developing the relationships and the issues caused by the merging of the two universes. You've always taken a "close the bedroom door" approach to sex, so why not take a "close the Blackbird's hatch" approach to Voldemort. Have the end of one scene being the X-Men taking off to deal with him, Harry adjusting uncomfortably to his new X uniform, and the next him brooding in front of the fireplace the next day, or waking from a nightmare a week or two after the fact, the deed having been done. Then you can focus on his ongoing relationship with Charles, Logan, Jean and Scott, and how it's affected him. Screw anyone who wanted yet another big battle scene — if you don't like writing Voldemort, then don't; if Professor X can bring Dumbledore to his knees with a thought, then it should be no problem for him to locate Voldemort with Cerebro, form a strike team and job done!
Looking forward to seeing where you take this one from here. Despite the fact that I put a number of criticisms in my reviews, I hope I've managed to put them forward as genuinely constructive ones on what are essentially minor issues, and convey the fact that I really am loving the story you're telling here; I now have two HP/X-Men stories that I've enjoyed.
Vilkath posted a comment on Monday 29th June 2009 11:07am